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"Population Control"
"Youth is wasted on the young."
- George Bernard Shaw
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"Population Control"
"Youth is wasted on the young."
- George Bernard Shaw
Last edited by Northern Beggar; December 14th, 2010 at 05:35 PM
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Scytsophrenia
On that next level.. but STILL fuckin' crazy.
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can i get an extension?
"During their four years in power, the Khmer Rouge overworked and starved the population, at the same time executing selected groups who had the potential to undermine the new state (including intellectuals or even those that had stereotypical signs of learning, such as glasses) and killing many others for even breaching minor rules."
they say that history repeats; dont take it lightly; listen....
this is food for thought to curb an apetite for destruction...
Food For Thought
By: Northern Beggar
there are rich and poor, big and small, thin and wide
there's the brighter side but then we have the gen-o-cide
started in seventy-five; that's when the plot would thicken
home's where the heart is yet we're trapped in hell's kitchen
couldnt smell what they were cooking so we sound and cheered
a resounding spark...that started out our foulest years...
they would warn of attacks...a propoganda act
in other words, it's Pol POT calling the kettle black
held in the act their control was created by fear;
as they would spoon-fed us all these half-baked ideas
terrorizing civilians..with claims of bomb threats
fitting of Khmer Rouge the way they painted the town red
knowledge are down kept; trace were death impose
penalties were set on those who made a......."spectacle"
so contempt and human waste replaced room with a full view
cuz literally, we sat and fuckin stewed in their own juice
abused by our own. truth? we'd fight to survive....
but starvation meant it's hard to take a bite outta crime
it's appetite for destruction; hundreds' beaten n' battered
anarchist cookbook couldnt piece this recipe for disaster
believing strength in numbers, many counted their blessing
but if u are what u eat...then we amounted to nothing!
thousands were sent to rice fields as senseless slaves!
the results were death if you went against the grain
stench of pain had us praying "Please Buddha save us
from starvation"...we couldn't enjoy our...fruits of labor
so we chewed on the fact that we're fighting with luck
cause its either...u bite the bullet...or ur biting the dust
so bite ur tongue....despite the sad dramas and tears
vea mean kabut yurng mean chantak anah mote cheang?*
placed in hell's kitchen we would dwell as restless souls
growing bitter; revenge was a dish best served cold
i would pester my folks 'bout how they managed escape
but the mere thought would prompt a bad aftertaste
the truth's hard to swallow; maybe not knowing is best
cause sometimes food for thought....can be hard to digest
so why bite more than you can chew; forget and forgo
cuz the reality will probably bring a big lump to your throat
as friends become enemies when given ration of sums
cuz fuck breakin bread..we too busy panning for crumbs
hardship and famine exposed our most basic design
how we'd opt for piece of cake insteadof peace of mind.
sleep in silence re-education were taught in vain
cuz they can try and brainwash but dirty thoughts remain
i got dreaaaams of killing off these sons of bitches
i aint playing its kinda crazy.....
Topic: Population Control
* They have swords...we have focus/perserverence...which is sharper?
Last edited by Northern Beggar; December 12th, 2010 at 11:41 PM
"The you is our greatest asset.
The source behind our battles."
Upon fabricated land not so far away
students aggitated the hand of the law.
Both rich and poor, breaking down doors,
hoping for better openings to come their way.
See...
Back then, oppression was the sole constitution
for many blacks, the only resort was prostitution.
Whites took privilages for granted
takin' advantage of villages, we were hunted
and humilliated for kicks. Enough was enough!
We had to nail those pricks - "comrades get tough".
Supremacy was in balance, their rule dwindled
under the wit of a blooming youth league.
I fiddled with wisdom, one day i'd be big.
Graduated from the university of life you dig?
We formed associations to rival their nonsense,
giving our race equal rights without any offense.
With tails between their legs, faces soured
like raw grapes. The new movement fell into power.
You couldn't help but gape at such a sight.
People of all races had the same rights.
Population Control
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Scytsophrenia
On that next level.. but STILL fuckin' crazy.
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Hmmm...
Northern Beggar: Welcome! I enjoyed this...I know it's fucked up when people compare your writing to another writer...but you remind me of Genocide...and yes, the irony of his name isn't escaping me. Anyways, good verse. You told the story with authenticity. I'm not sure if you're Cambodian or the kid of refugees...but it seems like it...because the piece had an emotional depth that usually can't be contrived.
You flip a cliche like a PRO...from the "Please Buddah......" line, it was hot. Your flow was crisp and natural...overall, really nice rant piece.
Soul Slayer: A verse of the same vein...interesting. I always find your rhyme schemes to be entertaining...but they don't always remind me of hip hop...but that's okay. I think that you have a pretty well defined cadence in your verses...which I always dig.
However, your verse was a bit short. The concept could have been much more developed. Revolution, Change...etc...both epic topics...and it's hard to do that theme justice with such few lines. Those lines would have to be packed with super vivid imagery and creative wording. Unfortunately, it was just a bit straight forward and predictable (sans the rhymes)...
Regardless of the difference in verse lengths, I believe that 20 of NB's lines would beat the 20 of SS's lines.. NB had more creativity and some pretty smart lines...the flow was also really clean and the rhymes were more complex.
Vote: Northern Beggar
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Beggar: I really enjoyed your verse. There was an aloofness to it that made it read lightly even though the subject matter was quite the opposite. These types of verses can typically become informative to a bore, but you prevented that from happening with the voice of the piece. You flipped a lot of common idioms well, which is no easy feat. Fluidity was great, and I also really liked the theme at work here; it remained consistent and evident throughout. Overall, not much I can say negatively about the verse, it was a strong effort.
Soul: So you took the same topic, and it seemed more informative than anything. Not to say that anything is wrong with that, however I didn't feel like you were really presenting any information that was news, so a lot more weight is given to the actual presentation than the content itself. And to be honest, the presentation was very straight forward, and coupled with the brevity of your verse I just found it to be too shallow. It's hard to tread such ground with so few lines, especially when you're just laying it out there. That being said, you're rhyme scheme and general mechanics were all on-point and very unique; I enjoy your style a lot.
Vote: I gotta give this one to Beggar. Both had solid verses, but Beggar had a greater scope to his. Good battle to both.
This was a tough battle to vote on as you both wrote differently.
Beggar..
I really enjoyed your concepts and you stayed on topic nicely.
Your writing was very fluid and the flow was nice.
Your piece was informative and an interesting, good, read.
Soul...your piece was lacking for me in a few places.
The concepts were okay but you only touched on them slightly.
Some parts were difficult to read and wording was off in a couple spots imo.
You both had similar ideas on the topic but 1 piece stood out more.
Vote Beg.
Trapped within the lights of the city..
Where it looks full of life but inside it's all empty..
And from outside it's all tempting..
What..it's all lies upon entry..
:noor:
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Northern Beggar: you had a lot of common used food metaphors, and a few original, which was all pretty well tied with the use of "hell's kitchen" to sync it up...i really liked the presentation of these though, it was always well delivered, seemless in a way, um in spots you had some off wording, the rhyme structure wasnt super complex, but it ran well enough together...
this is a good piece, something nice to start off with and it was pretty accurate as far as historical representation
decent drop
Soul: i feel as though you posted this for the sake of showing, like you just threw up some lines as to not disappoint with a no show, ultimately your verse came across as a skeletal version of what Beggar posted up, you came pretty straight forward, no original concept to it really...like a character, or a plot that gives it a fresh delivery. i usually like your drops, this one was just too short to really develop anything
Overall: this was pretty onesided, i think Soul just showed for the sake of showing or just didnt put out a huge effort on this.
v. NB
"Ready? go! sat where the old cardboard city folk
swap tales with heads like every other penny throw"
scientific... basically you wrote WELL, but your pieces content was the major fault. it was essentially the same concept as Northern's drop minus the genocide.. you had good wording, a decent scheme.. but nothing POPPED - including your interpretation of the idea. It was really light on ideas. Not bad, not great. Held right in between by a lack of effort imo..
northern.. I liked it. It was simple enough conceptually. More detailed than your opponents which set you at a considerable advantage as far as voting goes. I hated the fact that you had 100 cliche ideas throughout the drop.. such as "food for thought" "more than you can chew" "break bread"... all those ideas felt so played lol. like you didn't even modify them in your own special way imo.. you wrote them exactly how I've heard them executed. other than that.. I have no problems.. it was a solid drop, good flow/scheme... again, concept was better portrayed than your opponents. overall, I have to say you bested this match pretty comfortably.
vote Norther Beggar
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