Beheading Nothings

[Thrust]

bruised and beaten
battle was won but don't take for certain
a martian landing on a new port
demanding your praise and reason
stood the ground with the tree
grew but now you must leave
in the book you shall be thee
and when you talk of me, capitalize He
setting a new standard
one that's not easily remembered
one you need to know
something you have rendered
go ahead and say your nothings
lost in the void
the senses you are touching
came without the voice.


i am coping
with your nothings
i don't want this
i don't need it

i am coping
with your something
you don't mean it
i can see it


lost in reflection
seeing my own progression
you told me how to
i went on stepping
did not listen
not even for a minute
treason to loyalty
for the benefits of me

i am coping
with your nothings
i don't want this
i don't need it

i am coping
with your something
you don't mean it
i can see it

[Chuck Diesel]

good piece, i like the way it reads. honestly IMO the first stanza doesnt seem like it fits. thats not to say that the first stanza isnt well written.. i just feel like it doesnt go to this.. i enjoyed the repetition with coping. and i enjoyed the flow of the 4th stanza just reads pretty perfectly.. i'll leave a more detailed feed when its not 6:00 am hahah stay up n rtf if possible