MY State Of Mind.

[Seyance]

MY STATE OF MIND
Blacketh, Seyance, Baron Mynd, Sephiroth

State of mind is picket signs, patrolling the offices
Pitchfork to cortex, trucks unloading our consciousness
Lone wanderer, black bandanas, rogue in the foggy mist
Deliver truthful lies to exorcise the soul of reconnaissance
My writing's destroyed worlds and frozen economies..
Violently silenced pens from the most outspoken of colomnists.
Tried to take a cyanide pill, but was too sober to swallow it,
Instead only demolishing the throats of potent theologists..
Castraiting the mass taken and chose as a following
Send an ode to the colonies, tales of war and broken apologies.
We're the growing Anonymous that loathe Scientologists,
The cancerous growth thats deposited in a smokers esophagus,
That vote for the politrickian who's broken his promises-
Overrode his accomplishments blurrin' what 'Open' and 'Honest' is
to a hopeless conglomerate who's only focus was prominence
So much for scholarships, huh? Show me the positives..
in holdin' authoritive posts & never makin' a difference
Their wayward constituents just seem to take what they give to us...
Then raise a vociferous voice while were labelled as idiots-
& treated with great insignificance, the disdain is ridiculous...
When you think these hateful conspirators are overpaid for their rigourous,
..Painstaking, assiduous, application and diligence.
Our shamen's indiginous.. learned from the failings of icarus,
And uncovered the lost tales of fableled conspirators
Persuaded the visitors their ailments were hideous..
Abusing the mass, qued at his shack like a table of billiards.
The man has forsaken contributors, his plans are adjacent
Understand the relation between stone & the hands of a mason
..don't expect to get rich without ramification,
you could fall through the roof and end up back in the basement.
laughin as satan pacifies this inadequate nation,
making fake promises about a man who can change it..
The black & white Antichrist, rockin' a ‘Kiss me, I'm Nazareth’ apron
The last of the ancients stated, i'd be damned n' forsaken.
like the bastards awaiting salvation who depend on the cross..
MY state of mind is : survival ...whatever the cost.
so i step in the fog..
clutching the thing on my hip before your weapon is drawn
medics involved, can do so much before you hear that heavenly song
so many tests were involved, but i haven't learned a lesson at all
taking it back, to when i was label'd as 'black' before the kettle was called..
was never a boss, but still i find it hard to level with yall..
i'd rock a tailor made suit, but it's hard to 'measure a star'


M

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[Addicti0n]

im not so good at giving feed back right now... but
i just wanted to say i thought this piece was dope..
ur vocabulary was raw along with your rhyming...
it flowed nice to me... i was listening to "Holy Are You" by Rakim
and it made this read that much better...
ciiiiao

[soulstice.]

double post
i might be stupid

[soulstice.]

yeah you guys meshed perfectly on this it was quite impressive.. im pretttty sure that broken apologies ended one stanza and growing anonymous started off another, and you guys fucking melded it perfectly.. the imagery in this was sick as well, some of it reminded me of 1000 faces by blacketh, or 1001 by mynd lol, good shit foreal.. the opener was strong, and the closer was just as dope loved the "Kiss me, im nazareth" line, i love common references with an epic (in this case biblical) twist.. one complaint was the way you spelled politrickian.. you shouldve just dropped the i, imo, because saying pol-ah-trick-ee-an made the flow stumble as opposed to pol-ah=trick-an.. lol i know its nitpicking but hey whats feed without criticism... not much else to nitpick about, the way you guys weaved in different "state of minds" was pretty sick as well, it never seemed to be just a simple braggodicio piece, but had depth to it, with actual commentary you see in topical rants.. another point, you guys came off with intelligent vocabulary, without sounding pretentious.. thats key in writing a polished piece, and you guys are polished vets, so ie expected lol, and yo udelivered...

word, nice piece to all, keep it up

[Soule]

since seyance says my opinion in OM doesn't matter because I'm so "wack" I'll only say this was a dope piece and be on my way out.

[Soule]

Violently silenced pens from the most outspoken of colomnists.
Tried to take a cyanide pill, but was too sober to swallow it,
Instead only demolishing the throats of potent theologists..

whoever wrote that managed to woah me with it. the wording was perfectly set up and the flow held such great balance. i think it was Blacketh, the style would surely make it seem that way at least. i love the more direct focus on building meaning rather than storytelling, catches my attention more that way.

That vote for the politrickian who's broken his promises-
Overrode his accomplishments blurrin' what 'Open' and 'Honest' is

I love how honest and true this line is. i love how it could actually symbolize more than just a politician or elective. it proves in words that people who try to earn the love and/or respect of others aren't afraid to throw in some lies and faulty promises. very well worded too. like soulstice said, that nazerath line was pretty cool too. i didn't quote a bunch of shit because i'm tired. dope shi

[Baron Mynd]

This is what Open Mic is all about.

Fabulous.

[Mr. Black]

whoever wrote that managed to woah me with it. the wording was perfectly set up and the flow held such great balance. i think it was Blacketh, the style would surely make it seem that way at least

cannot take credit that for portion homie.

The cancerous growth thats deposited in a smokers esophagus,

this woah'd me though. props to whoever wrote this line.

Our shamen's indiginous.. learned from the failings of icarus,

this too.

[Seyance]

Violently silenced pens from the most outspoken of colomnists.
Tried to take a cyanide pill, but was too sober to swallow it,
Instead only demolishing the throats of potent theologists..

whoever wrote that managed to woah me with it. the wording was perfectly set up and the flow held such great balance. i think it was Blacketh, the style would surely make it seem that way at least. i love the more direct focus on building meaning rather than storytelling, catches my attention more that way.

I can, thanks!

Honestly this was fun as hell to write.. I think we meshed perfectly, the rhyme schemes were so fluid from blacketh to me to baron and then back.. you could've sworn it was all written by one guy. Everyone brought different elements to this which made it so great from me, Black had real depth to his lines and everything you could see there was a message behind it and Baron just came with that raw vocab, the way he manages to keep it relevant with that many double rhymes and internals is so nice to me. Seph really brought it home, had some nice wordplays and a strong flow, the kettle line flowed real dope to me.

On the second scheme, I started on the shamens indiginous line and looked back and realised, Baron had just sapped the fuck outta that scheme and could only squeeze a few more bars out of it. Tried to keep it fluid and smooth though.

Even though this is 40+ lines, the wording and smoothness of our rhyme scheme makes this an effortless read. I honestly haven't seen a better example of using multis well without forcing and in a relevant way anywhere. I can't wait to start writing some more shit with you guys.

[AlphaMetric]

this was dope ya'll.... I see some dopeness here, shit's crazy, so many good and big words, so much imagery and wordplay..... this shit was fire.... I think ya'll went hard cause I can't really find any negative....

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...274/index.html
can ya'll check this, peace

[The Nav Man™]

This was written real nice. Had some real dope vocabulary. Good multies used within the whole piece. You guys really came together nicely on this. Good OM guys, stay at it.

[Mr. Black]

lol @ so many good and big words .. wtf

[Baron Mynd]

lmao @ TJC happily seeing a dictionary archived here as long as it met his strict criteria of good and big words

roflzzz

[rhymebad]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...157/index.html
WOW I THINK YOU WROTE ABOVE YOUR AUDIENCE HEAD YOU NEED TO DUMB DOWN ON ALL THE BIG WORDS HELL YOU NEED A DICTIONARY TO COMPREHEND ALL THIS BUT IT REALLY TOOK SKILLS TO PUT THIS TOGETHER DOE SO PROPS FOR THAT i ENJOYED IT BUT IT WAS ON COLLEGE LEVEL EASY

[Seyance]

You mean, we wrote above your head.. your not our audience.