Rewind Button

[Gordon.]

Im living my life trying to find something
I wish my life had a rewind button
So many reasons why
Aiming to climb but rise to nothing

In my mind I thought I was invincible
But look at me now I’m living so miserable
I feel like I’m a worthless no good criminal
Just another pot head in the world, It’s pitiful
I’ll just drop dead, coughed and bled
Got a smoky cloud lofted above my head
I’ve often felt like shit and turned to that
I wish I could rewind the world and turn back
When my lungs weren’t black
It hurts and I sit here swirled in facts
That I wish weren’t existing
I’m reminiscing over my life, wishing
Thinking, sinking into the sofa
Dazing off, staring at a poster
I was so close to the dreams I had
Fucked up so bad, now I’m here so sad
The past flashes, my past actions
The past blasted my future
And that’s something I’m too sure

Im living my life trying to find something
I wish my life had a rewind button
So many reasons why
Aiming to climb but rise to nothing


Life is too short to regret some stuff
But so many opportunities are left in the dust
Fucked up my basketball career
That I tried to capture, chased after for years
But decided to replace that with laughter
From smoking and toking, hoping
That my life wouldn’t get broken
But I too soon spoken
I’m trying to find words to say
Should I return and stay
Burn another day
Turn around and confirm to play
I should have thought about the reactions
I chose a hobby over my passions
I feel like so many bad things happen
That’s why I started rappin
So I could release my thoughts
So deep, so much grief
I breathe and believe it will stop
I will compete till I drop
Think about this shit
Whenever I speak or walk

Im living my life trying to find something
I wish my life had a rewind button
So many reasons why
Aiming to climb but rise to nothing

[Gordon.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...626/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...583/index.html

[trajik]

i thought this was pretty good man, im at a point where im kind of relating to it, almost wondering how my life would be different, so it lured me in. you had some decent multis in there, i thought your syllables could have been a little tighter, not a lot of uniformity in them. some cool imagery, and a lot of emotion felt. not a bad piece man

[foxxiee]

This was a a very nice read.....i liked where you were going with it. The point you made was straight and cleaer, actually something i can go back on and say shit,...ive experienced this or i remember this, you gave some nice thought into this good job.

[Chief-GreenLeaf]

very nicely written, would sound nice in a booth. followed the story from point A to B. emotion was there, presence, nice structure, steady concept.. nice drop

[Gordon.]

thanks guys i appreciate the feed

[young.c]

rarr man pretty good bars, get some more lyrics written enit mate

[Lethal Imagery]

This was a good read, I felt like the second verse was much better than the first one. Reason being is that it hit me close to home. I feel as if I ruined my football career when I started smoking weed, I stopped playing Sophomore year, one year after I started smoking. I just felt like football was overrated, and I'd be better off getting high and doing nothing... I don't know I just feel like life could've been a lot better if I sticked with it, but hey, I found a new passion, hip-hop... I feel as if it's saved me from a dark fate that I would've met if I never started writing music. Ahhh but enough about me, on to your piece.

So like I was saying, first verse... Ehh, I'm not even going to critique that one, it wasn't bad, it just wasn't good, in my opinion.

But the second verse, I really enjoyed reading it, this, "I chose a hobby over my passions" is my favorite line in the whole song. It's just because I did the exact same thing.

I really like that your songs have the powerful ability to connect to the reader, that's a necessary tool that not many artists know how to use. It seems that you can do it correctly, whether on purpose or not, I like it.

Good piece. Keep it up

Oh, and RTF if you can please:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...717/index.html

[Oliver Doe]

your hook is off the hook.

[{--DOKTOR SYN--}]

Personally, The Hook Didn't Really Catch Me... However, The Verses Were Grande. Second One, More So. The Imagery & Emotion Were Intense.

All In All, The Only Thing(s) I Have To Complain About Is That The Hook Could Have Been More Complex & I Feel You Cut It Short, Should Have Added A Third Verse.

RTF http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...53#post7894453

[Gordon.]

thanks for the all the feed ill get on those links when i get a chance no doubt. uppinn

[cK-]

Pretty solid read here man liked it alot it def had imagery and your flow wasnt bad at all sounds like it was a true story so i aint gonna rlly tell you what to write so goodwrk. keeP@it

From smoking and toking, hoping
That my life wouldn’t get broken
But I too soon spoken

Im living my life trying to find something
I wish my life had a rewind button
So many reasons why
Aiming to climb but rise to nothing

Fav lines yeh chorus was dope

[Gordon.]

goodlooks bro

[MC Incendiary]

loved this mate can relate strongly to the themes expressed, i liked how you stayed on track an used recurring themes, liked the imagery etc.

Best Bars

I’ll just drop dead, coughed and bled
Got a smoky cloud lofted above my head

I should have thought about the reactions
I chose a hobby over my passions

[Gordon.]

thanks for the feed last upp.