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    Black Roses


    Still dwelling upon her greetings
    a greet that haunts me everyday
    she told me not to fall attach
    that nothing is ever set in stone
    damn, isn't that the truth
    so young, so naive
    to believe she's what I need
    but little did I know of her
    her heart was heavily polluted
    corrupted and filled with pain
    its not 'til now I realize it all
    I fell in love with a broken heart
    she put on a fake smile
    painted with my own brush
    then dragged me through the mud
    just to leave me with dirt
    so cliche to say : love hurts
    but damn, isn't that the truth
    time has passed
    seasons go about their months
    and age starts to show itself
    I'm older, and more skeptical
    no longer that young boy
    searching endless days for her
    now, i'm the one being searched for
    shattering innocent souls
    dragging them through the mud
    for the next person to pass on
    you can call me barbaric
    the word love to me is tasteless
    they say i'm hopeless
    that i'm going to end up alone
    a lonely soul I am, at home
    sitting watching espn by myself
    should rid of this love couch
    without a woman to cook for me
    losing taste for take out
    then.. right before kickoff
    my doorbell rings
    I go to see who it is
    they must've took off
    all that's left is a letter
    and black roses
    the letter reads:
    "You must not fall attach
    nothing is ever set in stone
    .. thats what I fed you
    the young you
    so you can grow old, alone
    just like I needed you to
    because for every broken heart
    another must be broken
    its a the chain reaction
    dont take it personal, my love"

    speechless, lost of words
    I tried to make sense of this
    especially of the ending
    but all I could think of
    was how she has my heart
    and how I still love her.
    Last edited by Kenny Folk; September 3rd, 2009 at 07:24 PM
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    Re: Black Roses

    This was a decent read duke. I see you have a command over your language but the concepts you use make you or break you. Your piece had a voice which is good.

    You need o grab two links bro

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    Re: Black Roses

    This is the second piece posted by you in the past few days without links. Please respond to at least 2 pieces in here and I will reopen this.
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