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    Newbie 4FORTY's Avatar
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    Arrow He's many things But not Everything

    As of now he's literally just typing away his emotions
    due to such non sense though his heart pushes the pen
    as he's on a HIGH level of being focused, so HIGH that
    it's to the point where he's unconscious.

    I mean, come on; lets be real now and point out how a lot
    seems to have been shifting, such as the continents where
    time is spent and DUHh it's obvious so quit saying that he's
    GIFTED. See first you believed he was all "peaches & cream"
    but now you're claiming that he's switching, only assuming while
    you're drooling, day dreaming and having yet to remember that he's
    DIFFERENT.

    Look: he's persuasive , misbehaving and observant
    try adding one of the greatest who enslaves us with his PERFECT
    pieces, ideas, concepts and advice mixed with logic, simulated thoughts
    from chronic and his life. I promise to do right as long as you are true and
    acknowledge my written facts before stating I'm this and that, remember; U-R-2
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    Re: He's many things But not Everything


    Look: he's persuasive , misbehaving and observant
    try adding one of the greatest who enslaves us with his PERFECT
    pieces, ideas, concepts and advice mixed with logic, simulated thoughts
    from chronic and his life.


    these lines were good and really stayed on topic well. Once again like in your other piece I like the topics you choose and your rhymeschemes alot. the way you structure the rhymeschemes you use is very unique.

    keep posting homie.

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    Re: He's many things But not Everything

    thanks man, i relle appreciate the feadback
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