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Sweetwater Cliff wasn't talking to you your best out is to concentrate and see if you can score with more than two verses a year then you could become a stud in rap and not a scrub that talk crap so hug on that dude stay in my post with none of your own they call people like you losers where I'm from
Last edited by rhymebad; April 14th, 2010 at 10:53 PM
You feel like nobody can take you serious as a male rapper so you trying to crack in the game as a female????
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wow my post got 239 views and 62 responses
Last edited by rhymebad; April 14th, 2010 at 11:26 PM
you have no job old man you click your own shit all day... what better you have to do???
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sear...1734675----wow you quick draw and slow as hell about writing a rhyme dang man stop being jealous of me get up off your stink duffy and write a rhyme
I thought this had some more potential if it would
of stayed consistent throughout the whole piece.
It seems to me that the beginning of this verse was
pretty decent by after mid way through it starting
falling off, which in turn made me lose the flow.
And the other thing I could see you should work on is
shorten up your bars, and if not already try counting your
syllables so your rhymes are landind up more correctly.
Besides that I thought this was a pretty good piece.
Keep writing and you will elevate more over time.
Metamorphosis - Demo In progress
rhymebad at a pitty party is more like it
What is a stink duffy?????? Sorry pop Im not a 40s or 50s baby so I don't understand some of these words you useOriginally Posted by rhymebad
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sear...1734675----wow you quick draw and slow as hell about writing a rhyme dang man stop being jealous of me get up off your stink duffy and write a rhyme EVERYBODY ELSE DOES DUMMY WRITE YOUR OWN RHYMES IF YIOU DON'T LIKE MINE HA! HA!! HA!
^This
QUICK DRAW YOU DON'T HAVE TALL POCKETS YOU JUST A SMALL ROCKET THAT CAN'T TAKE OFF YOU FAKE AND SOFT JUST A PIECE OF CAKE THAT'S LOST ALL YOUR RHYMES NOT READY OR PROPER UNCLE TOM you better ask Betty Crocker boy HA! HA! HA! traitor
Terrible.... Just terrible... I mean if you'd like ill set up a battle for us :-)... PS i'm a "uncle tom" cuz i told you your shit needs help??? lame as a fuck my nigga true talk
but dang that right there slapped the fucking shit out of you
QUICK DRAW YOU DON'T HAVE TALL POCKETS YOU JUST A SMALL ROCKET THAT CAN'T TAKE OFF YOU FAKE AND SOFT JUST A PIECE OF CAKE THAT'S LOST ALL YOUR RHYMES NOT READY OR PROPER UNCLE TOM you better ask Betty Crocker boy HA! HA! HA! traitor
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Why did this turn from a failed attempt at emotion......to a failed attempt at persuading us dat you actually get pussy?
© You just wanna be super but your as simple as it gets
Some get the pooper scooper cuz I just shit on this kid!!
Kapital J aka "Imperial Trigga"
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