Need help with text battling? post here i'll check this thread often.
Need help with text battling? post here i'll check this thread often.
taytay suck wiener, oh yes he really does,
can't make music cuz he got to much peach fuzz
off of tat topic, everyone knows hes realy gay
touches more weiner than men, really what can I say?
CAn you help me out, im trying to improve lol
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Rofl @ bullet. I see TayTay tryna dodge one right now
Bullet i think you're a lost cause:/ lol
I'd go TayTay, here's my last battle:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...009/index.html
Thanks.
VS N.O.T.I.C.
Couldn't "Take out Daddy" if it was FATHERS DAY! Look son dis BASTARDS GAY
even with "child care services" I'd be the LAST TA PAY!!
Cant see the "four" or the "loko" so to be honest kid u'll never Know!!
"rides dick" like a TEXAS RODEO.. Witha "8 that couldnt square me" if he was BEST AT DOSIDO! Ya "lines couldnt cause tragedies" if you was TEXTIN ROMEO!
And to tell da Truth your style old like the 70's shows...
and you couldn't fuck with me if i was on of them ebony hoes...
HEARSE on da way! this is four loko DA..DA..TURF!...
couldnt "Get me blue" if i was PAPA SMURF!!!..
POPS THE BEST RIGHT? Only time this "Dick shines" is with a PUSSY FLESHLIGHT! <===(()) LMAO
This battle's one sided. it "wouldnt swing both ways if he was a BUTCH TRANSFESTITE!!
good luck!!!...
(dosido is 8 step square dance)
MY VERSE VS DEFINE
OK!..Let me SPECIFY This PEASANT GUY Wit DIS-STRESSING RHYMES!...
Ima SPRAY CHEMICALS And LAY PHYSICALS And Put This 'PEST-A-SIDE!'...
I Dont Make Cuts I Rape Sluts And Leave Em Wit "EX-CESSIVE" LINES!...
Skin Danglin....You EXPRESSING LIES EVERY TIME You INVEST IN LINES!...
So When I COME HARD On His DUMB BARS? He Be Left Wit INFESTED SWINE!...
bad beef...Im Used To Abusin this Kid Like This The 'SECOND TIME!'...
And The QUESTION LYS..? Will he Win Or RECOGNIZE?,...
My Fight Scheme will 'Beef em Up' Den Eat em Up and Leave Da REST A SIDE!...
See I aint Here ta Give LECTURES TA DUDE! Juss a GESTURE TA PROVE...
Than He couldnt "OUT BOX MY BAIT" OR "OUT 'SOCK' MY FACE" If His DRESSER IMPROVED!...
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off those voters in those battle^^^
i try'ed to use some of the critique some of the voters left off my other battles with define and n.o.t.i.c.e and hope this work better then my previous verse and alot easier to read and follow...
It's the hottest chance w/ punches off to land...
N rock the man till His whole ''Body move Side to Side'' like the carlton dance!!...
plot ya plans or I'll be croppin his frame...
no ''GooseBump Horror Story'' But I'm ''plot'' in his ''grave''...
this ock isnt brave... tell your chick to stop calling me mayne!!...
We know you be placing your ''Piece around Squares'' like a monopoly game!!...
jockin my phrase?... this nerd is aged in...
I burst this gay kid cuz all he ''Droppin in to See-Men'' like sperm donations...
who's this nerd replacement? u force raps up? so im not appeal...
I torch M.O.B cunts so watch how I 'switch-a-man'' like refusing to pick the cotton filed!!
EZ!!...
any idea on how to help me out??...
i got ur solution no need to bother tay
quit
lol jp
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and after you help my battle verse why dont you take a look at my open mic drop...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=429618
^^ thats the link and the name of my open mic is called "Crown Me King"...
alright well let me start of by telling you the positives, your dirrect with your lines meaning your punches are dirrected towards your opponent. However most of them are very basic dude you need to be more creative like the FTW punch weak, FTW didnt want you, u coulda been more creative, I wolda done something like, and this win is For The Wreckord, kinda like the crew that denied you. you should involve some nameplays and the arrow punches are bad! i got into that habit too but don't use em. Post more link and post your AIM.Originally Posted by moose35
i literally wrote you a 4 paragraph critique and my fucking computer turns off before i finish. I'll get to you in a bit.
^^^ no feed back from non of my battle verses??
no feed back from my open mic either...
how is this soppuse to help me again??
i also now have another battle open...
and another open mic...
stop bitching if u need help wait a minute geeze fuckin noobs
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I read your open mic, and im NOT the best a topical but if you want people to read your writings you got to keep it short and sweet, readon being that nobody really wants to go to the OM section to read a book, i noticed that you had some multies too which is good for your flow but you gotta make sure their not pointless multies you know make sure everyone word has a meaning don't just throw shit out there so it could sound cool. and when it comes to teexr i'm a be blunt none of your lines were dirrect, alot of people have the problem that whenever they got a cool line they'll say it but it wont be towards the opponent like for example, if you have a cool concept like your opponents gay instead of having a line saying
This dude is gay, addmited fully so just give it a rest you cunt
I don't eat where i shit, but this nigga goes Inn N out like the restaurant.
Thats dirrect as fuck
But some people woulda been like
and he admitted to being gay, he doesnt like to get cunt
he always goes in n out like the restaurant
Like its ther same concept, but you got to sit down w/ a line and try to WORD IT the best way possible most cats think of a line and just write it you gotta think of it write it, read it over and over and try to improve on it thats why u shouldnt get battles that are like 10 Lines due 45 seconds after check because you'll never produce quality why do you think leagues give you weeks so u can come up w/ some creative shit. Just keep writing and post links to your work cuz im not gonna go looking for it.
-Tay
thanks i will post more link up soon...
n 2 Mr.SaiBot STFU...
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