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'Da lyrics is fire hit you like hot hands'
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A post a month how very inactive
Sexually aswell seen as ur so unattractive
datMJboi ur more BAD than a THRILLER
Ur last girlfriend represented Godzilla
Cap City yeh cc suppose as big as u’ve seen
Ur idea of porn is two apples with a banana in between
Pussy out of a keystyle cuz u got no one to write for u
Caspers on the phone he knows u don’t have a clue
Now I’m gonna have to prius this win today ur wack
Cuz like Toyota for serious flaws there gonna pull u back
Key styled blah de blah de boooooooooooooooooooooo
10 mins and counting
Im heavy handed so when i hit punch lines bitch vamanos/
make a nigga quit the site, Knock em down like dominos/
My flow so phenomenal, ya flow str8 comical/
my lyrics is powerful,optimal, get hit hard keep yah balance hoe/
yo sound like you sound, on some minnie mouse shit doe./
Let me get of dis, im killin em, he toothless/
I murdered dis chump,no remorse str8 ruthless/
sound like click clack boom, broke da mic who in da booth kid/
Datmjboi, im killin him im mirkin shit/
Good game like kobe, so im dunkin on dis lil bitch./
'Da lyrics is fire hit you like hot hands'
Ima break this down so y'all can get better. For real.
Titanium 'C'
A post a month how very inactive
Sexually aswell seen as ur so unattractive
^^this isn't much of a diss, too short, and not hard hitting whatsoever.
datMJboi ur more BAD than a THRILLER
Ur last girlfriend represented Godzilla
^^this could have been cool, but you messed up the wording and again your lines are too short to even get a decent punch out.
Cap City yeh cc suppose as big as u’ve seen
Ur idea of porn is two apples with a banana in between
^^lol, this still wasn't good, coulda been a lot better with improved wording and tryed to make it more funny. No sting at all either.
Pussy out of a keystyle cuz u got no one to write for u
Caspers on the phone he knows u don’t have a clue
^^I don't get it, was this supposed to be dissing him? Get better concepts.
Now I’m gonna have to prius this win today ur wack
Cuz like Toyota for serious flaws there gonna pull u back
^^this was a lot better than the other bars but still very subpar and could have had better wording and put more "umph" into it.
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Damjboi
Im heavy handed so when i hit punch lines bitch vamanos/
make a nigga quit the site, Knock em down like dominos/
^^real played, decent flow but coulda hit harder.
My flow so phenomenal, ya flow str8 comical/
my lyrics is powerful,optimal, get hit hard keep yah balance hoe/
yo sound like you sound, on some minnie mouse shit doe./
^^decent multies, kinda 3rd grade vocab, bad flow wtf.......still subpar..
Let me get of dis, im killin em, he toothless/
I murdered dis chump,no remorse str8 ruthless/
^^no, not dissin him really, lame punch, bad wording.
sound like click clack boom, broke da mic who in da booth kid/
Datmjboi, im killin him im mirkin shit/
Good game like kobe, so im dunkin on dis lil bitch./
^^bad flow, bad concepts, coulda been a lot better.
Both got a lot of elevating to do.
Don't take my explainin^ too hard, just tryna help yall.
Go check other battles out.
No hate to either.
But ima give myy vote too.............
Well Titanium had better concepts.
But datmjboi had a better flow.
*flips coin*
V/Titanium.
Trapped within the lights of the city..
Where it looks full of life but inside it's all empty..
And from outside it's all tempting..
What..it's all lies upon entry..
:noor:
[YOUTUBE]uGEHlYk4M5c[/YOUTUBE]
This was a very weak battle and you two need to elevate quite a bit. Titanium you got the idea of how a battle should be and how your lines should at least hit. There's nothing really quotable about this battle at all just to make that clear. You had more consistency and ability to put up bars then mjboi.
Now mjboi your verse was very low level and plain not battle worthy. Why I say that? Because most of your lines your praising yourself and putting yourself up when your supposed to be dissing your opponent with punches that sting. You've got a lot more elevating to do before you can bring something hard to a battle.
Titanium you had the better verse in my opinion so you get my vote. But you getting my vote doesn't mean your verse is the type that could win battles, you need to bring more fire. That's my honest vote for this battle.
V/Titanium
I'm simply one hell of a lyricist.
uppa
Now I’m gonna have to prius this win today ur wack
Cuz like Toyota for serious flaws there gonna pull u back
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n/a
cant belive i just red this battle. no hate to either but you need alot of elevation. i quoted tit's toyota line coz it relates 2 real word events. thats 1 thing i like 2 see, second is name flip 3rd is a decent punch, hardly met any criteria 4 a decent battle.
cant vote tho
cuppa uppa
Titanium c
A post a month how very inactive
Sexually aswell seen as ur so unattractive
This isn't harsh or anything, it's a statement
datMJboi ur more BAD than a THRILLER
Ur last girlfriend represented Godzilla
Alright, it's a statement
Cap City yeh cc suppose as big as u’ve seen
Ur idea of porn is two apples with a banana in between
This is closer to a punch
Pussy out of a keystyle cuz u got no one to write for u
Caspers on the phone he knows u don’t have a clue
I get that your tryin to say no one will ghost for him but you didn't make it a punch, and it's not clear
Now I’m gonna have to prius this win today ur wack
Cuz like Toyota for serious flaws there gonna pull u back
Alright, this was a good idea, you should have said recall and used somethin though, this is the right idea though
-You have concepts, just no harshness in your verse. And I said you have concepts but they're not original.
Datmjbol
Im heavy handed so when i hit punch lines bitch vamanos/
make a nigga quit the site, Knock em down like dominos/
Alright
My flow so phenomenal, ya flow str8 comical/
my lyrics is powerful,optimal, get hit hard keep yah balance hoe/
yo sound like you sound, on some minnie mouse shit doe./
This is for audio, in text this is called filler, and even in audio.....minnie mouse? Come on man....
Let me get of dis, im killin em, he toothless/
I murdered dis chump,no remorse str8 ruthless/
sound like click clack boom, broke da mic who in da booth kid/
This is just talking about yourself, not a diss towards him
Datmjboi, im killin him im mirkin shit/
Good game like kobe, so im dunkin on dis lil bitch./
Not really much of anything here, not a diss towards him
- You wrote this from an audio standpoint, and even then you need to have more punches.
V/ Titanium C
It's called self esteem bitch................esteem of your fuckin self
both seem really inexperienced so keep in mind guys that its time to elevate.
mj's verse had a nice structure but NOTHING witty or hard stinging with in it.
tit's structure couldve been better but he had more attempts at punches. i think you both should read some of the FL champ matches/LLL battle matches to get the hang of forming a proper verse and punch.
until then ...v/Tit
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Now I’m gonna have to prius this win today ur wack
Cuz like Toyota for serious flaws there gonna pull u back
vs
nada
tit.. work on better detail and flow of your lines
mj: work on vocab and disses..
no hate
v/tite
plz rtf
