addicted

[calgary]

i was concieved to beleive, that any weed, in my vicinaty already belonged to me,
and honestly, holms show me where your chronic be
another day just passes with a different weed anomoly
when it comes to smokin aint no stoppin me im in for it all kinda like monopoly
and properly somebody should offer me, to hit a joint
because this addiction is too strong for me, you get the point?

when im high feels like im almost magic ,
except my lungs got my coughin like asthmatics,
eyes so red i could probably be stoppin traffic
but you see im higher than, a frequent flyer and,
my mary janes in trouble she needs her spider-man
and the weed its got a strong hold
feelings needed out but have never been told
but im a stoner so i always keep one rolled
its the only thing that loves me without it i feel cold

my hands are shaking just to get a puff
addictive personality i can never get enough
gave my everything for weed so still got nobodys trust
already sold my soul to the devil for some little green dust
and this addiction quickly thickens
beacuse without it i feel like my times tickin
i get anxiety cant face society
so look at the ground because thats where my eyes will be

[calgary]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...720/index.html

[calgary]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...712/index.html

[calgary]

aight so feedback lol thanks

[KnowP]

feed back comes once in a blue moon round here.. lol

this was aight fam. the weed topic has been done 80 times so whenever u do
something that possibly has been used, u gotta be more creative with metaphors
and similies. this was too straight foward. nothin exciting came from this peice
imo. vocab was simple as well. think outside the box and be a bit more fresher.

only thing that was aight was the multi's but the flow was off to me
keep workin at it tho money. big ups...

[calgary]

lol respects

[trajik]

im not a fan of this one of yours, it didnt seem to be as stellar are your other work, i thought the flow needed work, i didnt think you used as awesome of a vocabulary as you have in your last drops, and the only line that i thought was good was "eyes so red i could probably be stoppin traffic" and i think you could have made it a lot better. i dont think you were up to your regular standards on this one calgary, maybe your heart wasnt in it, your last couple felt a lot more emotion, i didnt feel any in this, maybe thats your key. can't wait to read your next piece

[Hanible]

i was concieved to beleive, that any weed, in my vicinaty already belonged to me,
and honestly, holms show me where your chronic be
another day just passes with a different weed anomoly
when it comes to smokin aint no stoppin me im in for it all kinda like monopoly
and properly somebody should offer me, to hit a joint
because this addiction is too strong for me, you get the point?

when im high feels like im almost magic ,
except my lungs got my coughin like asthmatics,
eyes so red i could probably be stoppin traffic
but you see im higher than, a frequent flyer and,
my mary janes in trouble she needs her spider-man
and the weed its got a strong hold
feelings needed out but have never been told
but im a stoner so i always keep one rolled
its the only thing that loves me without it i feel cold

my hands are shaking just to get a puff
addictive personality i can never get enough
gave my everything for weed so still got nobodys trust
already sold my soul to the devil for some little green dust
and this addiction quickly thickens
beacuse without it i feel like my times tickin
i get anxiety cant face society
so look at the ground because thats where my eyes will be

man...>_>i hate when people give me tough critisim but ya..
u were tryin to stretch it an ur rhymes was a little weak man .. >_> sorry dawg

[calgary]

lol dont be sorry i tell yall to post feedback to hear what yall think