LLL Season 11: Week 9
Current champion: Kenny
Standard rules apply (found in the LLL Office).
Check in by Wednesday.
Drop by Friday, 11:59 PM (Eastern).
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Vote on atleast 5 battles.
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Good luck.
I'm having a party with a bunch of fat chicks and you're invited
invite accepted.
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You're a sad, sad bitch whose been here forever and stunned none
And look his Usertitle's contradicting,..o wait you've never won one
Ever seen him throw a harsh punch? I think not rejects!..
And he also thinks NOT, after i tie a rope tight around his lean neck
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
^^^That's brutal, that fat bitch is so utterly disgusting..
I wouldn't touch her with a 10 ft poll,.. if your 2 incher was rusting
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
^^^^^Originally Posted by The Archetype
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
Trash verses, trash life, man your whole intent in it's trash..
And did i mention your Garbage man....picked you up instead of the bag
Last edited by Manic.; September 4th, 2009 at 09:36 AM
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You agreed to party with some fat chicks. Your acceptance I was glad to see
Your mom and sister were already there. May as well complete the family tree
Manic's light years ahead of the curve. He's got this text shit under siege
Rocking that Futuristic style... so he's next to be the joke of the league
Dude has always been a failure. Society thinks your parents never oughta kissed
The only thing you ever succeeded at was escaping the reservoir tip
Chicks run immediately from Manic. Kid will never get any ass
Bitches in his bed have knee jerk reactions... since his dick's too small to grasp
Sure the league's at a low but keep your 2 cents. We don't want to hear you speak
Shit, to coin a phrase... would cost more than this faggot makes in a week
This kid grew up poor as fuck. Always complained about it to his mother
So when she yelled put a sock in it... she was just telling him to finish his supper
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
...blah...
Last edited by The Archetype; September 4th, 2009 at 11:04 PM
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
Clever...
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
Good flip on "wears the pants"...funny...
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
Nice...
VS
Manic's light years ahead of the curve. He's got this text shit under siege
Rocking that Futuristic style... so he's next to be the joke of the league
Haha...made me laugh...
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
Mine's better!
I got Manic by just a bit...
Bit more wit displayed, bit more creative.
Peace
like born i was feeling the same lines
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
vs
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
I felt Arch was relying to much on the concepts and less personal/name play.
Manic was more consistent and had a few more quotes
vote=Manic
I don't know if this would count or not, I have battled in the LLL before..
but here's my feedback vote if not..
Manic
You're a sad, sad bitch whose been here forever and stunned none
And look his Usertitle's contradicting,..o wait you've never won one
aight flip, very played concept..
Ever seen him throw a harsh punch? I think not rejects!..
And he also thinks NOT, after i tie a rope tight around his lean neck
Horribly played
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
this is decent at best... "now you'll see this bystander up quick" doesn't make sense unless you read it as "Bi stand her up quick". deeming it as incorrect wordplay usage
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
i dont know why people are liking this, very weak
^^^That's brutal, that fat bitch is so utterly disgusting..
I wouldn't touch her with a 10 ft poll,.. if your 2 incher was rusting
wtf? no
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
this was a cool-ish misdirection punch. best bar of your verse imo
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
fuck no, personal or not, that shit is played
Trash verses, trash life, man your whole intent in it's trash..
And did i mention your Garbage man....picked you up instead of the bag
i see the misdirection, but this shit is just ridiculously played even before text battling was invented
Like I said, you have potential, you just need to start searching your concepts different places because that shit was one of the most played verses i've ever seen in the LLL
no hate
vs.
The Archetype
You agreed to party with some fat chicks. Your acceptance I was glad to see
Your mom and sister were already there. May as well complete the family tree
this was... bad
Manic's light years ahead of the curve. He's got this text shit under siege
Rocking that Futuristic style... so he's next to be the joke of the league
ha coo
Dude has always been a failure. Society thinks your parents never oughta kissed
The only thing you ever succeeded at was escaping the reservoir tip
meh
Chicks run immediately from Manic. Kid will never get any ass
Bitches in his bed have knee jerk reactions... since his dick's too small to grasp
you gotta get really creative to make a diss at the penis work, this isnt a good example lol
Sure the league's at a low but keep your 2 cents. We don't want to hear you speak
Shit, to coin a phrase... would cost more than this faggot makes in a week
played ass concept, weak flip
This kid grew up poor as fuck. Always complained about it to his mother
So when she yelled put a sock in it... she was just telling him to finish his supper
wtf NO, corny ass weak landing horseshit
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
this all you got with that kinda ammo? lol, weak blount flip
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
lol, this isnt the freshest but i've not seen it flipped this way before. pretty comical.
had like 1 bar i liked from manic
and about 2 i liked from arch
rest was a played fest from manic, and from arch some played some just weak.
overall my vote would go to Archetype.
what are you talking about played..show me those concepts used. show me um pleeaase and bystander up quick does make sense..i had him lying dead, he got up quick, and the wp is bi stand her up quick. your a dumbass please show me these concepts being used..pleeease
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Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
^^^That's brutal, that fat bitch is so utterly disgusting..
I wouldn't touch her with a 10 ft poll,.. if your 2 incher was rusting
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
VS
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
I have manic taking this with fresher concepts/harding hitting punches & crisp wording.
you didnt say bystander got up quick. you left a vital word out for it to really make sense and not be forced.
and you really want me to get examples of the playedness?
because I will..
^^^
yepp.
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You're a sad, sad bitch whose been here forever and stunned none
And look his Usertitle's contradicting,..o wait you've never won one
nah..
Ever seen him throw a harsh punch? I think not rejects!..
And he also thinks NOT, after i tie a rope tight around his lean neck
aiight, coo
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
not bad.. coo w/p
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
eh, aight
^^^That's brutal, that fat bitch is so utterly disgusting..
I wouldn't touch her with a 10 ft poll,.. if your 2 incher was rusting
nah.. seen this type of hit before
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
aiight, decent. it's a bit indirect.. coulda been harsher
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
coo..
Trash verses, trash life, man your whole intent in it's trash..
And did i mention your Garbage man....picked you up instead of the bag
lol, funny
vs
You agreed to party with some fat chicks. Your acceptance I was glad to see
Your mom and sister were already there. May as well complete the family tree
nah..
Manic's light years ahead of the curve. He's got this text shit under siege
Rocking that Futuristic style... so he's next to be the joke of the league
lol coo
Dude has always been a failure. Society thinks your parents never oughta kissed
The only thing you ever succeeded at was escaping the reservoir tip
eh.. ok
Chicks run immediately from Manic. Kid will never get any ass
Bitches in his bed have knee jerk reactions... since his dick's too small to grasp
aiight
Sure the league's at a low but keep your 2 cents. We don't want to hear you speak
Shit, to coin a phrase... would cost more than this faggot makes in a week
never heard "coin a phrase" before, but this was decent
This kid grew up poor as fuck. Always complained about it to his mother
So when she yelled put a sock in it... she was just telling him to finish his supper
nah.. not feelin it
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
coo, fresh.. Born also did one of these this week
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
okay
this was seriously dead-even for me.. both had good concepts..
some executed poorly, but more fresh than not..
it was a good match.. but I got manic by a bit here... enjoyed his connected punches more so than arch's I think.. great match tho..
vote Manic
You're a sad, sad bitch whose been here forever and stunned none
And look his Usertitle's contradicting,..o wait you've never won one
ehh
Ever seen him throw a harsh punch? I think not rejects!..
And he also thinks NOT, after i tie a rope tight around his lean neck
super played
Why you creeping on my girls fag, I'll have you lying dead..
Now you'll see this Bystander up quick and opt for a guy instead
ehh the wp feels forced. its not played in a sense, just felt unneccessary here. plus the punch isnt that hard
Cuz ya girl manhandles you, and fucking tells you what to do..
We know who wears the pants in that relationship and it's waste size-42
ok'ish
^^^That's brutal, that fat bitch is so utterly disgusting..
I wouldn't touch her with a 10 ft poll,.. if your 2 incher was rusting
ehh
He'll need a heart, kidney, or lung donation after this poundin..
But if you're looking for blood Type...has it all over the floor around him
lmao. nice
Quit dragging this shit out, I'll leave you battered and shocked..
We see that you have zero written and we'll say the same after you drop
i liked this
Trash verses, trash life, man your whole intent in it's trash..
And did i mention your Garbage man....picked you up instead of the bag
horrible finish
You agreed to party with some fat chicks. Your acceptance I was glad to see
Your mom and sister were already there. May as well complete the family tree
nah
Manic's light years ahead of the curve. He's got this text shit under siege
Rocking that Futuristic style... so he's next to be the joke of the league
ok
Dude has always been a failure. Society thinks your parents never oughta kissed
The only thing you ever succeeded at was escaping the reservoir tip
ok
Chicks run immediately from Manic. Kid will never get any ass
Bitches in his bed have knee jerk reactions... since his dick's too small to grasp
ehh. concepts been done before, this flip was kinda lacking
Sure the league's at a low but keep your 2 cents. We don't want to hear you speak
Shit, to coin a phrase... would cost more than this faggot makes in a week
played
This kid grew up poor as fuck. Always complained about it to his mother
So when she yelled put a sock in it... she was just telling him to finish his supper
lol. kinda corny but funny in a childish way
I didn't even feel like dropping anything so I'll just point out all your flaws
I'll be Blount... and like the football player, punch this faggot in the jaw
yea theres alot of these concepts flying around in a few diff leagues right now. this one didnt do anything great with the event
We're both elevating like crazy but choosing you to win was the wrong guess
You keep taking a stab at being decent... but just end up murdering concepts
yea this concept is played too. doesnt work for me
overall i expected both to come with some of their best shit since its both of their's first shot to geta title match. but, i felt like both actually slacked this week. some played shit on both ends, some weak concepts. overall i felt manic execution was alittle more crisp and his highlights were slighlty stronger.
v/manic
blackeloheimannunakirap
Don't sway Manic..
Manic wins, Archetype loses....
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