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    monkeypoet
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    Exclamation letting you know

    you cant accept me or anyone
    for who they are or want to be
    but i see that its time to stop lying
    and let you see the real me

    for me every day is acting
    for i cant show my true feelings
    the sadness i feel when i see a dead man on tv
    or the anger i feel when i see a 11 year old boy doing dangerous dealings

    the distress i feel daily
    for what it seems no reason at all
    the confusion that consumes me
    when i ponder if will we all have to fall

    but you dont care what i feel
    because i am nothing to you
    im just another errend to carry out
    another child from another man you knew

    you label all your children
    and expect us to follow your guidelines
    but im done watching
    and seeing my life pass from the sidelines

    you cant accept
    anything that i am
    well im going to tell you now
    because your pressure has unlocked my dam

    that i kept inside of me
    all these long years
    no more will i bottle my tru feelings inside
    just so at night i can cry silent tears

    but i cant find a way to let u know
    because i cant just write this down and click 'send'
    and come to think of it, i cant see
    if these words even mean anything to you in the end

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    ~*Lil' Miss Caramel*~ Calisto's Avatar
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    dis iz PAPISWIFEY im just on my girl's name cuz RB wont let me log in. but i thought dis was a tight piece and i was feelin it. i caint say i know exactly wherre ur comin from but pretty close. like i said dis was tight. keep it up. much luv and respect 2 ya.

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    "...For life is not a paragraph.
    And death I think is no parenthesis"-E.E. Cummings

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    monkeypoet
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    papiswifey: thanks for the reply... im glad u can relate... it makes the poems more real if more peeps relate.. love to ya

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    this was anotha great drop. played your content out with great wordplay and imagery. its almost becomin a joy to read your stuff, cause rite now its just a pleasure. peace to ya.
    joey

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    monkeypoet
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    thanks joey, its nice to know THAT EVERYONE ISNT SLEEPING! lol... u always read it and i thank u for it...love ot ya

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    Certified Like A COW Varentao's Avatar
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    this was a real heavy piece....the way you strucutre your pieces now make them even better to read...very well put...very strong emotions....and deep too..

    .. - the phoenix is down, living in a hellish reality of ashes and dust and cold....but the phoenix digs deep....summoning power and the will to carry on...rising from the ashes to the fore...for it knows that no one can truly keep it down...for it is too strong...too 'GOOD' to do so... - ....stay strong monkey...and whenever you fall...dig deep within...summon that will and power you have...and rise from the ashes of desolate darkness....into the light that always shines bright...

    ..respect...
    I'm too secure to have a signature.

    Oh.

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    monkeypoet
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    varentao: thank u from the depths of my heart... ill keep that advice with me for a LONG time... and as always, u support my poetry and i thank u for it... unline many others, u give tru advice on the piece, or how the person is feelin in general... thank u... love to ya

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