Calibers of Hell & Heaven: 8th Plague

[Mr. Black]

kind of a boring topic tbh. heaven and hell? i mean ... ok.

there was nothing to really tie your verses together .. one wrote about hell , the next heaven. pretty basic.

you both had pretty solid imagery though, not gonna front on you. riv had some pretty vivid scenes mapped out - not bad as far as that horror shit goes

soul was better technically and was easier to read .. and the content was just as on point. head many descriptions of 'heaven' but this was solid, well done

Men patient, devout, sing hymns of praise, of simple days
As the sun rises again and the little clouds wisp away

ill ..

keep doin it guys .. think up a more inspired topic next time

[soulstice.]

yeah i agree black the topic wasnt completely inspired, but i mean just flexin rhymes to stay fresh for leagues lol... thanks to all

[Dramma20]

This Was A Great Piece... Very Deep And Emotional I Like That.
You Could Always Tell When Sumthin Comes From the heart and thats what this is.
I'm not much of a poet but this was a great piece and I enjoyed it.
Flow was easy to follow and the choice of vocab was enourmous.
sum real intellectual Work.

10/10 !!

[Rivalyn]

Thanks black, i'll consider doing that.

up

[Cody Nash]

the amount of upping you do is rediculous.. calm down.

[.-Noob.Saibot-.]

riv ur verses were sick the whole descriptoin was fuckin beast i'd quote my fav lines buh i basically liked the whole thing same goes fr soulstice u guys opened it sick and ended it sick although i think the heaven part shouldve come first IMO buh thts jus me regardless heaven&hell concept = amazing

[Ink Poyzin]

sorry ya'll for not hittin' this piece up sooner, been busy alot lately. caught a virus the other day, had to format my whole c:/. had to download all my shit again, it really sucked. yo riva get on msn when you get a chance, i have somethin' for ya bro..

anyhow about this piece, ya'll did good with it. the imagery was dope, i'd say it stuck out the most for both verses. diggin' the concept, describing hell and heaven.. the flows were on point, gave it a smooth and easy read. being that ya'll stayed on topic and didn't drift off anywhere, the structure was great. dope r-schemes and multi's, which gives me the feelin' this would make a great audio. some metaphors here and there, really touched this piece up and made it interesting. i enjoyed it alot dudes, this was dope. keep writing, ya'll some good writers.

[Rivalyn]

Thanks fam.

[Rivalyn]

Up.

[Seyance]

Let it die, your the gayest person for upping shit.

[!!Syco-Logic!!]

i put it the paper homie....it'll never die now nice drop...8.5/10