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    The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Killed

    Brought to you by the greatest mothafuckin army of two since mobb deep, The Infamous and Kanvas would like to present....
    Kill or be Killed.

    Kanvas:
    Learning to stalk through the night, whispering among the streets,
    I see a lady that catches my eyes and instantly tries to tease me.
    She flashes some skin, but her thigh is plagued with cuts from a knife,
    Sad that I thought this woman looked like the type I could Wife.

    Stop the watch and freeze the time, 30 below freezing under the trees,
    She reaches in her waist band and pulls out a AK with a loaded magazine.
    Stutter step and run the fuck backwards, but shots ring out creeping up behind me,
    Feeling the wind of the bullet buzzing past my face, I take place on the concrete.

    Second shot fired and took a comfort in my skin, burying itself deep in my concepts,
    But I shot back up like I had springs on my feet, leaving that bitch completely perplexed.
    Fearing for my life I made peace with the sin I was about to instinctively commit,
    My finger hugging the trigger and the bullet escaping the prison like sentence.

    Miss the target on purpose, the true gentleman buried deep within can't deal,
    with this kind of weight on my shoulders, distorted images conjuring, feeling real.
    Her reaction was priceless, her eyes smiled brighter than the sun in the hottest of days,
    the gun slipped out of my hand and to the cold cement floor, my arms sting like sun rays.

    With that last swing of her arm, this light flashes before my eyes and I fall to the ground,
    kissing the floor beneath me and holding it as my own, home and still falling down.
    Blood leaks out of my open wounds and I feel my heart being ripped to shreds
    tearing and being tormenting like it was a sweater and I unraveled the thread.

    Pitch black and my body is seizing up off the ground, my skull cracking on pavement
    occipital bone screaming and pulsing as my life slips away, within 3 or 4 seconds.
    The ill fated woman turned around laughing maniacally and tossing the pistol,
    looking for a taxi, raised her death plagued arm and belted out a whistle.

    Seeing no car in sight, she began to cross the empty street or so it seemed,
    Her body looking like rubber as the taxi penetrated her sin enthralled being.
    Karma is a bitch and I think I love her, angels fly around and smell the death scent.
    One simple question, to kill or be killed, and I think I just made my statement.

    The Infamous:
    Now listen, this is me and Kanvas,
    You wannu can this? I demand you re-scan this,
    You can’t pass this man shit, full metal jacket,
    Is what im about to hit your ass wit,
    Our fans aint nothin but expandable assets,
    All we do is drop these classics,
    These fantastic raps, that are mean & drastic,
    This black magic, that’ll strangle this faggot,
    Wrap is throat wit elastic, grab it behind and snap it,
    Now we braggin, sent off laughin.
    Hold on, slow down, its so dark,
    Lemme throw some old clothes on,
    Im about to mow down all the pussies who wont spark,
    Its like a fuckin german shepard that wont bark,
    Then by all the other dogs is torn apart.
    Infamous came to fuckin hold you back,
    While Kanvas slapped you and broke you in half,
    Now hes on the floor, walk away and throw a match,
    Yo, K, whatchu say we smoke the ash?
    You see, me and Kanvas are like a 2 man army,
    Scar me, spar me, harm me, it wont hardly alarm me.
    Whether you volunteered or were just picked up and thrown in,
    It’s a kill or be killed world, and me and Kanvas own it.

    We hope all you motha fuckas enjoyed the show!

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Mine's a little shorter cuz at the same time i was workin on a 50 line battle wit Pistol. V that was due in 30 min. from that time lol but still all feedback is good.

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Kanvas .. you had a nice story to it , I liked alot of your lines there were some really tight ones , a couple didn't rhyme but you stuck a pretty solid story line ... overall it was pretty sick

    The Infamous ... you didn't seem to follow a story line but that's ok like you said you had a battle also and a short time frame to drop ... but I like the direction you took it in.. plus you dropped a few nice lines in there that caught my eye , on such short notice while mutlitasking a 25bar battle it was a pretty sweet verse ...

    I thought it was a sick piece , I would be lying if I said It can't get better , there is room for improvement , but overall I liked the topic and you guys did well .. The Infamous next time try to keep your schedule clear , I know you could have wrote much hotter bars , I look forward to reading more collabs with you guys .. keep at em
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    Learning to stalk through the night, whispering among the streets,
    I see a lady that catches my eyes and instantly tries to tease me.
    She flashes some skin, but her thigh is plagued with cuts from a knife,
    Sad that I thought this woman looked like the type I could Wife.

    LOOOOOL couldnt get past that...fuckin weird..in a bad way..

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Appreciate the one who left decent feed



    You're one to talk Joe

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    get your feedback links or I'll close this..

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Sorry Cry, i did this as 4 am lol so feedback links were the last thing on my mind..it was more like Sleep > Feedback Links

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...726/index.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...780/index.html

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Quote Originally Posted by JustJoe View Post
    Learning to stalk through the night, whispering among the streets,
    I see a lady that catches my eyes and instantly tries to tease me.
    She flashes some skin, but her thigh is plagued with cuts from a knife,
    Sad that I thought this woman looked like the type I could Wife.

    LOOOOOL couldnt get past that...fuckin weird..in a bad way..
    Yeah that's real constructive, dick. If you ain't gonna leave at least decent feedback, get your fuckin bitch ass out.

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    The Infamous- Really good use of imagery and word play in your verse. Something you don't see a lot nowadays.
    "Second shot fired and took a comfort in my skin, burying itself deep in my concepts,
    But I shot back up like I had springs on my feet, leaving that bitch completely perplexed."
    ----Nice diction and flow....this is personally my favorite line of your verse. However, I feel like at times it was a little difficult to read along. Perhaps you got caught into your story more than you focused on rhyme scheme. Ok though because it seemed very personal and like a high level of energy.

    Kanvas---Very different style than from Infamous but in a good way. I like how you rhymed the same syllable repeatedly. That kept a good flow that was easy to read. I like the line about expendable assets. If you could work in more vocab like that i think you'll improve. This is my first post here hopefully it was beneficial to you guys.

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Quote Originally Posted by JxDxB View Post
    The Infamous- Really good use of imagery and word play in your verse. Something you don't see a lot nowadays.
    "Second shot fired and took a comfort in my skin, burying itself deep in my concepts,
    But I shot back up like I had springs on my feet, leaving that bitch completely perplexed."
    ----Nice diction and flow....this is personally my favorite line of your verse. However, I feel like at times it was a little difficult to read along. Perhaps you got caught into your story more than you focused on rhyme scheme. Ok though because it seemed very personal and like a high level of energy.

    Kanvas---Very different style than from Infamous but in a good way. I like how you rhymed the same syllable repeatedly. That kept a good flow that was easy to read. I like the line about expendable assets. If you could work in more vocab like that i think you'll improve. This is my first post here hopefully it was beneficial to you guys.
    Thanks for the feedback yo, i think you got me and kanvas's verse confused but I got it haha, I'll take that into consideration. And since your new if you need any help just message me i'll help you out bro.

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    uppin...

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Quote Originally Posted by JxDxB View Post
    The Infamous- Really good use of imagery and word play in your verse. Something you don't see a lot nowadays.
    "Second shot fired and took a comfort in my skin, burying itself deep in my concepts,
    But I shot back up like I had springs on my feet, leaving that bitch completely perplexed."
    ----Nice diction and flow....this is personally my favorite line of your verse. However, I feel like at times it was a little difficult to read along. Perhaps you got caught into your story more than you focused on rhyme scheme. Ok though because it seemed very personal and like a high level of energy.

    Kanvas---Very different style than from Infamous but in a good way. I like how you rhymed the same syllable repeatedly. That kept a good flow that was easy to read. I like the line about expendable assets. If you could work in more vocab like that i think you'll improve. This is my first post here hopefully it was beneficial to you guys.
    that's the kinda feed im lookin for, as soon as you drop a piece im gonna hit it up. thanks man

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Quote Originally Posted by Kanvas View Post
    that's the kinda feed im lookin for, as soon as you drop a piece im gonna hit it up. thanks man

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    Word bro im wit kanvas on that.
    and yo kanvas im bout to send you a PM

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Quote Originally Posted by Kanvas View Post
    that's the kinda feed im lookin for, as soon as you drop a piece im gonna hit it up. thanks man

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    Word bro im wit kanvas on that.
    and yo kanvas im bout to send you a PM

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    Re: The Infamous & Kanvas Collab - Kill or be Kill

    Infamous's part was better,Kanvas's part was like readin a story and not a rap,but it was gud still

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