forgotten lie, hidden truth

[soulstice.]

The dogma sits and begs for scraps
wagging it's tale back and forth
like it's done a hundred times

At this point in time; PETA would be furious with us
If we ever were to reach him at the gates.

What was a temple now is just a bad slam cafe
Where hound-dogs headline with their swan song
Thinking a masterpiece can just be summoned
under the looming shadow of death

Most nights the regulars just spin a tired metaphor
Fire and horns; sure as your born
a sinner. Same syllables bouncing off the peeling paint chips
can't keep up with this changing world
Don't they know sex sells- or at least the carnage of a train wreck
could catch the eye of a lost sheep

her howls to the moon outside a condemned soul house
are greeted by a cold
SHUT THE FUCK UP I'M TRYING TO SLEEP
WITH A STRANGER

it's more of an afterthought than a forgotton lie
or a hidden truth.
and we only resort to it when we're sure it doesn't exist

Mostly we just live in an eternal autumn
Wearing masks, sitting beneath psalm trees
gathering loose leaves from old books..
..thrown together in a hole-filled tarp
to return to dust for the winter.

Mostly we try to fuck the stars with a goliath spire
Our unsteadied rifles spilled first oil
Mother Nature shouldn't dress like that; so beautiful
so... calling to be conquered

We'll stay building an eternal colossus
warnings fall on deaf ears
like mortar bricks on empty heads

This will be the new(est) testament
to Mankind's limitless capacity
for perfection

and fault

we all aspire to greatness
endless cycles of ambition
but history repeats itself, apparently..

While we shine the plaque of Ozymandias
we babylon about
trying to
touch
God.

[soulstice.]

yesir

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...440/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...924/index.html

[Spoken Deity]

one more link . After the link, I'll give a solid breakdown.
Do you read freud?

[soulstice.]

I've scratched the surface, and by that I mean I've hardly scratched the surface.

[Primum]

Freud is right. The biblical images combine with a sort of sexual naturalism was cool. In opinion, they are the highlights of the whole poem. A few things didn't fit to me and can probably be explained. "Under the looming shadow of death." Where is that coming from? In fact, that entire stanza is off to me. Is it saying the temple is now just nihilistic feeling? People just spewing shit for the sake of emotion, thinking they're doing something important?
Anyway, outside of what I didn't understand, I thought things were great. Really great images, consistent language, an interesting narrative voice. It was all there. The fucking the stars/goliath spire was brilliant. Just deep, intelligent image right there.
You do such a good job of not being so strait forward that I'm bored... you make inferences.

Fun piece.

[soulstice.]

Hidden Content:

the first bits were about the church.

peta was peter, dogma was church belief.. showing us the story of jesus, hence why tale=tail. what used to be a house of worship has become a bad slam cafe, is like when people used to go to church to sincerly worship (sincere worship = good poetry), nowadays people who have sinned (hound dogs, thought it rolled off the tounge) go to church before they die, or ask for forgiveness before death - aka try to make good poetry under the pressure of death.

the entire poem was about

Hidden Content:

, well, not neccessarily, people fading away from the church or the messages of it, or even just religion in general, but even more general - goodness and what truly matters. more important to the masses is to build the greatest things they can, like the tower of babylon, and trying to become perfect, like God. sort of an ironic thing, i guess.

[Primum]

nice... then I like this. A bit more cryptic than the rest of the piece, but great.

[soulstice.]

thanks dude

[soulstice.]

where are you bitches