First rhyme?

[New2This]

It starts off slow but I speed it up as I go along, I just started writing this now cause I'm bored but, I don't have time to finish it.. I'll be back later..

I love rap, It's like talkin'
All you do is rhyme words
But in this game, something positive
to say is absurd
Open ya mind, and view ya tiny blip from the sky
Rotate the globe, zoom in...
Observe what happens
Ain't no Women & Children, laughin' and clappin'
Man it's just clans clashin' & blastin'
Death by the masses, while ya'll beef about rappin'?
Who has the best jewels, or who has the best cars?
Who has the most money or the finest ass broads?
Listen up little homie cause ya know I speak the truth
When a person has it all, that's just more to lose
So don't follow fools man just follow the rules and
You gotta keep it movin' striving for improvement
Give a lending hand to a man, a man you cool with

[Sw0ne]

Listen up little homie cause ya know I speak the truth
When a person has it all, that's just more to lose

[Alyse Miller]

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[Hush]

if this is one of your first forays into writing, I'd say that its a very promising start.

[Genocide]

definitely have a strong base to build on -i liked some of the ideas u dropped, that having alot and more to lose lines were sick as fucc man, keep dumpin

[Cody Nash]

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