Just a little something...

[Royal351]

Watch out I'm back on the scene
NY's motherfuckin' spitten machine
I rip it raw, don't butcher the rhymes
leave you speechless like the fuckin life of a mime
Arcane language leaves a lasting impression
kind of like my dick when sex is in session
choke when you spit, words stuck in the trachea
immense amount of pressure will begin to break ya
I'm a run of the mill rapper with avante-garde lyrics
your rhymes no more confusing than a wall of 'glyphics
A walking incubus I spit with a vengence
Knock out your teeth and wear them as pendants
Each one of a rapper I've killed with a line
I send goosebumps down even Freddie Kreuger's spine
I'm too fast for you bitch, I'm quick to pound 4's
bullets rain down like torrential downpours
I'm headed for home, rockin' a Metropolitans hat
wanna play? I'm already strapped with two balls and a bat


Tell me what you think, feedback appreciated



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[Royal351]

uppin...

any feedback? criticisms welcomed as well

[[k]onquerer]

Post your links or it'll get closed. Read the open mic rules

[KuntrE]

I rip it raw, don't butcher the rhymes
leave you speechless like the fuckin life of a mime

Pretty Dope line.


A walking incubus I spit with a vengence
Knock out your teeth and wear them as pendants

HAHA that is a mad funny line.


I'm headed for home, rockin' a Metropolitans hat
wanna play? I'm already strapped with two balls and a bat

Thought this was pretty Corney.



Arcane language leaves a lasting impression
kind of like my dick when sex is in session

Also thought was Corney

Over all pretty fun piece.

7/10

[Royal351]

Thanks, kinda like my first real thing....

here's a little something else....

use your vapid rhymes as sleep medication
give em to victims suffering from sleep deprivation
a certified plastic surgeon, aloways rearragin faces
just call in the doctor, cause I hit the right places
spit this verbal inferno, spray your body wit a liter
3rd degree burn when you get torched by the heater
battle face to face words deal a blow to your pecs
i go head to head more than dicks in gay sex

[Maccabaeus]

pretty cool..

just work on other aspects of "texting"..wordplays, multies, complexity, metas, etc..

[DJ Stricken]

pretty nice overall, like what everyone else said it is somewhat simple, but some good simile's in this. Keep it up

[Cody Nash]

closed for having fake feedback links.