Temptation!!!

[KdtheKing]

Im laced with diamonds,got golds in my mouth
I appear to have money aint that what its all about//
I do it for the bitches and i do it for the south
Cause where i come from its so hard to get out//
Desiring the riches while implying im the sickest
Thats just the way it is just surviving competition//
My minds been gone I dont even try to fix it
Cause i love the way it feels waking up to different bitches//
Call me what you want i bet i been that before
I can change a catholic lady to a Las vegas whore//
Im known to be a Mac so i manipulate of course
I make temptation look great like driving in a porsche//


Just a short quick rhyme bout 10 mins..just a warm up..tell me what u think

[TheStraightMan]

That rhyme likes wieners, so it went to Las Vegas to marry a man

Squint for that reply, Professor Plum.

Do you actually have a Porsche?
Do you actually have a bunch of diamonds and gold teeth?

If no, stop writing slanderous lies.

If yes, you should've invested that money in gold on the stock market. You would've made a killing.


Other than that, this sounds like another one of those generic songs you'd find on the radio.

[KdtheKing]

Well i guess thats a compliment....thx

[TheStraightMan]

I just made a statement. I'm working on making my responses more constructive.

I personally don't like most of the stuff that's called "rap" on the radio these days, but I'm old school as hell. Stuck in my ways.

[KdtheKing]

Well your entitled to your opinion

[TheStraightMan]

And somehow got it to come out in a non-offensive way. I'm proud. I've never done this in my life. I'm gonna smoke a massive bowl packing in celebration. Go grab some bud and do likewise, you generic-rapping turtle, you.

[KdtheKing]

Well it seems like u judge a book by its cover...i can write in many genres and perceptions...and ill smoke some chronic lata

[TheStraightMan]

Honestly, if you write about more diverse and relevant topics and spell your words out correctly and incorperate proper sentence structure, then that'd be something.

[KdtheKing]

Ill do one just for u buddy

[TheStraightMan]

I'm intrigued to see the end result.

[KdtheKing]

UPPIN for FEEd

[Extinctor Draconis]

you need to read the rules

Basically you're going to need 3 feedback links. Giving feedback is real simple: just find 3-5 things you like about a piece and then write 1-2 sentences on each.

Also you went below the minimum line amount. add like 3 more lines and we can keep this open; if you don't it's going to be closed by today

[TheStraightMan]

Or he will attempt BAD SEXUAL INTERCOURSE OF THE NO-NO VARIATION

[queen813]

ummmmmmm nice try i guess lol real talk blood now u know and i know dis shit was wack but hey gotta give u a A for effort talkin bout turning nuns to las vegas whores lol dats just crazy.......

[Tool]

hello

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...652/index.html

gbye.