Heart Failure

[.Prime.]

I'm like a disease you start catchin me with ease
I run with the breeze like the air you smoke from them trees
Cause I rip through your spleen and cause your heart to stop
Woulda quit a bit but your times runnin off the clock
I talk the talk and even can walk the walk
While yall niggas just askin for the shock to stop
Because you see this spark plug man its intended for you
And if I burn you too much man please dont sue
I hate it when niggas start to claim their blue
Cause I'm as platinum as the band called U2
Always strapped to my body cause I am packin
This song is called Heart Failure man I aint heart stackin
I run the surgery like I'm a surgery offical
Use a laser gun to open your chest, sizzle
Imma rap to my heart stops, to tickle
But dont ever tell dem mall cops, they litte
To nothin to me because talk is cheap
I drive my jeep through the road
Beep beep, like the sound of your respirator waitin to sleep
Gonna end ya life like I am HIV
So dont be offended by the shit that I fire
Cause all I got motivating me is gettin hired

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to me your piece wasnt a complete waste of time to read i jsut wish you didnt drop this nigga that nigga this all through ur verse it makes it seem like you have a short term vocabulary and i rather not read material as of this i gain no knowledge at all from reading your drops there just a bunch of lines thrown together please try to take a more heart felt way of expressing your lyrics try writing something that means something enough of this lil wayne punchline shit ur trying to do.


RTF

Friendly Nightmares

[.Prime.]

k, almost forgot

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updated with feed hit my piece collab

[.Prime.]

I have been writing some pieces that mean stuff but all in all I write what makes me happy AKA this. I have done some of the deep expressive rhymes but to me personally it gets annoying. I know you have probabaly seen a lot of this, I'm just trying to diversify myself you can check out my other rhyme Blowin Up the Projects for something more meaningful.
This is more for the hype and for the fun of hip hop.