first drop/Late night FS

[Mr.Ginsu]

First post ever.. Just to get rid of that damn "I suck too much to post" crap.
Anyways, Its late and Im lit like a christmas tree so heres some fun stuff.

"off the top I cant stop cuz this aint written or wrote,
this a verbal freestyle stick in your spoke,
this shit take your breath away like a d*ck in your throat,
trigger finger get ya even if the digit is broke,
Im an uphill battle and its a slippery slope,
Im the Norse God loki-God of the trickiest flow,
in fact im spittin acid with the trippiest flow,
If my shit got any hotter than these blisters would glow,
but it dont stop there cuz a blimp I am higher than,
flow so cold got the game froze in cryogen,
show you how its done shit I could draw a diagram,
and burn it all down with what Im spittin through my diaprham.
But call me big poppa cuz my name is so notorious,
I shit you lil basterds cuz your flow is so inglorious,
what Im tryin to say I guess the moral of the story is,
Im the greatest ever and Ill always be victorious."


Late night freestyle/rant, enjoi..

Positive criticsm plzzzz

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=428969

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...904/index.html

[Mr.Ginsu]

Just a lil follow up cuz this spliff is burning longer than I anticipated.

"Blunt got my mind loose feeling like a mind freak,
smoking all this skunk got my vision turning lime green,
killin this shit when i leave its just a crime scene,
dropping these bombs man I wouldnt walk behind me,
yes a nigga paid but understand im still grimey,
when i hit the beat its like a killer on a crime spree,
im so out this world GPS could never find me,
cuz im the greatest ever like a nine beside the ninety."

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=428969

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...904/index.html

[miracle]

get ur links and people will feed

[Mr.Ginsu]

alright i realize Im gonna sound like a noob but what the eff do you mean "get your links up?"

[Adrenalyn]

alright i realize Im gonna sound like a noob but what the eff do you mean "get your links up?"

leave legit feed back on 2 other pieces and copy the links to ur rap other wise the mods will close this drop

[Mr.Ginsu]

ohhhhkay... thanks Adrenlyn..

Also, Im not too sure on how to set up battles etc.. these guys need a "rapbattles.com for dummies" or something..

[Prophet Margin]

2 set battles agree 2 terms with some1, either in bitch slapped or elswhere, go 2 frontlines hit new topic, and check the box down below that says u want to make a battle, post the rules check in and give links of ur feedback from other battles

[Prophet Margin]

Oh btw liked the piece some inventive rhymes...
..and i responded to your open callout in bitch slapped

[Mr.Ginsu]

Thanx, grapvine, I set up the battle so i hope your still innnn

[Estate]

I shit you lil basterds cuz your flow is so inglorious,


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[143]

Ok free, the first line sucked "written or wrote" was a bad attemp but you made up for it in the verse. Decent flow normal vocab topic is the normal noob stuff, this was a decent drop. To be more need to step up the wordplay with some inventive shit, pick a topic that's not the norm, ad some comprehensive vocab to create an image for the reader to read and remember, you have to come at this as a writer and not as a freestylist. different flow, defferent feel. Peace