Rippin Up Mics ft C0MpL3XsHUN

[.Prime.]

Me and C0MpL3XsHUN decided to do a collab so here it is. No real message just spitten cocky words. Complexshun is the first verse I'm the second.


i went first-verse to get my words-worth
i could go after you,and you'd still get served-first
i'm earths-curse,expect-nothin-legal because i prefer-worst
injectin'-rusty-needles so i can watch your nerves-splirt
i make germs-flirt,my diseases got me rhyming-fresh
pleased from the sight-of-death,but i cant describe-it-yet
visions got me vampire livin',a certain kind-of-flesh
live through the wire? i trap my victims inside-the-mesh
help,i think my minds-a-mess
i'm running through ya boiler room with lighters-pressed
but theres always a nicer-streak inside-the-freak
see i had to live a whole year just to find-a-week
my mind is foldin',searchin' for weapons to parole-with
used to own a mask until a boy called mich myers stole-it
took my knife too,pide and jump-suit
so at halloween i jumped-school
and put so many holes in him i didnt know which ones to look-through
FUCKKK YOUUUUUUUUUUUU

Yeah you heard my boy com
Me plus him equals a bomb
I'm from the streets of Wortown
Got game like playstations (play-stay-shauns)
Yeah we the ones....yall niggas wanna be
You cant see me...invisible family tree
Man I'm like Cena bithes payin me with them FEMAS
Come at you with surprise like I'm hurricane katrina
Cause my flow be on fire, lyrical desire
You could also start to call me Mr.burnin Goodyear tire
Cause your expired man just like Biggie Smalls and Mr.T
Aint biting lyrics man, I aint a fucking buzzing bee
I'm just rippin up mics cause it's easy a hell
By the way tell ya mom that she can always ring my bell
Burnin up your house man, this pyro just hasen't fell
Burnin tree houses man, like that show with Drake Bell
My shit sells, diabolic meanice tearing up this bitch
Rappin this hard just makes me wanna flip the kill switch
Fry your ass till it dies like they did in world war two
If I offend you too much please man don't sue
I'm an original gangsta comin up with real songs
I drive up girls asses like I'm one tight ass thong, BITCH!

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[teflon151]

damn i love the flow on that verse pulse, good shiiiit. lyrics were good and so was the vocab, the second verse however needed some work. but good job overall. RTF

[.Prime.]

uppin for critique

[KINGofEVRYTHING]

ight imma feed this drop...yall still both need to feed mines bruh...so let me get thuis rollin...

i went first-verse to get my words-worth
i could go after you,and you'd still get served-first
i'm earths-curse,expect-nothin-legal because i prefer-worst
injectin'-rusty-needles so i can watch your nerves-splirt

good opener...i rele felt tha flow n tha multiz...wordin was good...i mean u came out pretty hard...shud def pull in tha reader...good metaphorz bruh...

i make germs-flirt,my diseases got me rhyming-fresh
pleased from the sight-of-death,but i cant describe-it-yet
visions got me vampire livin',a certain kind-of-flesh
live through the wire? i trap my victims inside-the-mesh
help,i think my minds-a-mess
i'm running through ya boiler room with lighters-pressed

im diggin that sick metaphor u used...good flow again..,multiz added more to it...ur wordin is good mayn...love how u decribing ur sickness...ur last bar was crazy...i rele like how u said that shyt...

but theres always a nicer-streak inside-the-freak
see i had to live a whole year just to find-a-week
my mind is foldin',searchin' for weapons to parole-with
used to own a mask until a boy called mich myers stole-it

ur first bar was fuckin good...had to live a whole year just to find a week!...wow...good multiz too...flow was on point...like ur wordin...2nd bar was ight...i did like ur michael meyerz shyt...funny line...

took my knife too,pide and jump-suit
so at halloween i jumped-school
and put so many holes in him i didnt know which ones to look-through
FUCKKK YOUUUUUUUUUUUU

idk rele understand tha first bar...what does PIDE mean?...n what does JUMPED SCHOOL mean?...2nd bar was funny as hell...good killer lines...good ending...

Yeah you heard my boy com
Me plus him equals a bomb
I'm from the streets of Wortown

not a bad opener...talkin bout what u rep...good shyt...flow was on point n wordin was good...

Got game like playstations (play-stay-shauns)
Yeah we the ones....yall niggas wanna be
You cant see me...invisible family tree
Man I'm like Cena bithes payin me with them FEMAS
Come at you with surprise like I'm hurricane katrina

first bar was ok...i mean yeah u got game like playstations?...but i mean u cuda made that even better...i dont get invsible family tree...CENA from UFC?...n u meant to say BITCHES...last line was pretty good talkin bout fema n hurricane katrina...funny shyt...

Cause my flow be on fire, lyrical desire
You could also start to call me Mr.burnin Goodyear tire
Cause your expired man just like Biggie Smalls and Mr.T
Aint biting lyrics man, I aint a fucking buzzing bee

first bar was ok...i mean thats not very creative...good multiz n flow tho...ur 2nd bar was funny but with some more thought n better wordin for that concept u cuda wrote a killer line...

I'm just rippin up mics cause it's easy a hell
By the way tell ya mom that she can always ring my bell
Burnin up your house man, this pyro just hasen't fell
Burnin tree houses man, like that show with Drake Bell

good shyt puttin ur title in tha song...n funny diss on fuckin pplz moms...ur second bar was weird tho...so ur a pyro...n who is drake bell?...im sry ur metaphorz lost me on that...

My shit sells, diabolic meanice tearing up this bitch
Rappin this hard just makes me wanna flip the kill switch
Fry your ass till it dies like they did in world war two
If I offend you too much please man don't sue
I'm an original gangsta comin up with real songs
I drive up girls asses like I'm one tight ass thong, BITCH!

first bar was good...i like tha anger n shyt...demonic shyt is always good...show em how scary u are...killin em with flows is always good too...2nd bar wasnt bad but u went hard...then u sounded rele weak...dont mix that...last bar was pretty good...tellin em what ur bout n ur last line was pretty dam funny...u always wanna leave em with something good...yall both did well...i think i liked COM more...but it was close...yall need to KEEP WRITING THAT HOOD SHYT nSTAY UP ON UR CRAFT!!!

GOT DAMMIT RTF ON MY DROPZ!!!

[The Incredible Hulk]

''idk rele understand tha first bar...what does PIDE mean?...n what does JUMPED SCHOOL mean?...'' - i meant pride, jumped school meant i skipped class,i was saying michael myers took my knife and jumpsuit(in the movie...lol) so i waited for halloween and killed him...

Anyway,PRIMEPULSE, heres my feed...

You could also start to call me Mr.burnin Goodyear tire

^ nice concept,could have worded it alot better....

I'm an original gangsta comin up with real songs
I drive up girls asses like I'm one tight ass thong, BITCH!

^ once again,good concept,but worded pretty bad


what you write DOES hold something in it,but you need to work on your wording,rhyme structure and non-basic rhymes

in parts if you had worded them lines i picked out correctly,they would have come off alot sicker,and remember yes lines can be too stretched,but your problem is sometimes they're too short...

p.s yeh we the bomb man,keep writing

things you did well with :

concepts
general focus on the piece in hand
aggression

[.Prime.]

Thanks for the feedback guys.

Uppin for more feedback

[.Prime.]

uppin

[KINGofEVRYTHING]

yo PRIME go feed my piece dude...shyt help me out...

[.Prime.]

uppin