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    Last edited by abiona; April 2nd, 2011 at 10:44 PM
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    Re: 30 days of abi

    day 1

    Break me down
    into words.
    Feelings fashioned into passages
    scrawled 'cross screens
    for audiences to pick apart
    once again.

    It will take pages of days
    to strip away the many ways
    I hide within the lines;
    reason and rhyme
    competing for a chance
    at sanity.

    Reality
    becomes most clear
    when we are broken.


    And so we don our best dresses,
    wrapping the wounds
    with satin gauze,
    readying ourselves for the moment
    when it all becomes stripped away.

    I play you like a song
    flipped on repeat,
    needle stuck in groove,
    tongue stuck in cheek.
    And now it's time for you and I,
    poetry,
    to dance.


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    It is faultless.
    The line breaks and scheme was perfect, your writing was smooth right up to the end.
    It brought out some emotions that gave me the idea to write about some of my old wounds (day 1 poem) so for that I thank you. The last stanza was perfection as far as I'm concerned.



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    Re: 30 days of abi

    I'm excited to get to read something recent from you, Abi. I hate leaving feedback on people who don't need it, but I really found this to be a great poem. Moana pretty much hit the nail on the head w/ what he said and I hate being redundant. But your line breaks were the icing on the cake. The emotion was great and the imagery was extremely vivid. Thanks for the read, and sorry for this lack of feedback lol.

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    Re: 30 days of abi

    day 2



    Primal Scream

    Catacomb Cathy,
    this woman is a tomb.
    Echoing voices
    leaking out through pores
    into rivulets of reminders
    running into her corners.
    Doors that open to empty rooms
    filled with the ghosts
    of those who've left.

    She splits herself
    like hairs,
    victimology collected
    at the nape of the neck,
    a noose to hang herself
    on her own separation anxieties.

    We fill the holes of absence
    with regret,
    collecting memories into boxes
    to remind us
    we were once whole.
    Hoarding shards of glass
    from former reflections
    that prick from beneath the skin.

    What sins are locked behind her doors?
    What faces haunt
    her midnight hours?
    Their portraits drip heavy with tears
    until watery paint
    clouds her eyes.

    And as she feels the emptiness
    crawling inside,
    is it any surprise
    when she screams?




    yeah, i double dipped today. lol
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    day 3

    last night
    as the rivers of my eyes moaned
    i found myself
    naked and shaking,
    wings stripped away,
    a featherless bird
    in a gilded cage
    of my own creation.

    there is nothing left
    and there will be nothing more.
    nowhere to go
    for here
    is not where
    you are
    and i am alone
    with this sorrow
    once again.
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    day 4

    I have learned to speak
    in constellations;
    gaze skyward,
    looking for answers
    that have gone missing
    from your eyes.
    For sometimes,
    they are vacant
    and I lose myself in tunnels
    searching through mazes
    trying to find you
    and bring you home.

    I remember
    the night we met.
    Your arm through mine,
    and how I felt more alive
    than the city streets
    we walked along.
    We seemed to glow
    and though fully clothed,
    I have never felt so naked.
    Humbled
    by my own vulnerability.

    Where do you go
    when you lose yourself
    and why can I
    not draw the map
    that will draw you
    out of this chasm.
    I'm lost here, in the darkness
    no flashlight
    no candle
    no wings to wrap around you
    and fly you out of this place.

    Just a vacuum
    suffocating the air
    in which we have built
    our dreams.
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    day 5

    A bitter pill to swallow,
    these words, they get stuck in throats,
    choking back reality
    like tears
    hovering
    on a blinking lid.
    Precarious situations
    tread lightly on tightropes
    balancing
    future fantasies
    with past fallacies,
    arms outstretched,
    heavy with the weight
    of all our words carry.

    We're dancing with the devil,
    you and I,
    tiptoeing around issues
    to keep us
    from losing footing,
    following steps
    that lead us in circles
    around the truth.

    Truth is,
    we falter with forgiveness,
    holding tight to the walls
    that keep us
    from eventually caving in.

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    day 6

    Medieval love affair -
    crowned you king of my castle
    in ceremonies
    attended only
    by shadows
    that clung to bedroom walls.

    My knight on horseback,
    I rode you,
    deep into sunsets
    until we collapsed,
    a perfect blend of
    sweat and skin
    that formed a tapestry
    in monument
    to our story.
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    day 7

    The bottle holds many faces
    messages from yesterdays
    bobbing in a see of memories.
    I drink them to remember
    all the many times
    I've failed.

    Drunk on the past
    these midnight musings
    stumble through hazy scenes
    A trip down memory lane,
    it seems,
    is always longer
    in the absence of sobriety.

    The bottle holds many faces
    yet erases the days
    that joined them
    days spent wishing a drink
    could erase
    the ways I felt
    dissolved in oblivion.

    A somber routine
    of sip and swallow,
    until all that remains is your face
    at the bottom of the bottle,
    reminding me why I stopped drinking
    in the first place.
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    day 8

    talisman.

    tuck you into my pocket
    for safe-keeping,
    fold you
    into the space
    between pillow and sheet
    so as not to lose you
    when you are gone;

    the night is long
    and there are many battles
    still to fight.
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    day 9

    hang ups


    words fall on deaf ears
    like stones
    skipped across a darkened lake
    skirting the surface
    before sinking to forgotten depths
    to collect at your feet.

    and all I can ask
    is for a back
    that is strong enough,
    a heart that beats
    loud enough,
    and two hands
    to hold on long enough
    to keep me
    hanging on.

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    Re: 30 days of abi

    >mfw there are going to be 21 more posts.

    But I have to say I don't know much about/appreciate Poems or whatever, but this is pretty fucking good.. Like.. really fucking good

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    Uggh. I'm slippin. brb.


    And thank you Bongkers. :]
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    day 10

    gravity...

    ...and a world on its head,
    I have walked in circles
    down these streets
    before.

    Followed them
    to the sidewalk's end
    and dove in.

    We don't fall in love-
    we leap.
    Spreading wings
    to fly on winds of faith
    and praying
    the ground below
    does not rise to meet us.

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