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Last edited by Straightaway; June 23rd, 2011 at 10:25 PM
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Uppinnn For Feed .
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This piece was pretty good, But a few main things
I didn't see a constantly rhyme scheme which made it
hard for me to follow on your flow, your structure was pretty
good in your first verse
but your second lack alot of structure
I like this shit right here though
I would give this a 7 out of 10
So ima step on the timeline , miss- move spitfulls marker
no spiritual transform but my knowledge just turned darker
i deodorized this post with my shit shoc lines
any thought of shit write ups has now just left your minds
I am sorry for the short feed, I got to work peace
Metamorphosis - Demo In progress
preciate the feedback.
Uppinn..
Last edited by Straightaway; March 26th, 2011 at 01:19 AM
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what up spit
rhymes were cool,a few nice lines, but the flow fell of a few times just like schizzy said but keep it comin
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Last edited by sir headless; May 5th, 2010 at 08:30 AM
to be honest dog, this was mad simple. You didnt have much to offer as far as metaphors or analogies in attackting this theme. I was expecting for you to teach about rap knowledge but it came off as a histroy lesson of some sort. you gotta get more creative with wording. Bring visualization to your piece. I felt you coulda did way better over this subject than what you brought to the table. elevate fam and get more creative....
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Last edited by Straightaway; March 26th, 2011 at 01:19 AM
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