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    Bad Player Good Player

    i took out the bad player since i feel the good player is better

    good player

    they warn me not to love you
    they tell me you’re a player
    and honestly thas one of the most
    adorable things about you
    cuz I kno you’re not..
    you abandon life’s problems
    in the company of a man
    and it’s usually the man in you
    that excites you the most
    given the moment
    you’re free like a bird
    till your broken nest you return
    to the brokenness of your home
    how can somebody who keeps so much company
    feel so alone
    you and I both know that situation will be alright..
    but I remember wakin up in the night
    and you asked me
    why I liked someone so ugly
    it’s the humbleness you rarely exhibit
    that draws me- and all these men (lol)
    it takes someone who’s known you for years
    to write something like this
    I know you don’t feel it right now
    but you are appreciated
    I remember a quote that goes
    maybe some women aren’t meant to be tamed
    maybe they just need to run free
    till they find someone just as wild
    to run with them
    so when your body gets tired
    dawn turns into night
    your soles ache in your shoes
    call on me
    I"’m ready to be loosed"
    Last edited by Bless Da Lord; June 17th, 2010 at 02:42 PM
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    Re: Bad Player Good Player

    its two poems in one,kind of a two sides of emotion deal
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    Re: Bad Player Good Player

    the second one is nice man, the first was a little sloppy in places and almost made me not bother with part two but I'm glad I did. really felt it, good stuff.

    the first piece was jerky and bad to read, the second piece just exposed some really nice thoughts and feelings about someone who sounds like a top chick.

    are they both about the same gal? i got the impression that they were but I guess I could easily be wrong.
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    Re: Bad Player Good Player

    bump bump bump

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    Re: Bad Player Good Player

    This is by far a favorite of mine, I felt very connected to this poem for reasons of my
    own, it really gets into some deep shit without exposing to much, great job, I def look forward to seeing more of your work!!!
    Bosschick

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    Re: Bad Player Good Player

    This was alright, felt rushed in a way. I liked the metas though, you made the reader think and that's something I enjoy. You shouldn't have taken out the second part in my opinion but it's whatever you think works, I suppose.

    Overall, it was okay. Elevating is always something to do...and work on. So keep that in mind..and good luck. Good read.

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