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PrOmIsE.:.
DEADPROOF
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“Why am I fighting to live, if I'm just living to fight
Why am I trying to see,
when there aint nothing in sight
Why am I trying to give, when no one gives me a try
Why am I dying to live, if I'm just living to die?"
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wow this extremely tough. i was feeling both of your flows ... i liked dp's imagery more so ima have to give it to him. vote/dp
Up'n
“Why am I fighting to live, if I'm just living to fight
Why am I trying to see,
when there aint nothing in sight
Why am I trying to give, when no one gives me a try
Why am I dying to live, if I'm just living to die?"
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By the way.. You have 7 ups, that should be a DQ if u ask me
For years there's been surprise horses in this stable
Just 6 wins in, I'm the realest nigga on this label
Both used the topic well IMO. Promise lead me with description and story telling was useful. DP was more consistant and actually went in depth with emotion and mental state of subject; picture was portrayed better in his verse in regards to the feelings behind the scene....
Get high everyday at the park, it feels better after dark,
So I can fall asleep, just thinkin there can be a new start,
I hate my father, he puts that leather belt to good use,
I'm lucky I can't overdose on weed, or I'd die from drug abuse,
v/ DP
RTF me -vs- Chuck Massey
Up..
For years there's been surprise horses in this stable
Just 6 wins in, I'm the realest nigga on this label
ugh WOWW uppin.. this is gay CMON people vote ill RTF
For years there's been surprise horses in this stable
Just 6 wins in, I'm the realest nigga on this label
My vote goes to dead.
He painted the picture more. more in detail and flowed good.
Promise you lines where a bit stretched out and you didnt set the scene, so to speak, as well as dp did.
v - dp
RTF, me vs links
Busta you being serious???
My lines are stretched??? LOL!
“Why am I fighting to live, if I'm just living to fight
Why am I trying to see,
when there aint nothing in sight
Why am I trying to give, when no one gives me a try
Why am I dying to live, if I'm just living to die?"
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i like dead's imagery, and the descriptions even for a short 10 lines.
vs
the deadproof reference was meh. the wording was slightly off with forced rhyming here and there. but not bad though.
v/dp
I hate my father, he puts that leather belt to good use,
I'm lucky I can't overdose on weed, or I'd die from drug abuse,
So I cut my wrist, try to spell words with the razor blade,
But I ran out of arm space, all I can write is I HATE.."
Vs
Hate to admit but i need help because my life is overtaken by my depression,
I used to torture myself with blades for fun but now im doing it for a lesson.
I wasn't all this bad how did my life end here, why i have a grown so sad?
Didn't help having a drug addicted mum and DEAD be PROOF as i blame this on my dad.
All together you both came efficently an effectively. The world play, delivery, emotions came out shining, both of you's showed your writing ability well. Played concept, but fuck it.
V/ DP. On point with delivery, simple vocab but worked it nicely.
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