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4renSICK
'Fuck
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Right, I dont have time. So I'm gonna post my verse now and you can post yours whenever.
I'm 'Fuck, and I'll be putting a torch to this whiny bitch
I'mma leave CSI in rings of fire ... Flaming 4renSICKS
Coming for a battle, shoulda left it, bitch please
Watch me assualt Ren ... Then brutally murder Stimpy
So stop with your bullshit, you should give up and accept the fact that your made to lose
Because I feel sorry for you, your going up against F like failing students do
Murder your violent legion with my roman army, you'll never be a sick rhymer
You're so wack you stuck admit defeat under your username as a constant reminder
Kill this kid, fuck throwing punches I'll throw a whole damn scissorkick
How can your bars be tough when the city you rep so weak I can spread it on sandwiches?
jst seen u set this, i was waiting, u took awhile to set it; ill key now
LINK ONE
LINK TWO
sorry for the quickie
fucka Punch, few shots & this guys torn-
Louiseville Slugger to Your Mouth,
Till He ‘Swallows The Head Of The Bat' Like "Ozzy Ozborne"!
In seconds its a Fact He'll be Scorched in flame-
like shooting range's on vacation
getting a vote? It's obvious you're gonna have to "Resort to Aim"!
Weak punches Aint Connecting, Your Just a bore, guy-
and He Couldn’t ‘Land-Marks On Me’ with the Help of A Tour Guide!
You Prevoke My Rage... fuck I’ll Use the Gauge to cock ya face-
leaving your Body Parts to Add Comments.... next time dont enter My-Space!
Beating Me? You'll need luck; everything You drop Will suck-
And I Get the Name..Cause I read your Verse... it had me like.......FUCK!
don't forget yeah links bruh;
vote's
fucka Punch, few shots & this guys torn-
Louiseville Slugger to Your Mouth,
Till He ‘Swallows The Head Of The Bat' Like "Ozzy Ozborne"!
Weak punches Aint Connecting, Your Just a bore, guy-
and He Couldn’t ‘Land-Marks On Me’ with the Help of A Tour Guide!
vs
nothing
somewhat played wp,but decent flips,sollid wordin on most bars..scheme was aight
vote> 4renSICK
rtf on me vs yung
uppin/
Uppin
nothin
vs
nothin
fuck, throw punches stop bullshitn about urself thats not how u win
4ren, i like the word play but u lacked every thing else a battle verse needs
V 4renSICK
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stop swaying... this is your warning...
-Arch
Last edited by The Archetype; May 20th, 2010 at 11:23 AM
I'm 'Fuck, and I'll be putting a torch to this whiny bitch
I'mma leave CSI in rings of fire ... Flaming 4renSICKS
the wording is awful... w/ the ellipses, it makes it seem like a stop pause type GT bar... the nameplay is misplaced to make the bar hit harder...
Coming for a battle, shoulda left it, bitch please
Watch me assualt Ren ... Then brutally murder Stimpy
rhyme is forced as hell... bitch please and stimpy is a force even for an approximate rhyme... plus the punch doesn't even hit hard cuz it involves more violence to an imaginary stimpy and the set up was irrelevant
So stop with your bullshit, you should give up and accept the fact that your made to lose
Because I feel sorry for you, your going up against F like failing students do
also weak... nameplays on yourself generally are... and even then, it's a weak concept...
Murder your violent legion with my roman army, you'll never be a sick rhymer
You're so wack you stuck admit defeat under your username as a constant reminder
set up and punch don't correlate... that being said, this was probably your best punch... not a great one... but better than the rest...
Kill this kid, fuck throwing punches I'll throw a whole damn scissorkick
How can your bars be tough when the city you rep so weak I can spread it on sandwiches?
ass... rhyme is forced... the philadelphia spread concept is weak
vs
fucka Punch, few shots & this guys torn-
Louiseville Slugger to Your Mouth,
Till He ‘Swallows The Head Of The Bat' Like "Ozzy Ozborne"!
stretched as hell... but not a bad punch...
In seconds its a Fact He'll be Scorched in flame-
like shooting range's on vacation
getting a vote? It's obvious you're gonna have to "Resort to Aim"!
another decent concept ruined by your stretched ass format...
Weak punches Aint Connecting, Your Just a bore, guy-
and He Couldn’t ‘Land-Marks On Me’ with the Help of A Tour Guide!
wordplay doesn't work both ways... doesn't make sense... but i get it...
You Prevoke My Rage... fuck I’ll Use the Gauge to cock ya face-
leaving your Body Parts to Add Comments.... next time dont enter My-Space!
not feeling...
Beating Me? You'll need luck; everything You drop Will suck-
And I Get the Name..Cause I read your Verse... it had me like.......FUCK!
weak...
Sick... i see you lost the bolding... now lose the unneccesary dots, quotations and exclamation points... lol... but you have concepts
vote 4renSICK
Will do
comeon
Kill this kid, fuck throwing punches I'll throw a whole damn scissorkick
How can your bars be tough when the city you rep so weak I can spread it on sandwiches?
vs
Beating Me? You'll need luck; everything You drop Will suck-
And I Get the Name..Cause I read your Verse... it had me like.......FUCK!
didn't really enjoy this battle at all, it was weak from fuck vs played from 4
owever
4's played shit was a lot stronger than fucks weak shit
so mvg2; 4RENZIX
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