wording

[Puncha Blurta]

Heads keep saying dat my wording sucks an needs a lot of workin up but i dont really know what they mean by it.

I kno dat obviously its how you word your verse but i aint really sure what i should be doin to step it up. Any one got anything to say about dis go ahead cus i need to get on it!
Safe

[Damz]

Read literature. Read other peoples hall of fame pieces. and
Check out how there's is worded. and just practice

[Puncha Blurta]

i read plenty, same as vet battles etc. my education and interest aint a problem
dat advice sucked
i jus don't understand what it is dat is wrong with my wording, when ppl bring it up i look at my verse sometimes an i jus think
"ur jus sayin dat cus u gotta say sumthin"

[Seyance]

naa, wording is so critical..

you need to word so it makes literal sense, in actual good english.

not like e.g.

graze a land, take for grant i'll break ya plams
like a amptuee you'll be dipraved of hands

it doesn't make sense if you read it in a book. everything seems forced and awkward.

you grazed my land, so i'll break your palms..
and like an amputee you will be dipraved of hands

punch is wack, but it makes sense.. in english. the setup flows to the punch and it talks about things relevant to the punch.

A lot of people also over word punches.. when they need to be simple and catchy.

e.g

you had horrible wording of punches, next time you should more than rap with skill,
because if this is the immaculate conception, it really was in need of the moring after pill

here, i'll make it simpler..

horrible wording, next time more than rap with skill..
cause that immaculate conception.. really needed the morning after pill

[Puncha Blurta]

dat helps a lot more
thanks a lot seyance!
if anyone else have anything else 2 add i am all ears but if not den thanks 2 u 2 who have replied, appreciate ur time

[D4real]

I say use synonyms to help with elementary bars
such as

in this batttle I'll show no pity
you'll take more blows than fifty

CHANGE IT TO....

why am I battling this kid...he's worthless
that's like the end of the barrel...battling Curtis