emforce vs. hypo

[Extortion]

10 lines
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house rules

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check his profile pic its a small cat lookin to grow a big dick
hypo needs to reverse his lypo to grow into that big feline maverick
just roar a little more, cuz no one hears you
you pm'd the archtype to get treazon's battle closed cuz ya fears true
illmatic, like an addict with cocaine thats what im playing
even noobies see you on the block start rhyme slanging
grab that dog by the throat, little pussy trying to make em bloat up
cant stick ya styles in otha's minds.. not stuck, like a gunboat stickup
so chill the fuck out, when this battle's taboo swirles over
ya styles been changed so many times we'll call you new world order

[fo11]

First of Kid The pic in the profile is monsta that your fucked up eyes can never see
betta look atchu, nothin' to spar with... should i start boastin' who i've beat?
What You Do Is Just For Waste, So Kid, You’re Loosing On This Race,
Cause My Quick Diss Will force out emforce Till He’s ‘Nowhere To Be Found’, With A Punch To The Gut That Blew U Out Of Space!
I'll Give You One Last Cig, So Maybe The Pain Won't Register When You're Facin' Your Killer
But My Food For Thought Still Leaves Your With A Bad Flavor Like The Flames-To-The Filter
never thought i'd see some kid who sucked this badly at text
so Imma bash ya figure wit Stiks..and ya daddy is next.....

[fo11]

check with it^^

[The Nav Man™]

check his profile pic its a small cat lookin to grow a big dick
hypo needs to reverse his lypo to grow into that big feline maverick
0/3
just roar a little more, cuz no one hears you
you pm'd the archtype to get treazon's battle closed cuz ya fears true
1/3 not worded good, take your time..
illmatic, like an addict with cocaine thats what im playing
even noobies see you on the block start rhyme slanging
1/3 weak
grab that dog by the throat, little pussy trying to make em bloat up
cant stick ya styles in otha's minds.. not stuck, like a gunboat stickup
1/3
so chill the fuck out, when this battle's taboo swirles over
ya styles been changed so many times we'll call you new world order
2/3

vs

First of Kid The pic in the profile is monsta that your fucked up eyes can never see
betta look atchu, nothin' to spar with... should i start boastin' who i've beat?
1/3
What You Do Is Just For Waste, So Kid, You’re Loosing On This Race,
Cause My Quick Diss Will force out emforce Till He’s ‘Nowhere To Be Found’,
2/3
With A Punch To The Gut That Blew U Out Of Space!
I'll Give You One Last Cig, So Maybe The Pain Won't Register When You're
0/3
Facin' Your Killer
But My Food For Thought Still Leaves Your With A Bad Flavor Like The Flames-To-The Filter
0/3
never thought i'd see some kid who sucked this badly at text
so Imma bash ya figure wit Stiks..and ya daddy is next.....
1/3

em-5/15...weak
hypo-4/15...what the fuck is up with your structure

[KnowP]

rtf
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...372/index.html

so chill the fuck out, when this battle's taboo swirles over
ya styles been changed so many times we'll call you new world order

vs

naw

hypo, you gotta spit ya verse out loud before you drop cuz it was way too stretched
your punches were all over the place and didnt make sense cuz they was hella long
emforce, i saw where you was going with punches, but wording didnt connect well
keep at it

v/ emforce

[Tayteezie]

I felt like you both had different styles, none which im accustumed to seeing on Rb, but however you guys still did your thing. U felt emforcer came harder in this battle he had more direct punches and had the harder disses this was an overall enjoyable battle but i give my vote to emforce.

[Extortion]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=401366
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=415244
my vote links

[slushcurser]

rtf: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...530/index.html

check his profile pic its a small cat lookin to grow a big dick
hypo needs to reverse his lypo to grow into that big feline maverick
...
just roar a little more, cuz no one hears you
you pm'd the archtype to get treazon's battle closed cuz ya fears true
flow is completely off here em! could of done better on this bar
illmatic, like an addict with cocaine thats what im playing
even noobies see you on the block start rhyme slanging
playing and slanging... ehh, the ing connects them but you could worded this better
grab that dog by the throat, little pussy trying to make em bloat up
cant stick ya styles in otha's minds.. not stuck, like a gunboat stickup
wasn't really sure what u were getting at here kid, the bloat up and stickup don't really connect well either...
so chill the fuck out, when this battle's taboo swirles over
ya styles been changed so many times we'll call you new world order
alright, came hardest with your closer, still pretty weak though pal! I've seen u elevating but u didn't show much improvement in this one, take more time over your bars! think about structure and choose your words carefully... remember it's a text battle too and nobody can hear you saying this stuff, everything needs to read clearly, keep at it e

vs


First of Kid The pic in the profile is monsta that your fucked up eyes can never see
betta look atchu, nothin' to spar with... should i start boastin' who i've beat?
weak, playing off ems opener
What You Do Is Just For Waste, So Kid, You’re Loosing On This Race,
Cause My Quick Diss Will force out emforce Till He’s ‘Nowhere To Be Found’, With A Punch To The Gut That Blew U Out Of Space!
you wanna stretch your second line any longer?
I'll Give You One Last Cig, So Maybe The Pain Won't Register When You're Facin' Your Killer
But My Food For Thought Still Leaves Your With A Bad Flavor Like The Flames-To-The Filter
better, still nothing strong though
never thought i'd see some kid who sucked this badly at text
so Imma bash ya figure wit Stiks..and ya daddy is next....
i guess this might have been your best bar... it's the clearest one anyway

sheesh, hypo your structure needs a lot of improvement for your next battle... the way that i've laid your verse out above ^ it doesn't even reach 5 bars, other people have pushed it out into 5 bars but it completely kills the rhyme scheme. both of you could have done better with better structures, you both need to look at more vet battles to get an idea of how to build your verses effectively. keep on elevating, vote goes to EMFORCE, mostly for structure

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upp dat shit

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up for votes

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upp 3

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upp 4, need votes to close

[fo11]

uppin to get this closed

[H.T.]

never thought i'd see some kid who sucked this badly at text
so Imma bash ya figure wit Stiks..and ya daddy is next.....
-this was your best strucured bar man try throwing some direct punches nameplays personal's shit like that check other battles to see what other head's are doing that you can pick up on also read peoples votes and see what hey like you'll get it

vs

so chill the fuck out, when this battle's taboo swirles over
ya styles been changed so many times we'll call you new world order
-ha decent man

overall vote-Emforce both look like they diddn't put much into it but em had
the harder battle verse coming a lil more direct and with better structure
he also had lotb. both keep it up