quick written

[thatKidB]

just bored as hell, keystyling randomness

ayo, I'm too damn simple n complex rolled up like change
gotta use authority though, yo, gotta control all my rage
cuz I be moving like platonic plates at supersonic rates
no racing me, and yo, creatively speaking the chronic pays
not even high, just talking on the real for me this reality
stringing quality through my lips, with no crew honestly
no mic, no studio, no production team so hate me, lets
but fuck it ho, don't we all need to start with baby steps
so best pray I stay under the scene like artists canvas
and I got my bad habits, just hope one is sparking cancer sticks
cuz I ain't going anywhere, you dead, thats how many fair
money on my mind, that place, wishing somebody can send me there
cuz working fast food a raise is rare, I'm knowing such
heart beats only thing blowing up, but still flowing, sup
from the front lines listening to Kimbo Price at lunch time
really though it sucks inside, lungs felt the blunt shine


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[the Titan]

'cuz I be moving like platonic plates at supersonic rates'
Heavy ass line, dude. Nice keystyle! some bits were a tiny bit predictible towards the end, but that opening gambit was so strong. nice job.

[DeeKay298]

I thought it was alright. You had some good lines in there but at some parts i kinda got lost... idk maybe it was just me lol. You put in some good multies too and it flowed nice for the most part. i liked it.

cuz I be moving like platonic plates at supersonic rates
no racing me, and yo, creatively speaking the chronic pays

that line went hard... i really liked it nice vocab on that too

[thatKidB]

yea. when I get too bored and write down lines, I tend to stray off alot here n there. thats why I need to smoke when I write/spit. gets my head on straight

[Vital_Organ]

This line is my favorite out of them all.
'cuz I be moving like platonic plates at supersonic rates'
You lost me at this line.
'and I got my bad habits, just hope one is sparking cancer sticks'

Overall i like it .