You're No Hendrix (Fold-In)

[Cinizter]

The Fold-in Technique-Click Here

Fold-in is the technique of taking two different sheets of linear text (with the same linespacing), cutting each sheet in half and combining with the other, then reading across the resulting page. The resulting text is often a blend of the two themes, somewhat difficult to read.

YOU'RE NO HENDRIX (FOLD-IN)


Castrate no-nonsense kings in our snuff film
anti-poetry is my creation, I loathe it entirely
open up doors of freedom and burden society
doors in my head are locked but you like it
No room for Confucius say: no room for a red iris
No room for nature, no room for slobs that speak subliminal
by 2015 we'll be in the Mothership hunting down criminals
we like things that relate to drugs and works of Voltaire
why is it girls love the sensitive nerd that won't swear?
break your brake pads and slide until you're sworn off or banned
The apocalypse is an urban myth made by a foolish man
our favorite food is the result of a weed-induced, junk food binge
sop it up with a syringe and share it with hot-headed nomads
we are a sub-human race with demons in our gonads
blue martians with unlimited energy and scabbed acne
drink from my arteries and completely unlatch me
you're no Hendrix, you're no Marley so stick to the script
you're the same old, old same--all-out degeneration
birth of new life on Broadway is an overcompensation















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Dear Moleskine-Neruda II
Rhythmic Failure-[k]onquerer

[Jukon]

This was a real nice piece. I like the poetic structure, but still had rhythm and flowed nicely. I've been reading alot of your pieces and each ones a little better, I'll be sure to feed on some others too while I'm on here. A couple bars that stood out to me were:

"break your brake pads and slide until you're sworn off or banned
The apocalypse is an urban myth made by a foolish man"
simple wording, but had a solid meaning.

"doors in my head are locked but you like it
No room for Confucius say: no room for a red iris
No room for nature, no room for slobs that speak subliminal
by 2015 we'll be in the Mothership hunting down criminals"
This stood out to me for some reason, I have no idea why. I just like the wording and flow it had.

And lastly, the closing 3 lines were my favorite of the whole thing.
"you're no Hendrix, you're no Marley so stick to the script
you're the same old, old same--all-out degeneration
birth of new life on Broadway is an overcompensation"
You made your point here and didnt' drag it out longer than you had to.

Overall good piece man. 8/10 for me.
Thanks for feeding on "Rhythmic Failure"

[Cinizter]

thankx for the feed, trying out a style I haven't seen used in p.s. before.

[Galactus The Devourer]

I thought this was tight.. different and I do enjoy different.. I enjoyed the flow of the piece but not typically the rhyming element.. At the begining to this piece you sorta posted a warning, I dont think you really needed too, I felt that this was overall easily read. I enjoyed this man.. Keep up the good work. pz