Hey guys been writing raps for a bout a year and a half or something and this was my first real attempt at a poem so i know it might not be up to standards it might even belong in OM i can move it if you want but i just wanted some feedback on it (:
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Chains on my feet chains of Cold steel
Chains i cant see chains i cant feel
i know there there yeah yeah i know there there where? here
Chains on my hands chains of Control
Chains i cant grab Chains i cant hold
Chains on my back Chains of Compulstion
Chains i cant snap chains cant be broken
i know there there yeah yeah i know there there where? here
Chains on my neck Chains of agression
Chains i cant rip these Chains cant be messed with
Chains i cant see Chains keep me here like a rock
Chains i could leave at anytime because there's no lock...