Freestyle: The End

[Cody Nash]

Freestyle: The End
By: Cry





Dear new retarded guys: Let me show you a freestyle..


as I explode through and defile everything in my way
every being, every "brain" that burried me in my state...
catatonic and sideways, blinded by the blind...
I had no hope for this shit, yet got reminded by the light
that flying by with time... was my dormant skills
just waiting to be awakened by support and will
to write out of line and show contortion's ill
to die today and be found prehistoric still!
but I'm askin' how eatin' porridge fills? readers, riddle this...
if she didn't eat it -- ain't big Ursa gon' eat the little bitch?
^^that's as real as riddles get!! (as if you really get it)
hint: I'm the bear -- you're something my teeth befriended
& now my floss might need an exit, so yo, get the fuck up
write to contend with ME... or forget what once was
'cause I insist it was love the minute I penciled a word
stenciled a verse, crafted like NASA, I represented the earth
with every breath, every work, every new day begun...
I sometimes ask me how I do this without losing it once
writing all these lines when I knew they'd be loved
writing with other people, just to prove we'd be one
while to you writing's just a bitch..... & how stupid she was
been teachin' birds how to fly before the brooding's begun
but now moving me's done, I'm the pillar among stick houses
a cold blooded cat -- a killer amongst the mouses
nothin' realer to fuckin' douse kids, who write the dire prose
you write flames? well I spit letters, right out the firehose
freestyler flow... this is how you fucking do it
people noddin' their head to paper without the bumpin' music
^^no pause, abrupt and movin'... "abrupt" as in "descent"
not "unexpected", STUPID! vocab's nothin' to this head
I get destructive in the end, simply bossin' on whole faces
this piece just lost it's rant -- now I'd call it a bold statement
my finale's are gold plated, while ya'll ain't beginning worthy
writers dyin' of natural causes?? I'm callin' 'em Brittany Murphy


phew... damn, it's been a while,
but I just cooked dudes!!
so I'm like Bruklor with the ink,
& free style's what you should do..


but hey, listen... I'm on my shit with God as my witness
'cause he's accusing me to be the Devil for all that I'm rippin'
you follow now? fixed in -- my sights are as set as yours
except mine are nice, & all you fight are the dreaded pores!
while I try to forget and pour everything that I have to lend
freestylin' random thoughts... droppin' blasts to the dead
stop feedin' back on drops that only deserve half the respect!
learn a lack of relent.. open casket passes the test
your freestyle's are what happened when we handed the fans a pen.




next time you freestyle... please don't.

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...239/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...442/index.html

[Lotti Motti]

yea shit was beast homie....punches were ill especially in a freestyle...shit flowed really well throughout the entire work.... "catatonic and sideways, blinded by the blind...
I had no hope for this shit, yet got reminded by the light" .... word..that shit was ill....keep doin that shit cuzzo.

[Cody Nash]

bump

[thatKidB]

liked this......even for a freestyle each line was quite sharp... liked how it flowed well.. could pick out a few lines I could quote.. but, too lazy.....just letting you know it was nice

[Cody Nash]

thanks

btw, it's not a freestyle.. it's CALLED Freestyle.. sort've making fun of all the dudes who post those "freestyles" and they just end up bein' so wack.

[rhymebad]

Dang got to say thiswas off the hook right here this also make a statement that i and cry is definitely the illest on site back to back and yall better true that

[thatKidB]

ah, okay......*goes to hide my latest OM*

[Engivale]

Was really enjoying reading this and got to this part and basically started applauding.

but now moving me's done, I'm the pillar among stick houses
a cold blooded cat -- a killer amongst the mouses
nothin' realer to fuckin' douse kids, who write the dire prose
you write flames? well I spit letters, right out the firehose
freestyler flow... this is how you fucking do it
people noddin' their head to paper without the bumpin' music

^^^Fucking awesome, man. Especially the last two lines, it just made me fucking smile. Such a nicely done piece, man. The ending wasn't sensational, if there's any problem with it at all, but mostly this was a funny rant, well rhymed, with a few really great lines sprinkled in. But for that one part I was especially glad to read this piece.

Good work as usual, Cry. Keep it comin'.

[Bruklor]

This had me laughing allllll over. I was LoLing and rolling around.
Honestly though, it was a good read, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I don't know if it was inspired by IgloS' 100 bars (cause I kind of was to do something like this), or me bitching so much. Either way, sssaaaanks.

I wasn't crazy about the beggining, I felt it was kind of lacking, and unmotivated, but it literally went from that to smack in the face in one line.. T'was dope.
(This is the section, of entire hotness)
"'cause I insist it was love the minute I penciled a word
stenciled a verse, crafted like NASA, I represented the earth
with every breath, every work, every new day begun...
I sometimes ask me how I do this without losing it once
writing all these lines when I knew they'd be loved
writing with other people, just to prove we'd be one
while to you writing's just a bitch..... & how stupid she was
been teachin' birds how to fly before the brooding's begun
but now moving me's done, I'm the pillar among stick houses
a cold blooded cat -- a killer amongst the mouses
nothin' realer to fuckin' douse kids, who write the dire prose
you write flames? well I spit letters, right out the firehose
freestyler flow... this is how you fucking do it
people noddin' their head to paper without the bumpin' music"

Dopeyness.

I think I might do my piece soon, after all this inspiration from you and IgloS.

P.S. Thanks for the name drop =)

[Jæk]

this was real, had a great flow yoru structure is almost perfect your rhyme scheme is next level with a great vocab you show what your saying and its deep very well writin great peace bruh enjoyed readin

[Oranges]

dripping wet with arrogance, so thats how I've read this piece.

as I explode through and defile everything in my way
every being, every "brain" that burried me in my state...
nice wordplay, clean opener.
catatonic and sideways, blinded by the blind...
I had no hope for this shit, yet got reminded by the light
ok, thought wording could have been a bit nicer, but still smooth
that flying by with time... was my dormant skills
just waiting to be awakened by support and will
cool, this is hot.
to write out of line and show contortion's ill
to die today and be found prehistoric still!
a little twisted humor, and very well conceived concept.
but I'm askin' how eatin' porridge fills? readers, riddle this...
if she didn't eat it -- ain't big Ursa gon' eat the little bitch?
^^that's as real as riddles get!! (as if you really get it)
hint: I'm the bear -- you're something my teeth befriended
2 ok bars, riddled with lots of wordplay, and clever little rips.
& now my floss might need an exit, so yo, get the fuck up
write to contend with ME... or forget what once was
nice callout with good multies.
'cause I insist it was love the minute I penciled a word
stenciled a verse, crafted like NASA, I represented the earth
dope line, great imagery, nice clean multies
with every breath, every work, every new day begun...
I sometimes ask me how I do this without losing it once
funny....just plain phunny.
writing all these lines when I knew they'd be loved
writing with other people, just to prove we'd be one
cool reference to the drop you did with Alien, can tell the verse is fresh
while to you writing's just a bitch..... & how stupid she was
been teachin' birds how to fly before the brooding's begun
nice imagery, wordplay throughout
but now moving me's done, I'm the pillar among stick houses
a cold blooded cat -- a killer amongst the mouses
another really dope line, right to the point of the piece
nothin' realer to fuckin' douse kids, who write the dire prose
you write flames? well I spit letters, right out the firehose
great imagery, sickest line yet.....this is what I expect when i read a cry piece.
freestyler flow... this is how you fucking do it
people noddin' their head to paper without the bumpin' music
more fire, the heat is up. great stuff
^^no pause, abrupt and movin'... "abrupt" as in "descent"
not "unexpected", STUPID! vocab's nothin' to this head
cool.....see above three bars.
I get destructive in the end, simply bossin' on whole faces
this piece just lost it's rant -- now I'd call it a bold statement
fire stuff man, super impressive, really well formed
my finale's are gold plated, while ya'll ain't beginning worthy
writers dyin' of natural causes?? I'm callin' 'em Brittany Murphy
nice relevant line to the time period. this is a very nice, well thought out rhyme


phew... damn, it's been a while,
but I just cooked dudes!!
so I'm like Bruklor with the ink,
& free style's what you should do..
little oldschool interlude, feeling it leading to something nicer


but hey, listen... I'm on my shit with God as my witness
'cause he's accusing me to be the Devil for all that I'm rippin'
didnt like this as much, felt it came a little softer
you follow now? fixed in -- my sights are as set as yours
except mine are nice, & all you fight are the dreaded pores!
cool, this is a nice punchline. clever, to the pt, hits well
while I try to forget and pour everything that I have to lend
freestylin' random thoughts... droppin' blasts to the dead
ok slant rhyme, still good wordplay
stop feedin' back on drops that only deserve half the respect!
learn a lack of relent.. open casket passes the test
your freestyle's are what happened when we handed the fans a pen.
ok closer. the end didnt grab me as much as some of the middle lines though.

Overall another quality drop by Cry, and since I saw a little call out dropped in there I'm workin' on somethin' 4 u cry. Be on the lookout.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...605/index.html

[Cody Nash]

writing all these lines when I knew they'd be loved
writing with other people, just to prove we'd be one
cool reference to the drop you did with Alien, can tell the verse is fresh


^^thanks for noticing this haha, didn't think anyone would catch it



props on feed guys.. thanks again

[Cody Nash]

bump for a bit more

[Fumo]

Ur rhyme scheme is on point, visual and thought provoking lines without being directly knowledge droppin....liked the NASA line a lot. Lotsa cockiness and arrogance but braggadocio’s not a problem if u can consistently back it up.

Nice lines and imagery throughout, the firehose line was sick. Has the flow for that noddin heads to paper line to hit at exactly the right time, like shit, the bastards right, my heads fuckin noddin! Murphy line was cool too.

All in all a good piece, using ‘freestyle’ as a concept for a written piece works but would definitely like to see u write something a little deeper conceptually. Admittedly, i’m new so u may have a nice back catalogue. Either way a decent piece.