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    I didn't get into rap for the fame or the cash or the game,
    I'm just the match to the flame sayin, "Fuck the capital gain!"
    Imagine the pain of only using half of your brain,
    It got me here, I don't know why but I'm glad that I came...
    If I hurt you it's just because of my virtue,
    If I subvert you it's just because that's what words do,
    If I describe you, you think like I do,
    And you're lied to by the people who say they're beside you,
    I may as well try to relate to my audience,
    And tell you something fresh instead of stating the obvious...
    You're just a number --- Don't believe me, look at the evidence,
    Your ID, Social Security and money with Presidents,
    It's funny the weapon is the culture itself,
    Humanity and Dignity were both sold for the wealth,
    I'm soaked in my doubts at home alone on the couch,
    My best friends are the TV, the computer, the phone and the house...

    Maple, oak or mahogony made an ogre's monstrosity,
    Skull open lobotomy my life was wrote like a comedy,
    No token you offer me could even slow the velocity,
    Flow and focus it audibly I've softly spoken the prophecy...
    I know it's philosophy, honestly I'm as confused as the next guy,
    But I guess I might as well give my one life my best try...
    Always thought I'd be good enough, thought the talent was rare,
    The balance is fair but I'm here and not allowed to be there,
    A coward's despair --- Has love really eluded me?
    Is it usually this tough to give up what it used to be?
    Beautifully painted, my memory's portrait,
    Daddy's Little Girl sittin' next to a poor kid...

    I threw in the towel but I'm takin' it back,
    Changin' the fact actin' like I was wavin' the flag,
    Angry and mad, I'm the Son of Hate and slavery's Dad,
    Painfully glad, that's when I grab the pen, paper and pad...
    No longer able to brag, the worst kind of superior,
    I thought I was smarter but my mind is inferior,
    Sometimes it's the fear that's your only reason to pray,
    Like at our worst moments we suddenly believe in the way...
    If God has deserted us, how can you blame Him?
    Shit, you're made then you're an atheist by age ten!
    And if that's the case then there's more to life still to come
    So all I ask of God twice is "Thy Will be Done."
    Why do I wake up? Why do I take drugs?
    Why do I cry 'til my eyes are dry cuz I hate love?
    Why suffer the pain, HUH?! Why sleep alone in the evenin'?
    I don't know, but I keep doin' it without knowin' the reason...


    Last edited by Engivale; September 10th, 2009 at 02:19 PM

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    Re: Reasons

    yo son -you just made me a fan man... sicc rhyming ability and the messages you dropped in here were so numerous and nasty i could probably qoute the whole piece and have something good to say about each bar, not one line was soft man -felt it thoroughly.. ill be checkin for more heres my breakdown as requested

    I didn't get into rap for the fame or the cash or the game,
    I'm just the match to the flame sayin, "Fuck the capital gain!"
    Imagine the pain of only using half of your brain,
    It got me here, I don't know why but I'm glad that I came...

    nice -this piece right here flowed exellently, the first bar was a great opener, the second bar was pretty brilliant -loved the mention of only using half of your brain, but in all actuality people use less than that because we dont know how to use the rest... something 8% of our brain is all we know how to use -lol

    If I hurt you it's just because of my virtue,
    If I subvert you it's just because that's what words do,
    If I describe you, you think like I do,
    And you're lied to by the people who say they're beside you,

    again -sicc flow.. the fact that words offend and its simply 'words' is what makes this powerful, it seems to me that your talking about yourself but feel like you may be hitting other cats as well -in other words if they relate than there on your level

    I may as well try to relate to my audience,
    And tell you something fresh instead of stating the obvious...

    ^^good idea

    You're just a number --- Don't believe me, look at the evidence,
    Your ID, Social Security and money with Presidents,

    deep -simple concept but so true that its deep when u think about it

    It's funny the weapon is the culture itself,
    Humanity and Dignity were both sold for the wealth,
    I'm soaked in my doubts at home alone on the couch,
    My best friends are the TV, the computer, the phone and the house...

    this is funny man -cuzz since my L is revoked.. you just described me without the doubts.. i stay pretty positive with shyt, but i can see where most cats on this site would probably fall right into this description... nice way to relate

    Maple, oak or mahogony made an ogre's monstrosity,
    Skull open lobotomy my life was wrote like a comedy,
    No token you offer me could even slow the velocity,
    Flow and focus it audibly I've softly spoken the prophecy...

    nice -love the rhyme scheme you lay down.. makes the flow n read so smooth and easy to enjoy.. not sure what you were gettin at with this area of shyt, but i liked it

    I know it's philosophy, honestly I'm as confused as the next guy,
    But I guess I might as well give my one life my best try...

    this was sick as shyt man -that second line about giving ya one n only life a try.. wow -makes u stop and think like dayum.. just think about all the niggas who dont even give themselves a chance -and theres nothing left when its gone, its like yo -this is ya only go around holmes.. u better do something now man, go hard or go home and just lay down dead.. crazy huh?

    Always thought I'd be good enough, thought the talent was rare,
    The balance is fair but I'm here and not allowed to be there,

    nice -i feel u man, cuzz its like yo -i know i have this sick mic and lyricist ability.. but why the fucc cant i ever get my producer to stop bullshittin yo? is it just not meant to be?

    A coward's despair --- Has love really eluded me?
    Is it usually this tough to give up what it used to be?
    Beautifully painted, my memory's portrait,
    Daddy's Little Girl sittin' next to a poor kid...

    wow -me having a daughter yo.. thats like every fathers worst dream man, having a beautiful daughter and her gettin involved with someone -who- even though may have all the talent in the world -they just dont have that spark to do anything with it.. sicc shyt

    I threw in the towel but I'm takin' it back,
    Changin' the fact actin' like I was wavin' the flag,
    Angry and mad, I'm the Son of Hate and slavery's Dad,
    Painfully glad, that's when I grab the pen, paper and pad...

    nice -u obviously put down your life experience and the things youve either heard -seen -or actually lived through in your pieces.. thats what i get from this, is your father a black man?

    No longer able to brag, the worst kind of superior,
    I thought I was smarter but my mind is inferior,
    Sometimes it's the fear that's your only reason to pray,
    Like at our worst moments we suddenly believe in the way...
    If God has deserted us, how can you blame Him?
    Shit, you're made then you're an atheist by age ten!

    dayum yo.. no doubt.. its like yo, my brain is way more advanced than my mind and body is able to realize.. at a young age you begin to make assumptions and fall into beliefs that carry you throughout life.. its all about experience at a young age.. i think children need to be payed more attention to because they end up exactly like this due to the things they either were/or were not sheltered from at a young age..and when there told a god exists but they never get responses from him, its harder to understand that when your so young -hence becoming athiest so early on-- deep

    And if that's the case then there's more to life still to come
    So all I ask of God twice is "Thy Will be Done."
    Why do I wake up? Why do I take drugs?
    Why do I cry 'til my eyes are dry cuz I hate love?
    Why suffer the pain, HUH?! Why sleep alone in the evenin'?
    I don't know, but I keep doin' it without knowin' the reason...


    and with that -youve just described my past in those few bars and i can completely understand 'why' the question is 'why' -try NA and youll understand to homie... and with that -ill keep coming back, 1
    Last edited by Genocide; September 10th, 2009 at 05:24 PM

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    Re: Reasons

    um this was thought provoking the whole time i was answering the questions you asked
    Only thing i see a problem is why isn't this a audio piece....
    I'm too fresh to be stale

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    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    Oh sweet Jesus, every fucking piece you write. CURSE YOUR DOPE DRUNKEN RANTS!!! But, fucking anyways. Amazing piece, once again Slim Shady. Your flow and wording is basically impossible for ANYBODY to match up with. Your concepts are top of the line all of the time. But fuck it, comes out dope anyways. This is another hall of fame nomination from myself. Can't wait to see your next 'I can't see straight' piece.

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    this was dope man.... i dont know how you do it but every piece you post up is dope...... the rhyme scheme on this i think is incredible and the vocabulary was good.... and the story of this was good too.... i think i prefer the third verse the most....

    I threw in the towel but I'm takin' it back,
    Changin' the fact actin' like I was wavin' the flag,
    Angry and mad, I'm the Son of Hate and slavery's Dad,
    Painfully glad, that's when I grab the pen, paper and pad..

    these lines stood out well

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    Here's a few bars I'd just like to quote before I feed into it..

    If I hurt you it's just because of my virtue,
    If I subvert you it's just because that's what words do,
    If I describe you, you think like I do,
    And you're lied to by the people who say they're beside you
    I know it's philosophy, honestly I'm as confused as the next guy,
    But I guess I might as well give my one life my best try...
    I threw in the towel but I'm takin' it back,
    Changin' the fact actin' like I was wavin' the flag


    About the piece now, this was amazing, hit right on the spot. Shot the emotion right out of the piece into me. And the structure was great, the flow wasn't sloppy or choppy, stayed smooth, and didn't throw me off anywhere. Definitely, the skills of a true writer. Had the dope rhyme schemes, nothing simplistic about it, pure dopeness, wording everything perfectly. All the way through this piece, was like a drug, I just kept wanting more, even when it was finished.....

    If this dopeness is the results of rapping with only half a brain, I'm getting out the chainsaw, lol.

    But on real shit, man, thanks for the read. I liked it.

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    thanks and up...

    adolf lemme go break you down didn't notice u had edited all that in lol

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    this was dope man.. straight up.. some good material in here. that last verse really hit home.. hard hitting lines... nothing to say bad about this piece really, it was one of your better rants to me.. definitely asking questions that I ask myself everyday as well, making points I've always wanted to make, I think I like this piece so much because I can easily relate to what you're saying as a whole in this... opened well, kept my attention, had that always crazy and sporadic flow (which by the way I always think is dope as hell.. I can read all your shit and say to myself, "Self.. this would sound cool as shit over an audio track" lol)... but seriously man.. way to go here, I hadn't seen you drop something on this level in a minute.. this one was a gem.


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    Your flow is sick man...I dont think you have a piece that I dont like.. period....The insights and ability you displayed here were very nice, great transitions and internal rhymes shown off as well..emotion also was very apparent throughout the whole piece. As Cry said, it had everday questions people ask themselves which made it easy, as a reader, to connect to. I thought the whole thing was excellent...Id just quote it all...so...good job on another exceptional piece....It was a very enjoyable read and keep em comin...take it easy...peace...

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    Check out 'Soundtrack Of My Life'.

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    well well well.....i feel the envy creepin up my spine..for real though this piece was miraculous..just like everything you write....now that thats said


    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    I didn't get into rap for the fame or the cash or the game,
    I'm just the match to the flame sayin, "Fuck the capital gain!"
    Imagine the pain of only using half of your brain,
    It got me here, I don't know why but I'm glad that I came...
    nice opener,its always better when someone writes and records for the love it and not the cash or fame..its been said but that doesnt make it not relevant...nicely worded and flowed better.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    If I hurt you it's just because of my virtue,
    If I subvert you it's just because that's what words do,
    If I describe you, you think like I do,
    And you're lied to by the people who say they're beside you,
    i love that..relating to your audience by letting them know that you both relate the same in some way even if its thinking....and you hint on a lonely overtone...too many fake people wanna be close only when it benefits them.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    I may as well try to relate to my audience,
    And tell you something fresh instead of stating the obvious...
    You're just a number --- Don't believe me, look at the evidence,
    Your ID, Social Security and money with Presidents,
    again relating.......ive seen the were just a number line..courtesy of atmosphere but that was an entire song about it..you did it very well though..conveyed your message and did it with finesse.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    It's funny the weapon is the culture itself,
    Humanity and Dignity were both sold for the wealth,
    I'm soaked in my doubts at home alone on the couch,
    My best friends are the TV, the computer, the phone and the house...
    the truth is the culture is the itchy trigger finger on the loaded gun...letting the people know your music is your basis and you seclusion is comforting..very nice.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    Maple, oak or mahogony made an ogre's monstrosity,
    Skull open lobotomy my life was wrote like a comedy,
    No token you offer me could even slow the velocity,
    Flow and focus it audibly I've softly spoken the prophecy...
    good god in heaven this flowed so nicely...such skill and proper deliverance with your multis...now the first line..that is a talkin about an ogres weapon..a wooden mallet or something of that sort...maybe not its early i havent had my coffee yet...either way it was ill.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    I know it's philosophy, honestly I'm as confused as the next guy,
    But I guess I might as well give my one life my best try...
    Always thought I'd be good enough, thought the talent was rare,
    The balance is fair but I'm here and not allowed to be there,
    i liked this as well....playin off your confidence in your skill and talent..never giving up....so smooth and easily read.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    A coward's despair --- Has love really eluded me?
    Is it usually this tough to give up what it used to be?
    Beautifully painted, my memory's portrait,
    Daddy's Little Girl sittin' next to a poor kid...
    love is difficult to come by when other passions consume us so deeply.....a very smooth and well written aprt..the imagery in this part was over the top..so was the other parts though but it really stood out for me in this part.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    I threw in the towel but I'm takin' it back,
    Changin' the fact actin' like I was wavin' the flag,
    Angry and mad, I'm the Son of Hate and slavery's Dad,
    Painfully glad, that's when I grab the pen, paper and pad...
    never givin up....this flowed very nicely as well..i like the im the son of hate and slaverys dad..the anger builds up so you have to grab the pad and pen and release.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    No longer able to brag, the worst kind of superior,
    I thought I was smarter but my mind is inferior,
    Sometimes it's the fear that's your only reason to pray,
    Like at our worst moments we suddenly believe in the way...
    playin off peoples inability to believe in something bigger until something tragic or horrible happens...its true..all these people who never believed in god and then they almost died and all of a sudden they have religion...i liked this part alot.so much truth in it.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    If God has deserted us, how can you blame Him?
    Shit, you're made then you're an atheist by age ten!
    And if that's the case then there's more to life still to come
    So all I ask of God twice is "Thy Will be Done."
    again still workin that angle and its so true that it has to be elaborated on...we as a society are very self centered and ignorant....flowed nicely.

    Quote Originally Posted by Engivale
    Why do I wake up? Why do I take drugs?
    Why do I cry 'til my eyes are dry cuz I hate love?
    Why suffer the pain, HUH?! Why sleep alone in the evenin'?
    I don't know, but I keep doin' it without knowin' the reason...
    just pushin along..i liked the ending..it put it all in perspective...why do we push ourselves to do the same things day in and day out..maybe its just being accustomed to a schedule..sometimes its more than that..this piece was so well written and the concepts were very nicely done...it didnt fall short at all and as all of your other writtens this was very ill...i enjoyed reading it and as always cant wait for the next one...its nice to see some true skill come back in OM just when its at its pinnacle of crap..too many shitty writers come in here and fuck the forum up....no amount of criticism would deter these assholes from not elevating like they seem to do..nice drop and ill be waitin for more....keep droppin the hottness.~1~


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