House of Flying Bullets

[.Prime.]

Just felt like writing an intro of some sorts to a mix tape I'm working on called Side Effects. I need three verses for this peace though and I only have two so if anyone would like to add on the third just PM me about it I would be happy to include you in the song. The chorus is from the song Black Mozart by Raekwon.

House of Flying Bullets

Goes to the beat of

I lick shots like a mobster boss
But for a cause, cause I never take a loss
This is Side Effects though so you dont press pause
All you do is press play...listen...and then applause
I chocked out the mic already
Gaspin for air, shits thin and I'm breathin heavy
Bout bust open like a Louisiana levy
And I know this game aint really ready
And I be on point with my gun held steady
Bout to massacre your entrouage at the getti
Cause my aim be on point like a harpoon
And I know your ears blow when the mic go boom
First mixtape droppin comin at ya soon
Stayin stuck in your brain your very favorite tune
Yo my name is Mr. Prime, king of the crime
Cause I can bust a skull and a mic at the same time
Bitch I'll never tarnish and I'll always shine
Cause I stepped into the lemon not the lime

You better get that money, no matter, what you do
You gotta get that money, and represent your crew
And keep it true

My fresh kicks and gear be ready no doubt
Performing great shows cause my concerts be sold out
And I got people questionin why I keep at it
Why? Cause my rhymes be some kind of static
Like Frank White I'm Mr. John Gotti
Got an emcee askin who shot me
Well I did kid, cause I be a mobster man
Got me yellin at the cops catch me if ya can!
And if you can't thats alright you can always try again
Just don't think we'll ever become friends
Cause I run my block with force and assertively
The main reason bangers wanna come and murder me
Too bad though nigga my house be filled with gats
While others got houses filled with roaches and rats
This is house of flyin bullets so you betta come equipt
Cause everyone know my Bullets be hallow point legit

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[.Prime.]

uppin for feedback..

[yung nothing]

Not a bad rap, but I'm not a big fan of that style unless you have lived it. So, I mean lyrically it wasn't bad I suppose. the rhymes were pretty simple but I don't have a problem with simple rhymes as long as they are effective

[kriminal_perspekt]

these lines were simple and it almost seems you were pulling off some shit that rick ross might try mixed in with a little bit of jeezy but thats just what i thought and the rhymes were very simple, but they were effective in their own right... i think you should work on more complex things and build up your vocab passed the slang of today. thats what really makes things intensified and interesting.... in my opinion....

rtf please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...var=&p=7317757

[.Prime.]

Thanks man, I'll try to use btter vocabulary for my next drop. Uppin for feedback

[2triple0]

this was not that good... you need to work on your flow a bit more a lot of these lines didnt make a lot of sense... i think it was a good idea though for a mixtape introduction... it would really work well for something like that... just not something i am personally into... but i think you have some skills in your writing that shine well at times in this piece... some of my favorite lines in this piece were:

I chocked out the mic already
Gaspin for air, shits thin and I'm breathin heavy
Bout bust open like a Louisiana levy

and

Yo my name is Mr. Prime, king of the crime
Cause I can bust a skull and a mic at the same time
Bitch I'll never tarnish and I'll always shine
Cause I stepped into the lemon not the lime

still i felt disappointed in this verse... a lotta good concepts that were just wasted because the wording and vocab was off.. anyways good attempt at a drop i hope this wasn't too critical.. just my opinion other people may feel different

[.Prime.]

Naw its alright....but the flow goes well with the beat just more of an audio thing sorry about that.

[Josh M.]

GOD, this is fucking bad.

[Iglosone]

this was a cool drop.. It was simple.. but not too simple.. I think you got a smooth flow that I could hear in my head as I read it.. the rhymes were okay to.. I'd say as has already been said.. up the vocab a bit.. and come with more lines like this..

This is Side Effects though so you dont press pause
All you do is press play...listen...and then applause
-that was sick

for real.. I see some skills here bro.. and fuck yeah at your sig.. wu tang all day baby


if you can could you hit this piece up I did
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...845/index.html