quick 5 bars

[E.Kush]

im new to the forum so i just wrote up these bars to see what everyone thinks..



got kush in ma name cuz i smoke it till ma brain cant think the same
my words are like flames, im on fire i wudnt be unlit if i stood in the rain

im new to the game, but better skill is what i wish to proclaim
if you lack what i pack than you a lame, this aint hailo but il kill you with no aim

everybodys got a weakness, not even supermans invincible
im the cryptonites weakness, cuz like the terminator im clinical

my words are lyrical, when you up against me your feelings are cynical
im crazy il throw you off a pinnacle which is the roof of teachings that are rabbinical

rabbis, priests, monks and the people from the middle east,all powerfull symbols
im nasty like yeast and to say the least my lines hit you harder than punches from kimbo

[SHOK-VAL-U]

If you are new to the forum,but not others,you must surely know to read each forums rules befre posting...

[E.Kush]

well i did read the rules, and it said that you can drop written up bars or w.e. on this thread and have others judge them, so thats what i did...

[M-Phantom]

what shock is trying to say. Is bro you gotta leave 2 links at the bottom or in a repost of someone elses work.

[E.Kush]

oh, you mean of me judging someone else's work?

[E.Kush]

yea my bad i read the rules and didnt know that i need to give two links of feedback of which i gave to other people and it also said i need at least sixteen lines so i edited what i wrote up, lemme know what you think...


got kush in ma name cuz i smoke it till ma brain cant think the same
my words are like flames, im on fire i wudnt be unlit if i stood in the rain

im new to the game, but better skill is what i wish to proclaim
if you lack what i pack than you a lame, this aint hailo but il kill you with no aim

everybodys got a weakness, not even supermans invincible
im the cryptonites weakness, cuz like the terminator im clinical

my words are lyrical, when you up against me your feelings are cynical
im crazy il throw you off a pinnacle which is the roof of teachings that are rabbinical

rabbis, priests, monks and the people from the middle east,all powerfull symbols
im nasty like yeast and to say the least my lines hit you harder than punches from kimbo

watch your mouth or get killed~slow, tell ya girl to wash her mouth cuz she a bimbo
i roll you up and smoke you like indo, let the wind blow and clear up the smoke from my window

you dont know me i was born innocent tought to be vigilant, im not not jason but i grew up violent
call me your heiness, smoke so much im trapped in high-ness,killin my inside but im stayin silent

im not casper i put more feer in you than paranormal activity, got more power than an army with artillery
i plant thoughts melicious im sick with creativity, my hearts cold so i cant treat you with sensitivity


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...339/index.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...169/index.html

[M-Phantom]

for a brag rap it's just not there man. Your multi's are decent but not nearly enough, and nothing that really stands out. Punchlines were better than the last guys I read but still really weak.

I did like this punch though it made me laugh

im new to the game, but better skill is what i wish to proclaim
if you lack what i pack than you a lame, this aint hailo but il kill you with no aim

I use to play the first Halo a lot and I know how that shit was, so I can relate.

Your flow was aight, nice content, blah blah blah.

But man it's just nothing with impact, not really outside the box. I see you like Kimbo you should read my script Devourer.
Also I just posted a scrpit called 2012 drop some feed on that shit!

[E.Kush]

thanx alot on the feed bro, il check your shit out right now.