rest in prose

[soulstice.]

I used to bury my weekday twilights
in an aluminum coffin
lined with December's and May's

dreams and clouded witicisms
would trickle out
like dew setting in the morning
& I would fingerpaint them
In my memory's margins

just passing notes
going through the movements
like fifth grade first dates

until that
criterion collection half-moon
it may've been a full moon
just clouded a bit,
i couldn't take my eyes off of it
but couldn't take it all in, either
after I heard half-truths
muffled behind a cage of tears

...
"I see you"
Nobody can see me through the phone?
...

a despondent Grandfather clock
twisting his skinny whiskers a bit
could've been twenty years
I learned to cherish, I learned to love
I learned about the downward spiral
I learned everyone is addicted to something

so I would embrace
a new panorama
High-definition
"one death, get one free"
Ha, it's an easy sell
with a harp like that in the background

with new skin
and learned pupils
I observed maxim's
stacked between Maxim's
and People.. I saw people

stacks of funhouse mirrors
sad clowns juggling guilt and grief

some had met the Minatour
others had stowed away in the labyrinth far too long
others still, bore crests of defiance
a modern Knight's Templar

everyone has their spirit ripped apart some way
I realized some men dig holes deeper
taking a grain of sand out, bit by bit
as to ignore the true size of the abyss

Lost souls would
Spray-paint mausoleums
Disguised designer dejection

I believe that I saw
a gentle Frost set on the path before me
as I took out a pen and pad

everyone has an addiction
& old habits die hard
so I etched your face
in metaphor and rhymes

Can't find the right words
Never found passion in rhyme
It's just: I miss you

maybe I'll build up a stronger tolerance
but for now
this will have to do.

[soulstice.]

felt like getting something down for fun. ill get two links, not sure if we even need them though. enjoy or not, just felt like writin poetry for once lol

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...194/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=423931

[Cinizter]

with new skin
and learned pupils
I observed maxim's
stacked between Maxim's
and People.. I saw people

stacks of funhouse mirrors
sad clowns juggling guilt and grief

I was feeling this alot....I had to read it twice, the first time I read it the vocab and the wording caught my eye....when I read it again the subject matter really made me think. I feel that the piece is about nostalgia and cherishing your beginnings and your past. nice job

these lines were good too::


I used to bury my weekday twilights
in an aluminum coffin
lined with December's and May's

dreams and clouded witicisms
would trickle out
like dew setting in the morning
& I would fingerpaint them
In my memory's margins

[soulstice.]

word.. its about a dude who dabbled in poetry as a pasttime, but when ... an undisclosed character died .. the dude goes back to poetry as kind of a release. thanks for the read and fast feedback though foreal

[soulstice.]

w00t

[soulstice.]

one more up.. why not

[[k]onquerer]

a despondent Grandfather clock
twisting his skinny whiskers a bit
could've been twenty years
I learned to cherish, I learned to love
I learned about the downward spiral
I learned everyone is addicted to something

so I would embrace
a new panorama
High-definition
"one death, get one free"
Ha, it's an easy sell
with a harp like that in the background

for some reason, thats my favorite part of the entire thing. i love the feel it gives, someone goin back to a passion they once had when tragedy strikes. good topic, not seen it done in this form before. hope you keep posting shit like this. glad i read this.

Lost souls would
Spray-paint mausoleums
Disguised designer dejection

I believe that I saw
a gentle Frost set on the path before me
as I took out a pen and pad

everyone has an addiction
& old habits die hard
so I etched your face
in metaphor and rhymes


fire right here. you have a really extensive vocab and that's impressive on it's own, and you know you have a good one, so you execute and use your skills well. Good imagery and good drop overall.
Keep up.

[soulstice.]

thanks guys. still lookin for a bitttttt more feed lol.. i swear this forum was crazy active like two weeks ago