Short n' Sweet

[IDGAF]

this drop dose indeed have flow, id like 2 hear it to a beat, u got the rhyming down but try and make your lines hit harder, re-write it a few times. ya heard...

RTF http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...875/index.html

thats the beat i used.... you didnt see the link right above the piece? did you read it? lol.

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[TheNBT]

Definitely a nice structure and rhyme scheme to this, and u did the perfect amount for that type of verse... short and sweet.

He's unconsious and weak, Cause he popped 7 V's,
That I dropped in his drink, Now he's not gonna see,
Cause he's watchin his dreams, As I'm offin his spleen,
Liver, heart, and between, I'm awfully obscene,

This was really good I thought, while I was readin' it this is the part that jumped out and I was like "that was dope"

Really the whole thing was solid in my opinion...

You get stomped on the street, Take your watch I'm a thief,
Ya time is gone you're deceased, ya should be honored it's me,
Now you're wanderin in peace, You're a pawn I'm elite,

All along I make beats, N' write songs with my peeps
Till we all go to sleep, N' all thoughts just release,

2 more sick parts, I enjoyed the read good shit

[IDGAF]

Definitely a nice structure and rhyme scheme to this, and u did the perfect amount for that type of verse... short and sweet.

This was really good I thought, while I was readin' it this is the part that jumped out and I was like "that was dope"

Really the whole thing was solid in my opinion...

You get stomped on the street, Take your watch I'm a thief,
Ya time is gone you're deceased, ya should be honored it's me,
Now you're wanderin in peace, You're a pawn I'm elite,

All along I make beats, N' write songs with my peeps
Till we all go to sleep, N' all thoughts just release,

2 more sick parts, I enjoyed the read good shit

word thanks for the feed

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Resurrection!

[Extinctor Draconis]

shut up