moose35 vs Writeous One

[moose35]

12 lines, due 8 pm

[Writeous One]

Checkin

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=427726
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=427807

[Writeous One]

i aim semi's - don't talk bread cuz you don't get paid any
rappers? i slay many an i'm about to body-check-a-slovakian... Wayne Gretzky
come with the mask an knife, scream style so this bitch is scared
dude called moose cuz his hobbies include caressing his sisters hair
you cant work me out, with your fool ways you'll loose pace
i only have to add up this dudes name for y'all to see moose ate (3+5)
you thought you were big in the game, an asset to hip hop
well i'm a take over now and make you re-tyre like a pit stop
my styles like abortions... dammmnn this bitch doesnt want it
this fag couldnt make moose-sick if he got kicked in the stomache (music)
you the type to frame people like sketched pictures, i wreck snitches
your mother lands like female bankers - known for being checks bitches

* His country used to be part of Czechslovakia

[moose35]

Alright, I'll drop links later.

Hey, lemme guess, you'll try to impress with your witty pun,
A joke about me liking Eminem or shooting down moose with your gun,
So here Writeous One, lemme hit you with my newest concoction,
You winning beefs is only happening at a cattle auction,
Older than me, been here longer, even a flyweight degree,
And yet you write raps that get beat unanimously,
Oh now I get it-"Righteous One"-I understand you calling,
You let us win on purpose with raps so appalling,
May 1st, this dude pulls out boxing gloves and brings em together,
Hearing Al Roker talk about his town getting "hit with May-weather",
Don't worry, in time you guys' relationship would be filled with perfection,
Him taking his 41-0 record and having yours as a reflection.

[moose35]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=428006

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...847/index.html

[freeflowz]

i aim semi's - don't talk bread cuz you don't get paid any
rappers? i slay many an i'm about to body-check-a-slovakian... Wayne Gretzky
lmfao
come with the mask an knife, scream style so this bitch is scared
dude called moose cuz his hobbies include caressing his sisters hair
lol
you cant work me out, with your fool ways you'll loose pace
i only have to add up this dudes name for y'all to see moose ate (3+5)
weak
you thought you were big in the game, an asset to hip hop
well i'm a take over now and make you re-tyre like a pit stop
nah
my styles like abortions... dammmnn this bitch doesnt want it
this fag couldnt make moose-sick if he got kicked in the stomache (music)
nah
you the type to frame people like sketched pictures, i wreck snitches
your mother lands like female bankers - known for being checks bitches
eeh but ok ]


vs



Hey, lemme guess, you'll try to impress with your witty pun,
A joke about me liking Eminem or shooting down moose with your gun,
nah
So here Writeous One, lemme hit you with my newest concoction,
You winning beefs is only happening at a cattle auction,
decent
Older than me, been here longer, even a flyweight degree,
And yet you write raps that get beat unanimously,
nah
Oh now I get it-"Righteous One"-I understand you calling,
You let us win on purpose with raps so appalling,
no
May 1st, this dude pulls out boxing gloves and brings em together,
Hearing Al Roker talk about his town getting "hit with May-weather",
eeh but ok
Don't worry, in time you guys' relationship would be filled with perfection,
Him taking his 41-0 record and having yours as a reflection.
nah

vote:writeous with more consistent better punches, better delivery and better concepts

rtf please

[Switch.]

i aim semi's - don't talk bread cuz you don't get paid any
rappers? i slay many an i'm about to body-check-a-slovakian... Wayne Gretzky
Okay opener but slightly forced
come with the mask an knife, scream style so this bitch is scared
dude called moose cuz his hobbies include caressing his sisters hair
Nah
you cant work me out, with your fool ways you'll loose pace
i only have to add up this dudes name for y'all to see moose ate (3+5)
Not too bad better wording wouldve helped
you thought you were big in the game, an asset to hip hop
well i'm a take over now and make you re-tyre like a pit stop
meh... forced
my styles like abortions... dammmnn this bitch doesnt want it
this fag couldnt make moose-sick if he got kicked in the stomache (music)
Forced again but ight-ish
you the type to frame people like sketched pictures, i wreck snitches
your mother lands like female bankers - known for being checks bitches
Meh closer

vs

Hey, lemme guess, you'll try to impress with your witty pun,
A joke about me liking Eminem or shooting down moose with your gun,
No, this is not a punch
So here Writeous One, lemme hit you with my newest concoction,
You winning beefs is only happening at a cattle auction,
Nah
Older than me, been here longer, even a flyweight degree,
And yet you write raps that get beat unanimously,
Weak
Oh now I get it-"Righteous One"-I understand you calling,
You let us win on purpose with raps so appalling,
No. This was a wack filler
May 1st, this dude pulls out boxing gloves and brings em together,
Hearing Al Roker talk about his town getting "hit with May-weather",
Meh
Don't worry, in time you guys' relationship would be filled with perfection,
Him taking his 41-0 record and having yours as a reflection.
Weak closer


Writeous takes this easily for throwing actual punches. Moose you dropped some weak shit and most of your verse was jus filler with no proper developed or witty punches. You need to elevate fam. No hate. Writeous u had some okay ideas but u forced them a lil too much but even so u did enough to win this batltle anyway. No hate to either.


v/Writeous

rtf vs freeflowz

[moose35]

up.

[Novade]

So here Writeous One, lemme hit you with my newest concoction,
You winning beefs is only happening at a cattle auction,
Older than me, been here longer, even a flyweight degree,
And yet you write raps that get beat unanimously,

[Novade]

vs


you cant work me out, with your fool ways you'll loose pace
i only have to add up this dudes name for y'all to see moose ate

vote=moose, felt his flow more....even punches...write got a lil more creative but i wasnt feeling some of his lines..

[Writeous One]

LOL

Uppin'

[moose35]

uuuppp

[moose35]

up #3

[The Incredible Hulk]

i aim semi's - don't talk bread cuz you don't get paid any
rappers? i slay many an i'm about to body-check-a-slovakian... Wayne Gretzky
come with the mask an knife, scream style so this bitch is scared
dude called moose cuz his hobbies include caressing his sisters hair

vs

So here Writeous One, lemme hit you with my newest concoction,
You winning beefs is only happening at a cattle auction,
meh played.

Analysis
Writeous started off decent enough but after the 2 first bars it went downhill even though he was trying name play and attempting to use concepts. Moose your verse opened up badly & seemed pretty corny through-out,it speaks volumes when your best line was about beef/cattle. To me it was pretty one sided cuz when writeous did miss he didn't miss half as bad as Moose.

V/ Writeous One

Drop a fair vote.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...113/index.html

[Kaos Theory]

Writeous' 2nd and 3rd bars did it for me... Even though the 3rd was sorta weak... but the 2nd one made me laugh... Moose's shit was kinda below par.. Im not rate every line but I know for a fact it wouldnt look good for moose... WO also had his flow going on with the patterned multis. Moose all I can say is try to come up with some fresh stuff and wordplay man...

v/ WriteousOne