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    30 days of Azriel.



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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Good way to shake off some rust,

    Day 1



    Stars stagnate in nights unmade bed,
    I believe.

    Smoke signals;
    you are here in nicotine form,
    not once, yet
    twice rubbed out.

    Wail pollution to the skyline
    you, black dress and star sapphire.
    Text's and "x x" on the phone;
    Dial tone,
    ends, like a cry
    in the cyclone.

    Matrimony, happiness, eternity;
    Still where it was when you were
    where I am.





    never thought you'd miss the blueprints in my eyes.


    s c y t s o p h r e n i a

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Eerie how fitting this is for me tonight.

    You opened this up with such a lovely image. And I felt the ending tied nicely into where you began... the stars, unchanging in the sky remaining as a constant in the same way the feelings endure.

    Much enjoyed.

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    This was very different. But as I recall you have an extremely unique style of writing but I really like it. A solid piece that anyone can relate to. You grabbed my attention with the first line and kept it throughout, there were many layers to this piece and that's what kept it interesting.

    Thanks for the read.

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Day 2



    Oscar Wilde's theory
    conceived;
    You/Me joined as one.

    Rewinding time,
    so we can enjoy sublimity;
    - holding conversation
    at one side
    of this mountain.

    I shall embrace you,
    holding me up on stills
    at the highest point
    of my life.

    What goes up, comes down;
    I am floating on air,
    so you will be ok tonight.

    Me/You
    you brood, I answer
    and everything you recite,
    I deify.

    Because there are words,
    I say,
    love me.





    never thought you'd miss the blueprints in my eyes.


    s c y t s o p h r e n i a

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Day 3
    04/03/2011.
    the day you passed.


    I cannot dismiss how you acted
    when you knew what was done by you.
    Your gift's to me;
    Smashed helicopters,
    in bits like the memories of us.

    We disagreed;
    my uncle hitting my mum
    you stood by,
    and I did not stand for it.

    That day, the person you were
    hit home.

    I am rid of you 'Nana'
    These words were for you mum.




    (sorry if this piece isn't all it should be, it was a case of my getting these feels out asap)



    never thought you'd miss the blueprints in my eyes.


    s c y t s o p h r e n i a

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Day 4


    Lay hands on a chest that beats for you.
    You are nervous, like I
    an as sweat seeps from skin;
    I am clean.

    Eight hours ago
    - Midnight cried out out,
    bells flayed the air, a toxin
    infecting me
    with novel intimacy.

    It's infectious, the feeling of you and me,
    palm to palm and thoughts
    of sweet sacrifice.

    This body, a host for kisses
    and gentle swerving of her hair,
    with fingertips inlaid in gold.

    We dance on a vermilion floor;
    Passion bleeding out
    footprints;
    - Leaving a serenade behind us.






    never thought you'd miss the blueprints in my eyes.


    s c y t s o p h r e n i a

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    Re: 30 days of Moana

    Day 5


    Turn me on.
    I am a dripping tap,
    so pray emotion flows
    through these pipes,
    Find's its way to the nerve center
    of a red blooded type-writer.

    30 day's of spilling mistakes,
    - recollections favor my finger, snapping
    back and forth
    on these letters of dirt.

    Disgrace, at what will be or what will wait,
    lost in the translations of my vessels.
    Who said, the grass is greener on the other side?
    Fur lined tongue,
    I cannot interpret how I feel about you.





    never thought you'd miss the blueprints in my eyes.


    s c y t s o p h r e n i a

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    Re: 30 days of Azriel.

    Day 6.


    Holy Shit! We are alive.


    Communication restrained
    - sparse cries trigger nerve endings,
    notions come to life, though stem at fingertips.


    The idle one;
    Sitting on an island leveling life boats
    with a ten pound hammer.


    Karma occurs - dancing round a fire
    at am, wearing nothing but a Savell Row suite and
    exquisite shoes.


    Eating with fingers, let alone without manners;
    Fact is, I cannot be arsed to dress my rock.


    Formulate "help" in the sand?
    I would rather write "piss off and stay away"
    or "beware of the dog"


    No man is an island,
    But; Is it not
    mans intuition to conceive a castle and misplace the key!
    I ate mine, and liberation tastes worthily.


    I would offer you a chair but I do not want you to stay.
    Do like that seagull that debarked,
    emptied it's gut
    and was away before vesper.

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    Re: 30 days of Azriel.

    Day 7.


    A World Without Heroes
    Inspired by 'Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs.'


    I am not John Holt;
    I am Abraham Maslow,
    sitting at the depths of my pyramid.


    A hierarchy of people who passions
    favor mine,
    foundations pulped
    like a butterflies wings,
    miss-shaped, broken, as I am.


    I hold tight dreams, though proven,
    Psychology is born in humanities perception.
    Finding self-actualization,
    holistic opinion mimics spineless glass;
    Cracked and depleted
    when set to accomplish something greater.


    To be me;


    I need to taste you
    - love and be loved,
    have sex with the lights off
    so I am never unmasked.


    We built our fort from candy-hearts
    and a roof from ultrasound pictures.
    Reciting days
    when you're light did not shine,
    you shot an arrow through my heart
    rescuing me.


    The end of my life, serves the start of ours.
    I promise to be me;
    Husband, father and friend.


    I am no Albert Einstein
    but I know the standard of life.
    I will not rest until harmony and I,
    shake hands
    at the very top of my pyramid.

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