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    some bars

    I took a long break from writing and im just starting to write again. critique me.

    You Don't Wanna Fuck Around Wit Me, Really Kid,
    Cuz I Leave Cats Bloodier Than A Hemophiliac On Their Period.
    If You Wanna Fuck Around, Den I'll Rip That Devil Spit,
    Look You In The Face And Spray, Make You Taste That Metal, bitch.
    Don't Snitch, Don't Speak, Bitch, No Doubt,
    Steal Ya Stash Up Out Ya Crib, Bang, Bang, And Im Out.
    Never Show Mercy, Im A True Killa To Tha Core,
    Leavin Bodies Froze Up, Like Freezers In The Morgue.
    I Don't Fuck Around, I Shoot At Cats Like Im Behind A Lens,
    Where Im From, More Dudes On Some Ice Than The Pens.
    Fuck Recreational Use, I Blow Tree On The Daily,
    Went From Weed To Pills, Now Dis E Makes Me Crazy,
    Hypnotize By Some Rhymes, Now Look What Dey Made Me,
    A Cold Blooded Killa, Some Might Call Me Crazy.
    I'm Chill

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    Re: some bars

    i just threw this together in about 5 minutes or less.
    I'm Chill

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