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    this buds for you Thrust's Avatar
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    Natural

    Long ago when...
    words were spoken,
    not predetermined,
    created by naturals....
    could you hear...
    in the silence?
    all dependents to
    harmonial voices.
    sitting there still
    swaying in freeze,
    leaves come and go
    i feel thee breeze.
    touch me only
    when seasons change.
    because such brains
    don't mind much things.
    give as you will.
    i'll take as i do.
    at the door knocking...
    throug the glass you don't see.
    open up and...
    talk to me.
    i've got something to say,.
    i've kept in this safe...
    words that weren't
    meant to escape but you...
    went and decoded
    my secret language...
    i hope you take it and
    for only your granite.

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    Re: Natural

    touch me only
    when seasons change.
    because such brains
    don't mind much things.
    give as you will.
    i'll take as i do.
    Liked these lines, to me it had the feel of a semi-love poem. I liked the conversational tone of the piece.
    I don't feel that much was put into the rhymescheme but the piece still came out o.k.


    Everclear

    Hit that up with some feed if you get time^^....

    peace.

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