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    Overdose

    Temptation, it's calling, do I fight it off,
    or fall in. Do I risk it all? All of it, my health.....my life?
    I don't know.

    I'm giving into sin
    Soon I may slip again
    I've fought for so long
    But these voices in my head
    They wont let me forget
    I'm filled with such torment
    I'm pleading with a god
    That I don't even believe in
    There's so much on my mind
    And it's killing me inside
    I really do believe
    That I'm going to fall tonight
    I remember the struggle
    That I dealt with in the past
    And when I finally killed it off
    I thought that I could last
    But it seems I'm not so strong
    It seems the die is cast

    They're calling out to me
    I'm losing so much sleep
    The pain it just wont go
    And it's making me so weak
    I thought I'd be all right
    I thought I'd be just fine
    But there's so much going on
    It's fucking with my mind

    Slipped and overdosed
    Almost comatose

    I just don't know

    Well fuck I guess I slipped
    I thought I had a grip
    The voices where to much
    But do I really give a shit
    I mean the feeling, it's so good
    And it brings to me such peace
    It seems the only way
    for my demons to be ceased
    But this can not be right
    Is what I'm feeling real?
    Am I truly feeling bliss?
    or just lies from the pills

    I reach for the bottle, again I pop the top
    I hope you will forgive me, bottoms up.

    Slipped and overdosed
    Almost comatose

    I just don't know
    ~lil robbie~
    Time to take over

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    Re: Overdose

    Just a lil sumthin new im trying short lines
    ~lil robbie~
    Time to take over

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    Re: Overdose

    some advice i was given.. use more multiple syllable rhymes. i didn't really feel it.

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    Re: Overdose

    I liked the piece. Prob sound better then it reads. Get like downer beat, low base, maybe like a violin going. The rhymes was bit basic, other then that it was ok.

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