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    200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    this has been on my desktop for a couple months.. I keyed it all in one VERY long sitting.. I figured nobody would read it because it is so long.. but might as well post it.. you don't have to read it all.. just jump around.. let me know if you like any of it


    Canibus did it and so can 'glos
    you want dope rhymes, here's an over-dose
    ayo I go for broke.. don't stop me
    I turn the mic into a fucking no dachi
    ..or Thor's hammer, strike with vengeance
    got raw grammar, written' tremendous
    ..my pen lifts, the world, like Atlas
    try and match this, you enter into blackness
    there's no issue a rhyme I never mis-use
    I'm the creator and destroyer like Vishnu
    mic is anointed I write with a blessed pen
    an alien emcee who came down with the Nephilim
    ran the cave men turned 'em into slave men
    slayin' brave men, rhymes I just blaze them
    stock mad and ravin', a different station
    I write a rap packed with terror like Craven
    Wes, yes, and now I digress
    an undead ghoul who is cold and lifeless
    check my iris, hypnotize like Vlad
    an unstoppable force spitten' fly iron clad
    rip the mic right in half, throw it at ya face
    disaster I'm faster flowin' at a pace
    hold my own in the race, you best-a respect the
    texture.. woven, yes-the.. chosen
    Cetra, lookin' for the land I was promised
    astonish and blind you will find I am honest
    sea full of snakes, deceitful with hate
    walls are closen' in you won't even escape
    I need to relate and express my mind
    I'm not good with words I do it best with rhymes
    write complex wit lines, hear with some caution
    every line that I flow is a spear I am tossin'
    nearin' the coffin, back like Lazarus
    ravenous to amateurs, damage ya hazardous
    mind's deep an' cavernous, filled with skeletons
    demons and witches, blowin' wit' hella wind
    gusts of swords, fly and hack you
    fuck wit my words and I will smash you
    slash through raps son, clearly I have won
    samurai an' dragon, handle mics fashion
    clashin', thrashin', ancient as Athens
    laughin', a mad man, yes I am captain
    ruler and master, rasin' the limit
    stayin' underground, blazin' ya gimmicks
    this is no jingle, every lines the real
    this is no single but an exercise in skills
    scheme after scheme, this is so simple
    my ink will drown ya, now ya'll sink slow
    down in the depths, acid and an ice
    nothin' but screams and a flash of a light
    a master I write, craftin' my weapons
    Confucius to emcees, teach bastards a lesson
    abacus of virtue, fate in the hour glass
    victory is sweet, taste has gone sour fast
    their eye lacks light, no way you'll match eye
    leaven' my foes lookin' like the Holy Grail's Black Knight
    draw out the taro, sharp as an arrow
    mind of a sage with the smarts of a Pharo
    the pass that's amassed kid is dark and is narrow
    I got high spirits and the heart of a sparrow
    reach to the stars, write bars on Mars
    liven' in America where it's hard to starve
    that was bar 34, I got a lot more
    give peace a chance, it's time to stop war
    we're all superficial, know we're shallow
    it's time you give it up and throw in the towel
    each an every vowel, I flow to perfection
    blown in perception, a shogun with weapons
    I listen to Wu, Nas and also Rakim
    the great fucken' classics, soon to be forgotten
    fuck what you know, it holds no weight
    'glos be ill.. yo I slow fate
    break the hands of time, when I flex son
    great an planin' lines, go any direction
    left or right, I could go down or up
    fuck commercial rap, it's whole sound sucks
    sneeze on the radio, I'm sick of that wack shit
    quickly I bash it, it strictly is average
    or garbage at best, I spark an then rest
    get ya verse outta' here, ya' hardly a test
    I'm acen' emcees, you're a two in the deck
    my flow is fuckin fly, ayo you should eject
    now ya ground breakin', I'm stomp on the earth
    cracken' the plates, I been a monster since birth
    this half sober, I'm nicer when drunk
    fuck with this flow, you can't write like me chump
    try an get stumped, left in confusion
    illusions protrudin', there is no solution
    except the one to dissolve ya, my spits like lye
    the level that I am at you can't get that high
    I'm a different type, your common as new times
    arial and courier, time to get some new rhymes
    who shines the brightest, touch of King Midas
    you find I'm the tightest, crush all writers
    I know that you like this, write til I black out
    jot a hundred fucken bars with just a few scratch outs
    smash clout, crush dreams, start the over throw
    toe to toe with 'glos ayo my flow'll leave ya comatose
    know my prose is, forged to perfection
    verbally poisonous, coarse your direction
    I'm past half way, continue to murder this
    every word I rip ayo 'glos'll merk ya scripts
    go learn some shit an pick up a book son
    I hang with the crooks son, leave yall shook ones
    piss in the mainstream, the way I rap is raw
    a magical creature, rap's Dagdamore
    fire out the staff, a sire with a wrath
    evil spirits ger released when I write a paragraph
    ghastly banshees an fucken' poltergeists
    create a super nova an fucken' explode with light
    leaven' ya blind, wander to the spike traps
    strength of the beast man, stronger when I write raps
    won't get the mic back, leave tracks destroyed
    cause I'm packin' noise to smash like asteroids
    out the blackest voids, this is a game yo
    tell me why in every track yall always have the same flow
    rainbows of blood, pour bones from the sky
    the ground spews flame's how you know I've arrived
    out of the catacombs, full of broken shattered bones
    alone on a cliff cape blownin' as I stand alone
    scepter an' crown, not a jester or clown
    tear your brain up when digest in the sound
    deplete every fiber, blood secretes saliva
    your fucken' with a masterful and tactical rhymer
    line for line a, rap fucken general
    you entered the lair an got trapped in the tentacles
    'glos is fearsome, don't get near run
    my flow is a dart that is thrown at ya ear drum
    start takin' punks into battle, jump in the saddle
    blast iglos until ya, trunk starts to rattle
    river Stix no paddle, surrounded by spirits
    sorcerer bring the sky, down with my lyrics
    stars crash to hills, blood baths over spill
    I take this shit serious, know that's for real
    blow black any of your poor writ throw backs
    an unstopable force that you can't fuckin' hold back
    describe yall as so wack, ain't fuckin wit me now
    say your style's well rooted, I'm cuttin the tree down
    an scorching ya earth, check the vernacular
    test an it's massacre I'm straight up hacken' yer
    best wrote versees into confetti
    comin' at emcees with the mask and machete
    no more jokes, so close up ya rap book
    ya whole mother fuckin syle son is a bad look
    that's a battle tip, but I can change that
    I find it strange that were on the same track
    struggle of the classes, jumble of the masses
    life is hectic, a jungle full of madness
    gott'a keep ya head up, Pac said it best man
    stayin' positive yo is really the best plan
    and all of the rest can, live their own life
    it could be worse, homeless in a cold night
    plus given' no light, or layin' on ya death bed
    battered and shattered on the street left dead
    pick myself up, I'm back where I start
    write these lines, my passion and spark
    try to master the art, practice every day
    I get my book out when I have to run away
    work is a grind, I'm an under-achiever
    sometimes I just wanna' slumber and leave the
    whole world in the dark, break into space
    times goin' fast gotta' change up the pace
    we live as one, a whole and apart
    life is a play, we got a role and a part
    the critics are harsh, throwin' sticks and stones
    tried to knock on gods door I guess he isn't home
    to each his own, Id rather say peace
    not a violent guy, I'd rather slay beats
    this is my purpose, never nervous
    rhyme word smith, craftin' my verses
    arrive on horses, survivin' remorseless
    a sith lord, who thrives with the force kid
    life's rough, better learn how to cope
    the world is a wheel an it turns with out hope
    round and round, then it comes to a stop
    witty with my lyrics to the drums I will plot
    mad cats liven' in the slums die an rot
    ..when I'm feelin' stressed son I just jot
    line after line till I run outt'a ink
    it's not where ya from, but son how ya think
    continue to hate, you're life 'll be wack
    people smile at ya face put a knife in ya back
    just try to relax, I speak to the viewer
    the state of rap now is deep in the sewer
    time to emerge, and rise from the ashes
    death is a bitch, and life is a bastard
    the orphan child, never was I wanted
    always stayin' sharp, never have I fronted
    truth is my motto, blue with my bottle
    headed up the mountain, who wanna' follow?
    no turnin' back now, fade into the background
    mother fucken' smash clowns when I'm spitten rap sounds
    one in the chamber, done outta' anger
    bump this in your trunk, son its a banger
    another cliff hanger, the rope starts breakin'
    dangles above, your hope starts shakin'
    live through the fall, I call it depression
    a never ending battle, fall into stressin'
    if you checked this cool, thanks for not doubtin' me
    100 mother fucken bars, and now I'm out yo peace





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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    I'mma be real with you, this was the illest fucking shit I've read on this site in....forever! Seriously, you ripped this shit. I'm disgusted at the fact that this piece has received so little feedback, but then again, this is RB. Anyway, I thought you completely destroyed this piece. Your rhyme scheme was far above average and your vocabulary was on par with the best of 'em. Not to mention your flow stayed consistent and deadly the entire length of the verse...which is a marvel within itself considering how LONG this fucking thing was. I have to tell ya...I read it all...and not once did I lose interest. In fact the only downfall was that it wasn't long enough. Seriously, even your filler (which was considerable) was entertaining as hell. What I liked most about this piece though, was how relentless it was, as well as the fact that you had a lot of witty and well thought-out lines. I think a very well-read and versed person will be able to identify with a lot of the historical, mystical, and theoretical content you placed in some of your bars. I know I did. I don't know if you've ever read any of my work (particularly my flex pieces) but if you have then I think you'll agree we have a very similar style. Check out my piece the Jihad Blade or Clash Of The Titans fount in the Hall of Fame thread. I just want to see if you notice the similarities. Anyway, if I still had a torch to pass in this forum I would most definitely be passing it on to you. I'm not sure if my approval is worth a damn around here, but if it is...then just know you have my highest regards and respect after this massive onslaught of dopeness. Anyway, I'm not going to quote anything cause I'm lazy, but don't think for a minute this entire joint wasn't easily quotable material...cause it is! Keep up the good work my mans. Maybe one day we'll be able to collaborate. But, yeah, I'm out, gotta go nominate this for HOF. Peace...
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    its been slept on cause its only been up a few hours..but his point stands..OM is like that..ill edit this with proper feed soon.sick shit as always homie.....

    om is gettin better.the vets are flushing out the nebs..its gettin better..this was sickness...everything ive read from you is dope so its no surprise that this is ill..multis,worpdlay.rhyme scheme,vocab..i mean its all there..you have a smooth rhyme scheme and you really shine when you write OMs,i liked everypart of this so im not gonna quote any specific part...id have to agree with ledgenz on the nomination part..everything ive read from you is dope and you never disappoint..keep droppin this dope shit for sure.~1~
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    LOL, thanks for the info...hadn't even notice it's only been up for 8hours. I just saw that it was a post over 50 lines and had recieved little no feed, which wouldn't be a strange occurance around here. But then again, maybe this forum has changed...I rarely visit or contribute anymore, so it isn't right for me to make assumptions. But, eh, my bad. Dope shit though bro. It almost has me in the mood to write again!

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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    To be honest, I'd really love it in you put this in Audio. I know you do audio...

    This like this lose so much being in text.. But they're much greater in audio.
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    I'll read this later... just not in the mood to read that much right now... the beginning looked promising though
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    oh yeah.. I'm gonna do an audio.. legend.. that means alot to me.. thanks bro.. if you wanna collab I'm down

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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    Quote Originally Posted by Iglosone View Post
    oh yeah.. I'm gonna do an audio.. legend.. that means alot to me.. thanks bro.. if you wanna collab I'm down
    Dope!

    Cause I liked it in text... but it seems much better suited for audio. Make it downloadable too
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    word homie this was dope
    good schemes ,flow wording strucure multie's lol everything was good here
    bro for a long piece this kept me reading throughout vocab and concept's were
    cool man that's what had me reading


    mic is anointed I write with a blessed pen
    an alien emcee who came down with the Nephilim
    ghastly banshees an fucken' poltergeists
    create a super nova an fucken' explode with light
    out of the catacombs, full of broken shattered bones
    alone on a cliff cape blownin' as I stand alone
    truth is my motto, blue with my bottle
    headed up the mountain, who wanna' follow?


    way to many lines to quote but those were some i really liked. again dope piece man for a long read it was still creative flowed structred and written very well man sorry for the little feed good shit dope drop man

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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    Good piece, if it was all keystyled good job
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    I need to relate and express my mind
    I'm not good with words I do it best with rhymes
    won't get the mic back, leave tracks destroyed
    cause I'm packin' noise to smash like asteroids
    out the blackest voids, this is a game yo
    tell me why in every track yall always have the same flow
    Not gonna bullshit u I didn't read the whole thing but those were a couple of my favorite parts nice piece though like dude above me said if it was keystyled extra daps haha

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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    Dude... holyy shit. I've read all your work and I thought it was all dope. This fucking tops it. 100 fuckin' bars bro, and each of them had a dope flow and dope fuckin rhymes. I wish I could see what was goin on in your mind when you wrote this, cause it just comes off the tongue so easily. I'm glad this shit isn't gettin' slept on, I'm deff gonna nominate this for HoF. I have confidence that this piece will get you in... If it doesn't, then fuck OM haha. This is by far the best piece I've ever read on OM, you're pretty much my inspiration on this website. I'm gonna be completely honest here, easily the dopest writer on RB, and I aint bein a kissass either, that's just not me. Seriously Iglos, never give up rappin, you're gonna make it big someday. Put that shit up on audio, the word will spread, people will start knowin' the name haha.
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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    God damn, this was long as shit..but got a little in, and really didn't want it to end..

    I was feeling everything, dope wordplay, rhyme scheme, vocab, flow, just everything man, I would love to hear this in audio, I would download and bump it daily.


    Dope quotables:

    describe yall as so wack, ain't fuckin wit me now
    say your style's well rooted, I'm cuttin the tree down

    the critics are harsh, throwin' sticks and stones
    tried to knock on gods door I guess he isn't home
    to each his own, Id rather say peace
    not a violent guy, I'd rather slay beats
    this is my purpose, never nervous
    rhyme word smith, craftin' my verses

    time to emerge, and rise from the ashes
    death is a bitch, and life is a bastard


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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    this is no jingle, every lines the real
    this is no single but an exercise in skills
    scheme after scheme, this is so simple
    my ink will drown ya, now ya'll sink slow
    down in the depths, acid and an ice
    nothin' but screams and a flash of a light
    a master I write, craftin' my weapons
    Confucius to emcees, teach bastards a lesson


    ^^^great words.. so many quoteables here, this didn't even take me that long to read haha. it was actually really fast paced... the poltergeist lines were sick, the surrounded by spirits part was sick too, I liked the whole thing to be honest. and I've got to tell ya that there has never been a piece this long on RB that I've ever liked... soo, props on that dude... usually I'd say this was too long, lots of un-needed shit, or that you fell off the rhymescheme too much... but you didn't! you held a strong scheme and pace the entire way through, I really don't think I fell off once. and had this not been 200 lines, I actually think it might've taken away from the topic/concept as a whole. because you're basically displaying the heart and soul of a writer here, you're telling us you can write forever because you love to do this, it's what you do. you're telling us you're going to run until the ink runs out... I mean, like LegendZ says, it even could've been longer! haha...


    in all seriousness though my man, it's been great watching you grow as a writer, and to think that you're only going to get better is almost a scary thought, but also very exciting because there hasn't been many dudes in some time to grow as quickly as you have. again, great piece of work here, and thanks for this...



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    Re: 200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

    fuckin lolz at that cry^

    thanks alot.. more to come =)

    soon as I get the time I'm a record this beast

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