big pimpin

[teflon151]

keep the fitted to the front, a fresh cut,
lookin for a looker with a big mean butt,
im hella cleaned up, wont get blinged up,
no need for ice ima tear this scene up,
skill the blunt, twist up that buddah,
gonna get southern crunk like Luda,
when I'm in the club, aint none smootha,
she rollin as soon as I choose her,
hit the chron chron, drank a little bit,
my wit will make any broad submit,
grab her by the hip and then we 7-10 split,
so quick to tear apart her outfit,
no lights the cock-pit is star-lit,
im so freakin suave, call me Rico,
play your cards right girl, might be a sequel,
in case you havent heard, im kinda a big deal,
big pimpin pullin hoes so unreal!

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[teflon151]

upping

[Bruklor]

Could be the next Pitbull.

[sintense]

this could have been better.
still i liked this, i enjoyed reading it although it swayed a little from bit to bit.

[teflon151]

upping for some more feedback

[Tayteezie]

I liked this, I havent seen anything like this in the open mic. your flow was nice i liked how you had some nice multies up in there which made your piece fun to read you should keep going on with this maybe a hook and another verse and you have yourself a pretty cool song dude. this is some audio type shit you should look into that if you havent already. keep writing.

[Switch.]

Lol this was a funny piece..not in a rude way - i enjoyed it , sounds like a real typical rapper when they talkin bout girls n bein pimps n all that shit lol. It had a nice flow but some lines needed a lil work on wording , apart from that it was pretty good.

[teflon151]

i understand what you mean switch lol, the thing is everytime i write something original no one reads it lol so i figured id fuck wit a short keystyle that everyone knows. thanks for the feedback