for the record - break

[Jon]

blind lids
masking the face
behind armed fences;
dangerous glances
eyebrow down -
fighting for
nothing.

- customizable -
regard my lips for a min
moment with no openess
hoping for hopelessness
lose focus, before
i leave.

not a gesture;
wrong turn signs only...
so steady the wheel when your ready,
head back the way down
deep behind you and i
in your mind,
please.

too bad for you,
me & the situation;
it wasn't good, after all -
you see but apparently i couldn't
a clouded sunshine -
usually too bright
..... so now no
light is right

farewell, honey
goodnight

[Cinizter]

- customizable -
regard my lips for a min
moment with no openess
hoping for hopelessness
lose focus, before
i leave.

these were my fav. lines....but I don't really get the "-customizable-" part. I'm not saying it doesn't fit, I just don't see how it fits with the rest of the stanza or whatever.

liked the hoping for hopelessness line....i think it heightened a sense of futility you were trying to get across.

okay poem but I'm kinda judging it on structure and rhymescheme....couldn't tekk you what the topic was....