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    The Introduction To Vivian Frost

    The Introduction to Vivian Frost

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    These are the tales and imaginations of Vivian Frost;
    Her origin has mostly been forgotten, and forever lost
    But under her spell we have been enchanted, and enabled
    To become completely edible to the taste of her fables
    As her scribes, we have never been, nor will we ever be
    The beauty she is, we are just her disciples, inevitably.
    She has graced us with the ability to always call on her,
    She lives on in all of us, and we are here to honour her.


    Her conception was never entirely explained,
    Ashamed of her body, her story was contained
    And remained cloaked from the path of society
    But from us, those who embraced in her entirety
    The serpent planted the seed in the womb of Eve
    But it seems that the apple fell far from the tree
    She is direct descendent, clothed in the lords skin
    But beneath the light, she holds Satan's grin

    Throughout the darkest images of earths history
    Vivian has been present, in secrecy inciting misery
    The power beneath her lips, drawn from her teeth
    Could cause travesty and topple the strongest dynasties
    When Caesars rule had grown and shown threat
    She withdrew the master strings in which she held
    She's inspired riots, fires, witch hunts and grave diggers
    But there are very few who are familiar with her figure

    When hungry, she eats. With light, she sleeps.
    When angry, she feasts. With night, she strikes.


    Her legacy became fantasy to protect her identity
    Drawn throughout history with fictions intensity
    Destiny concealed her in the shadows with prejudice
    Only revealing herself to unleash the deadliest kiss
    One which sits on the neck of her scribes with pride
    Her gift has filled us with love and blood lust inside
    Our lover, our queen, our majesty, our teacher
    Our misery, our demon, our travesty, our reaper

    She comes with two roses, one black, and one red
    Her supposed metaphor, to die, or become undead
    The rose gives you a choice that is inevitably yours
    Each has a different fate inside of the same door
    The black is a path that leads to blood shed from thirst
    The wrath of her curse leaves you, then death occurs
    The red creates a new form of life when she feeds
    Her teeth bleed into your veins, her means to breed

    We follow our fate, is it is written in our blood
    We hate when her name is dragged through the mud
    We've been to hell and back to respect her past
    Now we speak to protect the image you have
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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    Vivian Frost was created for anyone who wants to take part. This is a collaboration effort to bring forth creativity, and imagination to the members of RB. If hope this idea catches on, and sparks people to write their story, their encounter with Vivian, There is no guide lines to how you have to portray her, or even if you have to write about her at all. Vivian Frost is just a symbol for anyone to wishes to use her.

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    Fuck an explanation lol, the smart/worthy readers will know what's up. This was real fucking dope dude. Loved that Eve/Serpent bar. I almost want to put that shit in my signature. The imagery in this piece was immense. I could see Vivian's chapter on a TV screen in my skull. My eye's the projector and the computer's literally my screen lol. Your wording in this piece was perfect dude. I have no complaints at all. Rhymescheme was cool...towards the end it seemed to get more intense with more multies. I really liked it. Keep writing brother, Per Se 4 lyfe! Nom'd.

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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    This ran like a stream of consciousness piece which bounced endlessly from metaphor to metaphor, you score about a million point for originality bruklor, and that always makes a piece readable. this looks like a project i'd like to get involved in, i might help out if i got the time. Good vocab, rhymes and imagery too bud, good work.

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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    ^ To add onto that post, feed this for me and Johnny, If i can get on at work i'll drop some feed also.

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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    Wordity. Thanks family.

    Back up you go, Vivian.
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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    just finished this.. and I don't know how to put it.. lolz.. I liked it.. this was a very creative piece.. it made me think on a deeper level.. it wasn't your typical formulmatic story or topical... it worked on lots of levels.. lots of metas and themes in this piece.. it was a breathe of fresh air.. I enjoyed it alot.. I can see alot with this idea here

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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    Thanks, IgloS. I don't know if you read the second post or not.. but this is kind of an open idea for anyone to add onto... If anyone wishes.
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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    Hmph.
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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    quoteHallofameunquote with three peoples feedback.

    Wack. Thanks to everyone who did bother to read this, appreciate it.
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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    make no mistake we don't induct HoF's based on the feedback of a piece... we induct them based on the skill and brilliance behind the work... I read this a couple times now, sorry I haven't gotten back to feed on it.


    One which sits on the neck of her scribes with pride
    Her gift has filled us with love and blood lust inside
    Our lover, our queen, our majesty, our teacher
    Our misery, our demon, our travesty, our reaper


    ^^^this was by far my favorite part.. love those last two lines the most because each one focuses on a different set of emotions/types of people... Vivian is everything... she's what we want her to be. she's everything that makes us happy and everything that makes us sad... it's just a pretty cool concept... it has so many directions to take, but it seems that EVERYTHING is the main direction and point to the piece... symbolizing something that can be anything and everything you want it to be as long as you're doing it. really deep shit lol... haven't read something like this in a long time, refreshing to get this type of work back in OM... so word, again, great piece of art you have here.. and thank you deeply for the read. also, thank you for making my brain work in a way that I'd forgotton all about. props.

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    Re: per se: The Tales of Vivian Frost

    Dope intro Bruk, you brought Vivian to the masses with this piece, and I love the narrative through out, a perfect set-up for the many tales of Vivian Frost. You got my head racing with ideas right now so I think I'll have something for you soon. Anyway I loved the part about the two roses, that was a real cool use of symbolism, and your word choices were spot on. The conception with Eve and the serpent was creative, I liked what you did to that detail of Vivians life, kind of reminds me of the story of Lilith. This was just a real sick introduction to your character, and I can't wait to work on it - you've opened up a can of worms now Bruk, and I'm itchin to go fishin' - Dopesauce.

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