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    Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]



    Knight'Mare of Infant Earth

    Deepest part of the sea where breeze and waves crashes
    Land bleeds an ocean of weeds, remains gashes
    The sun's piercing light seems dull within its depths
    Every step is a foot, and every foot is a casting..
    ..of current, calm and collecting, schools of beastly things
    Teeth regime, spineless approach to feast a spleen
    Dwelling the deep abyss, with the clause of an eagles fist
    A beings purpose of death was blessed with reapers bliss
    Submerged in an oily coat, this image was so defined
    Imprisoned this embryo, stayed tinted to every eye
    Vision was undeveloped, form was often mistaken
    Surrounded by merky waters and every part it was taken
    This place harvest the races, since the dawn of the ancients
    Whatever came to shore would surely harbor replacements
    Creating tectonic plates shifts, flush due, bound
    ........volcanic eruptions to the mushroom clouds
    Such destruction the vibe of this passive pain
    While ashes fell to the earth, bleeding acid rain
    Drops staining the surface and splashed terrains
    N' over time a lucious green, rash was tamed
    That covered the plain, watery marsh planet
    Large savages, range features were all planted
    Only a few managed to get by from the horde
    Stare way to heaven and blink at the eye of the storm
    Double edge effect an age of no knife or a sword
    For anything that remained it was likely yours
    Skeletal composition seems to be laid on an axis
    So far in the system, beginning to gain a accent
    Still a baby but still this baby supports the right
    To be the deathbringer the same way that it harvest life
    And holds to it's bossums, the birth place of existance
    Never was treated right, but maybe she's too explicit
    Making change for the better, this era only's a messager
    Little do she know...

    ...evolution will get the best of her.
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    You... just built the fucking planet (and subsequently tore it down while doing it). That's amazing. Honestly, reading works like this are truly inspiring, especially when I'm already inspired by something else. The concept of writing about building earth is to me, astonishing. It's almost like a conquest, something I leave to read, because I never feel that I am able to portray it properly. I am incredibly glad I read it... twice. I'll probably read it again before I go to bed tonight. & Maybe tomorrow.

    Your words are truly inspiring; as whole, lines themselves, and on their own... I fell in love with this & printed it.


    [i[Every step is a foot, and every foot is a casting..
    ..of current, calm and collecting, schools of beastly things [/i]


    Teeth regime, spineless approach to feast a spleen
    (The thought behind that is awesome. The scientific nature of it, and the poetic caress.)

    N' over time a lucious green, rash was tamed
    That covered the plain, watery marsh planet


    Still a baby but still this baby supports the right
    To be the deathbringer the same way that it harvest life


    Truly great. Thank you.
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    by, of, for, or in itself; intrinsically.

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    uppin
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    hehhh dope shit x, didnt really read any SS verses this week but i remember the picture. the topic was crazy itself so i didnt really know what to expect.. the flow was eased and the imagery was poppin.. good portrayal of the earth in its infancy, a beautiful and unpredictable thing. barely a few weird wording spots, but the dope wording in it definitely outweighed it by far. what surprised me was the wordplays you added. like clause of an eagles fist and stare way to heaven. good read, gunna have to keep up with you in ss..

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    uppin
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

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    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    Lol sorry it took me so long to get to this piece.

    This was awesome dude, truely awesome. I really liked the concept, it's so hard to come across something fresh these days, so to see something like this is really cool. The flow in this piece was amazing, never fell off once, due in no small part to the wording and the brilliant rhyme scheme in place here. You used an impressive array of vocabulary, and used in a way that was both simple and breathtaking at the same time, a lot of the time people who use such varied vocabulary can come off as being a bit 'stuck -up', like they're saying 'I know this word, I bet you don't' lol, if you know what I mean, but you certainly didn't come across that way to me. My favourite part was the eagles fist/reaper's bliss bit, which was just awesome...all of this was brilliant though, definitely gonna nominate this...pieces like this aren't posted in this forum very often anymore.

    Props dude...dope shit.

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    Yes, I meant to nominate it.. but I always forget about doing things like that.
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    by, of, for, or in itself; intrinsically.

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    uppin
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    well worth the nomination and by far the best read from good ol' xtreme malice. your imagery was the key to this entire piece me thinks. your visual descrption in just about every line was amazing. i could literally see the world being put together bit by bit in my head as i read each line. nice rhymescheme... flowed very well off the tongue. i think the wording got a little iffy in some places but u mostly, it was good. great read man... keep writing.

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    Re: Knight'Mare Of Infant Earth [SS Verse]

    not bad. I'm gonna disagree and say this wasn't the best read I've seen you create, I mean... Blacketh basically tackled this picture in the same manner as you in SS last week.. it's a predictable route and it's straight from the pic, but you still managed to create a good/readable piece here... lots of good lines, elegantly phrased wording, very poetic feel seems to be what you were going for here.. not bad at all. ending had a pretty dope twist on it, everything lined up nicely to the picture just as it was meant to. so overall... props on a good/better than average read here man.. stay droppin.

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