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house rulez
moose35
ItsKnucklez
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10PM european time
house rulez
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you wanna see a battle, or a man smack a moose till he crinkle
coz im about to flip and go rocky on bullwinkle
and just like chocolate "moose" this guys too light and fluffy
but his face is so damn warped that it would frighten buffy
you beat me once, but as for wins, from now you can stop countin them
you couldnt write "sick shit", with vomit and diarrhea in a fountian pen
ill turn up to your house then cut you up to shish kebab
then slap your punk ass all around *Bratislava*
asked him if he'd had his dick licked at all
he said "my dog licked my brother Richards face when i was small"...(get it?)
yo you dont wanna see this animal loose
this dudes a pussy....what are you a man or a moose?
**bratislava is the capital of slovakia for those who cant be bothered to look it up, and the pronounciation makes it rhyme with what i said, before people start saying it doesnt rhyme
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...555/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...497/index.html
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that was a quick quick quick key lol...gettin ready to go party baaaaaaaaaby
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Here we go (on a side note, this is a rematch and I won the first round):
Knuckz, I take your name, punch your face into a triangle,
Make the angles entangle into a shape even Einstein can't handle,
Damn bro, I never knew you were a prophet,
Knowing I'd rip you on this one and having the avatar to match it,
Listen, I'm a clown that turns your words into balloons,
One small puncture and they deflate and leave the room,
One loss is bad luck, 2 is a streak,
Call me out again and I'll be sure to make it a hat trick,
You shit when you saw this, you sure your pants aren't dampened?
Fuck Nike or Gatorade, arrange a sponsorship from Pampers!
Sittin' with your gay lover, saying "I hope they haven't seen us",
Penetrated from the back, no proof needed, your farts smell like penis!
they all FLOAT down here
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asked him if he'd had his dick licked at all
he said "my dog licked my brother Richards face when i was small".
vs.
You shit when you saw this, you sure your pants aren't dampened?
Fuck Nike or Gatorade, arrange a sponsorship from Pampers!
These were the only 2 punches that hit really..
was a pretty weak battle, both could have done better, but neither one really had to on this occasion. Nucklez came a little harder though, seemed to have more wit, and more flow..
I dont have enough posts yet to poll this, so it's more just a feedback, but if I could vote it'd be for Knucklez..
His punches were worded stronger.. and had more wordplay.
they all FLOAT
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3rd up
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my first up, let's go people, i'll RTF
up?
Sigh ok
Knuckles you need some more practice. i thought by now you'd have a better idea of what you need to do.im gonna attempt constructive criticism.
you wanna see a battle, or a man smack a moose till he crinkle
coz im about to flip and go rocky on bullwinkle
first of all "a moose til he crinkle" as a rhyme?must be a uk wording. Or its just a forced rhyme. your diss was weak swagger.. and feels outdated.
and just like chocolate "moose" this guys too light and fluffy
but his face is so damn warped that it would frighten buffy
again outdated material.. and you cant see his face.It also seem to think highly of your multi's but sometimes they weaken the punch. Because more often then not you will just end with a forced rhyme.
you beat me once, but as for wins, from now you can stop countin them
you couldnt write "sick shit", with vomit and diarrhea in a fountian pen
attempt at wordplay but your metaphor isnt very clever.Also borderlines on preposterous. Something more relatable is often better.seems like you focused on rhyming fountain pen.
ill turn up to your house then cut you up to shish kebab
then slap your punk ass all around *Bratislava*
"slap punk ass around"theres no wordplay on a dated concept that's improbable. No, Bratislava doesnt rhyme. If you have to say it doesnt rhyme in your explanation then why make the choice of that rhyme at all... You can change your mind before you type it in. i generally read the whole verse at once and snagging on rhymes like that ruins the fluidity of the piece.Also there was no punchline.Again just swagger.
asked him if he'd had his dick licked at all
he said "my dog licked my brother Richards face when i was small"...(get it?)
what?? first why ask that question? Second, lame nameplay diss.
yo you dont wanna see this animal loose
this dudes a pussy....what are you a man or a moose?
a man or moose... a man or moose... and he's a pussy? so is he a man pussy? or a pussy moose? or a moose pussy??! its all not a good punch nor finish.
I dont know what happened here. But fear not.. you have potential.I've seen much better lines from you.
vs
Moose im gonna try and do the same for you.. but i think this will be my only battle i vote for today.Thanks for sapping the energy right out of me to read more battles.
Knuckz, I take your name, punch your face into a triangle,
Make the angles entangle into a shape even Einstein can't handle,
I didnt care for the einstein reference here and this is swagger not a diss.But for swagger is only rhyme based to me.
Damn bro, I never knew you were a prophet,
Knowing I'd rip you on this one and having the avatar to match it,
prophet and match it dont rhyme not even forced just straight up doesnt. this is typed so read you verse before you post it.Also "rip you" is boring terminology.
Listen, I'm a clown that turns your words into balloons,
One small puncture and they deflate and leave the room,
your first line you called yourself a clown... this is diss your opponent.A clown is someone you laugh at not laugh with.boring diss lame wordplay and insulted yourself.
One loss is bad luck, 2 is a streak,
Call me out again and I'll be sure to make it a hat trick,
hat trick and streak dont rhyme. other then that the diss is at least at your opponent and personal. also i believe that is a hockey term.No niggas i know play hockey.They do own skates though.Also you insulted yourself insinuating that his loss to you was his own bad luck.
You shit when you saw this, you sure your pants aren't dampened?
Fuck Nike or Gatorade, arrange a sponsorship from Pampers!
again with not rhyming. all that did were the first four letters of each word.This is written not spoken. Y ou must take that into account that written words when read do not accent the way the writer speaks them.Arranging sponsorships are a good thing. btw be more agressive towards your opponent.
Sittin' with your gay lover, saying "I hope they haven't seen us",
Penetrated from the back, no proof needed, your farts smell like penis!
Gay joke and toilet humor rolled into one. I dont wanna end a verse reading "smell like penis" .. ever.. forever? ever?Forever. Ever.Also not funny
I am giving my vote to Knuckles on this one. Due to the fact, even though the verses were both as whole not good,He did prove he can rhyme although forces and coming semi creative vs. alot of poorly attempted concepts.Both need to elevate.
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moose
Knuckz, I take your name, punch your face into a triangle,
Make the angles entangle into a shape even Einstein can't handle,
-Wack
Damn bro, I never knew you were a prophet,
Knowing I'd rip you on this one and having the avatar to match it,
-Weak
Listen, I'm a clown that turns your words into balloons,
One small puncture and they deflate and leave the room,
-Wack
One loss is bad luck, 2 is a streak,
Call me out again and I'll be sure to make it a hat trick,
-WAck
You shit when you saw this, you sure your pants aren't dampened?
Fuck Nike or Gatorade, arrange a sponsorship from Pampers!
-weak/ wack
Sittin' with your gay lover, saying "I hope they haven't seen us",
Penetrated from the back, no proof needed, your farts smell like penis!
-wack sauce
Itsknucklez
you wanna see a battle, or a man smack a moose till he crinkle
coz im about to flip and go rocky on bullwinkle
-Weak
and just like chocolate "moose" this guys too light and fluffy
but his face is so damn warped that it would frighten buffy
-wack
you beat me once, but as for wins, from now you can stop countin them
you couldnt write "sick shit", with vomit and diarrhea in a fountian pen
-wack
ill turn up to your house then cut you up to shish kebab
then slap your punk ass all around *Bratislava*
-wack
asked him if he'd had his dick licked at all
he said "my dog licked my brother Richards face when i was small"...(get it?)
no i dont wack
yo you dont wanna see this animal loose
this dudes a pussy....what are you a man or a moose?
-wack
wack Battle but i give it to knucklez he atleast threw a punch
vote knucklz
The Greatest
uup
weak battle
nothing
vs.
nothing
i give it to knucks though because he actually threw punches instead of bullshit self glamour and disses on himself (moose35)
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