Stuff at the Club

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Stuff at the Club

My words are music a nerd not to use it many are touched
Went to the club search the premises but put too much
Emphasis on having a good time drinking hood wine
DJ’s tune alarm while I sip Boone’s Farm girls so fine
Felt the world in mine like NAZ romance galore as
The dance floor shine black lights on this exact night
My bling triped crews while wearing wing tip shoes
These girls swing hips so smooth trip on the blues
Sung by BB King started to see things now there’s a crowd
Fill up so fast the thrill started to blast DJ mix was loud
Enjoy galore it was like a toy store everybody wanted game
To pull a dame my luck was slick wanted results quick came
To a girls table ready to hurl fable in the form of love talk
Her perfume a wild flavor can’t use child behavior caught
In a gaze “look boo dear are you new here?” “no by no means”
I been checking you how you be wrecking crew I from queens
Like LL and I be doing it and doing it well I can tell you nice
Chick girl bet you full of fun and surprises sure as the sun rises
Tons of disquises in your attitude I won’t be able to elude that sizes
You up boo?” “nope I’m easy going but you sleezy showing you
Want sex out of the blue it may be complex for you growing to
Be my boyfriend, a clown lame I can hear the sound of rain on
Your roof” “naw girl the plain truth I love you and remain strong
So girl like falling trees you have me crawling on my knees begging
For some I kid you not wanna pop your lid of hot cream I’m pledging
To do so, so boo lets go to my crib awhile and live in style

[English]

sick

[Hush]

nobody wants to read about crossdressing wierdo

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my link http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...342/index.html

[[k]onquerer]

this was pretty simple but painted a picture with words. imagery was there, flow was on point at some bars but some it was off a little but over all decent drop. favorite part

Emphasis on having a good time drinking hood wine
DJ’s tune alarm while I sip Boone’s Farm girls so fine
Felt the world in mine like NAZ romance galore as
The dance floor shine black lights on this exact night

kinda funny but solid. FUCK boones farm haha hate that shit but this was a decent drop. keep practicin

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my link http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...335/index.html

[JLoCo]

this had a few well administered multi's but also I feel like u dropped rhymes meaning left the flow hanging and did a 180. increased bar lengths added syllables and strayed from ya rhyme scheme like here:

Emphasis on having a good time drinking hood wine
DJ’s tune alarm while I sip Boone’s Farm girls so fine
ok simple but acceptable.

Felt the world in mine like NAZ romance galore as
The dance floor shine black lights on this exact night
although i see ur alteration of ya flow here because its a written it was a rough transition

My bling triped crews while wearing wing tip shoes
These girls swing hips so smooth trip on the blues
again simple but adequate...

decent but you got better shit in you. try avoiding tired subjects and do something unheard of. just a thought from a novice, think nothing of this.

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thanks for the props on this one for real

[Hush]

no, your gay forreal

[English]

is this your troll Hush

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well yall can see HUSH is a man kinda stupid we must ignore him boy go eat some chicken or something

así puede ver el yall HUSH es un hombre un poco estúpido debemos ignorarlo niño a comer un poco de pollo o algo así