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    Going Through the Motions.

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    my eyes open to a false dream i pause and think
    try to recall reality but it haunts me
    fleeing from my grips it taunts me taking life for granted I yawn deep,
    a breath of God's essence he gives me daily as a blessing
    from my eyes i wipe the corrosive cold of deception,
    sliding off my bed of bliss like a sly harlot i pray a prayer of redemption,
    confidently walking across an unstable floor im floored by my reflection
    gazing into a mirror of vanity
    i see a beast trying to possess the man in me
    hear the voice of his past casulties causually damning me
    opening the faucet of runnin rivers
    as the contaminated waters splash i feel a churning quiver,
    my mindstate a flashforward of a thought
    my heart is tryin to remember, forgotten it figures.
    brushing the teeth of a glutton and spitting out the crimes of a husband
    then looking back into the mirror as if it was nothing,
    now I'm ready to dress walking to my closet of death
    i set out my attire for the day, fresh.
    slip on a under shirt of secrets dress shirt of flattery
    fastened by buttons of debt,
    reinforced by suspenders holding up extortion and threats,
    slipping on the pants of false authority tighten by the belt of pride
    the tie of life tightens with each surprise,
    chokes me until im dead inside
    sticking my feet in the socks of solitude my soul melts with time
    wearing the shoes of humanity,
    i stand as a rock coasting with the violent tide
    throw on my jacket of feign security and my hat of strife,
    I'm ready to go tackle this life.
    opening a door of hope i walk the the path of the uncertain
    amongst a host of people walking the opposite direction on purpose
    going against the grain is hurting me
    passerby onlooker eyes probing me exposing me
    but yet never really knowing me
    i approach my school see,
    the drill sergants leading lines of hopeless fools
    right into the murderous mouth of democracy
    i joined the ranks a focused tool.
    in hope for food we clammer in to a dark dank room
    segregated were ushered to our predestined seats,
    like a laundry basket of humanity darks seperated from the lights
    out going from the less then meek
    the music sounds simultaneously we stand whilst spiritually falling,
    pledging allegiance to the divided states of america
    for all things imprisonment and injustice to all creeds
    as we sit sisters and brothers-
    gavels are given to the greedy, currency the corrupt,
    abortions to the mothers,
    rifles are distributed to the peace makers
    along with the command of conquering each other

    And That We Did

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    Re: Going Through the Motions.

    wow.. this was HOF right here.. you are def one of my fav writers.. I really liked this part

    now I'm ready to dress walking to my closet of death
    i set out my attire for the day, fresh.
    slip on a under shirt of secrets dress shirt of flattery
    fastened by buttons of debt,
    reinforced by suspenders holding up extortion and threats,
    slipping on the pants of false authority tighten by the belt of pride
    the tie of life tightens with each surprise,
    chokes me until im dead inside
    sticking my feet in the socks of solitude my soul melts with time
    wearing the shoes of humanity,
    i stand as a rock coasting with the violent tide
    throw on my jacket of feign security and my hat of strife,
    I'm ready to go tackle this life.
    opening a door of hope i walk the the path of the uncertain
    amongst a host of people walking the opposite direction on purpose
    going against the grain is hurting me


    .. it was very poetic.. great job.. collab with me plz

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    Re: Going Through the Motions.

    thanx for the HOF nom ne time fam just send me a topic or a verse and ill reply

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    Re: Going Through the Motions.

    this was very good - there were some incredibly sick parts - the whole section of clothing yourself with attributes was ill... a lot of other dope thoughts, and a lot of the piece was baby skin smooth flow too - there were some spots where it needed editing tho, and with the excelence of most of the piece, they stood out to me - if you gave this a couple proofreads i would say it deserves nominating... perhaps it does as is anyway - good shit - pz

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    Re: Going Through the Motions.

    thanx fam

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    This is my first time coming here, and I gotta say the standard is high as fuck. I loved the poetic style, with the nice rhyme schemes going the way through, but my favorite part was the whole general feel of the shit. The closet of death shit was insanity. This blew my mind, bro.

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    thanx fam

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    uppin...

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    thanx for having me at this site

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    a breath of God's essence he gives me daily as a blessing
    from my eyes i wipe the corrosive cold of deception,

    thats my fav bar


    but this whole mirror section

    gazing into a mirror of vanity
    i see a beast trying to possess the man in me
    hear the voice of his past casulties causually damning me
    opening the faucet of runnin rivers
    as the contaminated waters splash i feel a churning quiver,
    my mindstate a flashforward of a thought
    my heart is tryin to remember, forgotten it figures.
    brushing the teeth of a glutton and spitting out the crimes of a husband
    then looking back into the mirror as if it was nothin


    was fuckin nasty homey

    this is full of quoptes and sick ass bars, ur content was def a high level, ur flow was on point this was really sick man

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    btw the collab u did wit this was viscious as well, led poison tore it apart

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    Re: Going Through the Motions.

    thanx for the feed fam

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    this had some sick content in it man, read ok -but i can tell that if you spit it to a beat it would be much more crisp to hear it rather than to read it.. loved this series

    as the contaminated waters splash i feel a churning quiver,
    my mindstate a flashforward of a thought
    my heart is tryin to remember, forgotten it figures.
    brushing the teeth of a glutton and spitting out the crimes of a husband
    then looking back into the mirror as if it was nothing,
    now I'm ready to dress walking to my closet of death
    i set out my attire for the day, fresh.
    slip on a under shirt of secrets dress shirt of flattery
    fastened by buttons of debt,
    reinforced by suspenders holding up extortion and threats,

    nice vivdry, sick way to grasp the concepts by using everything around you to represent what or who you are, kinda describing the man inside?

    thats the feel i got from it, dope piece

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    thanx spit

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    uppin

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